Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

I have to say I don't always like romance poetry (they all sound the same sometimes) but yours is very good and well written.
Teresa

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

thank you Teresa

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

angels' body ripples - angel's body - for singular possessive
good alliteration and assonance in lingers on lips
vivid sensory and sensual appeal
effective closing rhyming couplet
Brooke :-)

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

thanks Brooke

Comment from DR DIP

Exceptional

fk GW you are the consummate swooner
I'm getting an erection just reading this haha
Seriously you want to go write for mills and boon
forget 50 shades of grey, give the chicks 50 bottles of deepwater love!!
thanks for sharing lol

dip

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

LOL Dr way to go mate

Gary

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Hi deepwater - A passionate and quite erotic love poem. I'm not so sure about love on the sand - sand everywhere - a bit uncomfortable - but I suppose 'who cares' when love takes over. Hot read. Regards Dorothy

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

thank you for this Dorothy

Comment from Drew Delaney

Excellent

Nicely written, gw. On desert sands. What more can be to making love upon desert sands? A lot of sand clinging to damp bodies. LOL Nice poem of love and romance. I can only dream of that now. That's okay. I'm fine with that.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

thank you for this

Comment from ravenblack

Good

You paint quite a sultry scene here, but spags and word choices really drag it down. Angels' body ripples- plural possessive does not work. Why not angelic body ripples? Fragments lingers- fragments linger; divine, - divine.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

Thanks

Comment from seaglass

Excellent

This poem and the artwork is very sensual. My first thought was how hot that sand would be but the clarification of nighttime takes that objection away. This poem leads erotic imagination to complete the fantasy.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

Thank you

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

Another lovely write. Soft, silky and hazy...almost like the desert that surrounds within your image. It reminds me of something from 'Lawrence of Arabia' or 'Scheherazade'
Soft nouns and verbs caressed by soothing adjectives.
A soft tingling write.
Well done,
RGstar

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

Thank you RG

Comment from Sefiros

Good

This is obviously about sex. You use a lot of erotic terms that puts your intent very broadly and unapologeticly. Nice job.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

Yes I did

Comment from padumachitta

Excellent

Hi...I just read a very different poem from you. i had to read this twice just to get it clear:-)
It is a lovely, gentle pasionate piece. A lovely image to hold.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014

Thank you