Life, Love, and Other Disasters
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Spring Refrain"A collection of poems on these themes
52 total reviews
Comment from artisart4u
Your poem about someone who puts off doing things is nice.
It rhymes well and I like the way it is written.
I like your repetition of words like, "I'll exercise tomorrow..." is a good example.
Good luck with your poem.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Your poem about someone who puts off doing things is nice.
It rhymes well and I like the way it is written.
I like your repetition of words like, "I'll exercise tomorrow..." is a good example.
Good luck with your poem.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Thanks for the great review and the six stars.
Comment from granny goes viral
Hee hee. Right, start tomorrow. Good poem. Liked the whole thing. I don't even make those promises to myself anymore.
'Cause I know I won't. So why disappoint myself? FanStory, that is my exercise.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Hee hee. Right, start tomorrow. Good poem. Liked the whole thing. I don't even make those promises to myself anymore.
'Cause I know I won't. So why disappoint myself? FanStory, that is my exercise.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Thanks, Granny.
Yup most of us of a certain age know the fte of New year resolutions...
Comment from Wendyanne
Lol many people will be able to relate to this funny piece of well written poetry in rondeau redouble style. The exercycle's in the store-room still;
there's just a touch of rust upon the rim.
Your words I treasure, thank you, Doctor Phil,
"Throw off this funk and head down to the gym."
I think we all have exercise equipment going rusty lol. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Lol many people will be able to relate to this funny piece of well written poetry in rondeau redouble style. The exercycle's in the store-room still;
there's just a touch of rust upon the rim.
Your words I treasure, thank you, Doctor Phil,
"Throw off this funk and head down to the gym."
I think we all have exercise equipment going rusty lol. Well done.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Thanks for the great review.
Comment from HAREEDS
Everybody says they'll exercise in the Spring and then they put it off. Your poem covers this perfectly with its humour. The same old routines of diet and exercise that everybody promises to do but somehow never gets around to.
A very well expressed poem, good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Everybody says they'll exercise in the Spring and then they put it off. Your poem covers this perfectly with its humour. The same old routines of diet and exercise that everybody promises to do but somehow never gets around to.
A very well expressed poem, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Thanks, Hareed.
Comment from Louise Michelle
Procrastination can often be our downfall. I find it easier to just plunge into something I don't want to do. I really enjoyed this fun and whimsical poem, and especially the ending. It's as if you are giving your readers a wink. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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Procrastination can often be our downfall. I find it easier to just plunge into something I don't want to do. I really enjoyed this fun and whimsical poem, and especially the ending. It's as if you are giving your readers a wink. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 21-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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Thanks, Lou and here's another wink! ;O)
Comment from Goodauthor
I enjoyed the read. I cannot do this poetry form, even though, being French, I love it. Anyway, the flow is smooth and it has been enhanced by punctuation to which emphasizes the message, a sentiment with which many agree and have used every single day. Next year will be different, I'll start my diet tomorrow, and believe the excersize will follow. Good luck.
Linda
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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I enjoyed the read. I cannot do this poetry form, even though, being French, I love it. Anyway, the flow is smooth and it has been enhanced by punctuation to which emphasizes the message, a sentiment with which many agree and have used every single day. Next year will be different, I'll start my diet tomorrow, and believe the excersize will follow. Good luck.
Linda
Comment Written 21-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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Merci beaucoup. Peut-etre vous pouvez ecrire un rondeau en francais! And 'un petit sourire' for the words about punctuation. Your last review took me to task for not using punctuation!
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Beinveneu, I have forgotten the French my grandmother taught me. One day I hope to relearn it, and go live in the land of my ancestors. I fell in love with it years ago while doing a college research project.
Comment from Nosha17
We are always full of good intentions when it comes to dieting and exercising, me, too! Nice light-hearted poem with good use of rhyming and imagery. Enjoyable read, good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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We are always full of good intentions when it comes to dieting and exercising, me, too! Nice light-hearted poem with good use of rhyming and imagery. Enjoyable read, good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 21-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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Thanks for the great review, Faye!
Comment from Ben Colder
That should get it done, poet. Determination is the key. Follow the yellow brick road. Slick and trim will come. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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That should get it done, poet. Determination is the key. Follow the yellow brick road. Slick and trim will come. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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Thanks for the great review.
Comment from thee-name
Good rhyming poem. A true life experience.
I'LL EXERCISE TOMORROW. YES I WILL
THROW OF THIS FUNK AND HEAD TO THE GYM
A DIETS OVERDUE. I KNOW THE DRILL
THIS SPRING YOU'LL SEE THE NEW ME, TAUT AND TRIM
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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Good rhyming poem. A true life experience.
I'LL EXERCISE TOMORROW. YES I WILL
THROW OF THIS FUNK AND HEAD TO THE GYM
A DIETS OVERDUE. I KNOW THE DRILL
THIS SPRING YOU'LL SEE THE NEW ME, TAUT AND TRIM
Comment Written 21-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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Thanks for the great review.
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THANK YOU!
Comment from Neonewman
Who hasn't said this at least one hundred times in their life. I enjoyed the work greatly and give you five stars. There is a saying " I forgot to go to the gym again today, this makes five years in a row." God Bless.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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Who hasn't said this at least one hundred times in their life. I enjoyed the work greatly and give you five stars. There is a saying " I forgot to go to the gym again today, this makes five years in a row." God Bless.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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Thanks for the great review.