The River of My Life
a memoir35 total reviews
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, spiritual echo, very open discussion about the relationship with your mother that was damaged by her failing to protect you as a child and refused to give you encouragement for helping her when she was sent to your doorstep. I am glad you are experiencing success with the medicine right now. I pray it continues. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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this is an excellent write, spiritual echo, very open discussion about the relationship with your mother that was damaged by her failing to protect you as a child and refused to give you encouragement for helping her when she was sent to your doorstep. I am glad you are experiencing success with the medicine right now. I pray it continues. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Thanks so much, for the stars and always for your kindness.
Comment from Dom G Robles
I love this story. The opening lines alone with the figures of speech that introduced the theme in whole are full, like an inverted pyramid that had all its elements of the whole picture that had caused the reader to proceed further....
"like a river that has been dammed I had to carve through rocks and craters to find a new path". That introduction with the picture covered everything. Then the story began to move smoothly with the strong foundation, layer by layer, paragraphs by paragraphs that led to the end with beauty and elegance.
Carefully crafted, the description of a true and real story- mainly a conflict by the writer with her own mother was the main theme. To appreciate the beauty of the story, the reader must see from the point of view of the writer. I have a different background as I have always felt my mother was a Saint but it did not affect my feelings. I read and saw the story in the eyes of the writer and all along put myself inside the writers mind, experiences, and feelings. That ultimately made my decision for the six stars.
My sincerest congratulations. I noted that this is a contest story. (But not trying to influence any of the readers), I believe this piece is one of the best stories I have read for sometime. A nonfiction story that, to me, can stand and exceed others for some time in this creative site, FanStory. My sincere congratulations. Dom
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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I love this story. The opening lines alone with the figures of speech that introduced the theme in whole are full, like an inverted pyramid that had all its elements of the whole picture that had caused the reader to proceed further....
"like a river that has been dammed I had to carve through rocks and craters to find a new path". That introduction with the picture covered everything. Then the story began to move smoothly with the strong foundation, layer by layer, paragraphs by paragraphs that led to the end with beauty and elegance.
Carefully crafted, the description of a true and real story- mainly a conflict by the writer with her own mother was the main theme. To appreciate the beauty of the story, the reader must see from the point of view of the writer. I have a different background as I have always felt my mother was a Saint but it did not affect my feelings. I read and saw the story in the eyes of the writer and all along put myself inside the writers mind, experiences, and feelings. That ultimately made my decision for the six stars.
My sincerest congratulations. I noted that this is a contest story. (But not trying to influence any of the readers), I believe this piece is one of the best stories I have read for sometime. A nonfiction story that, to me, can stand and exceed others for some time in this creative site, FanStory. My sincere congratulations. Dom
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Dom, when you write with passion and conviction the words just flow and this response is both uplifting and grammatically correct.. Thanks for your continual support and the stars.
Comment from dennis0530
A river is only as placid or turbulent depending on its location. As with any river in our lives, there are many factors affecting the flow.
Our own metaphoric flow in life sometimes encounter barriers, turns and twists. But depending on how we navigate will determine how we will negotiate the course.
But sad, the mother's traumatic experience over-wrought her personality. It is said that experience shapes us and influences our actions and thinking.
In each succeeding generation, lessons learned, unlearned and rejected will become factors on how they will cope with life.
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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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A river is only as placid or turbulent depending on its location. As with any river in our lives, there are many factors affecting the flow.
Our own metaphoric flow in life sometimes encounter barriers, turns and twists. But depending on how we navigate will determine how we will negotiate the course.
But sad, the mother's traumatic experience over-wrought her personality. It is said that experience shapes us and influences our actions and thinking.
In each succeeding generation, lessons learned, unlearned and rejected will become factors on how they will cope with life.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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It's location and the riverbed, sliding over sand and bouncing over rocks. Thanks for the feedback.
Comment from Jean Lutz
In time the softness of consistent water leaves its impression on the hardness of stone. Keep pouring out that within you. Just this week someone commented to me that she would like to write, but didn't know if she could because she wasn't smart. I told her to just write from the heart.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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In time the softness of consistent water leaves its impression on the hardness of stone. Keep pouring out that within you. Just this week someone commented to me that she would like to write, but didn't know if she could because she wasn't smart. I told her to just write from the heart.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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You are right, erosion has definitely smoothed a lot of my rough edges. Thanks for the generous stars and the warm feedback.
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As I read this well-penned piece, I was thinking of you as the water.
Comment from heyjude
Spiritual Echo, You have done a superb job of telling
about your life with all the horrors and heartache.
I was glad that in the ending it sounds like you have
peace and see your life full of great possibilities.
So glad to see in your author notes that a new drug
cleared up the problem with psoriasis. This writing
should do great in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Spiritual Echo, You have done a superb job of telling
about your life with all the horrors and heartache.
I was glad that in the ending it sounds like you have
peace and see your life full of great possibilities.
So glad to see in your author notes that a new drug
cleared up the problem with psoriasis. This writing
should do great in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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The drug and the escape from physical pain allowed me some normalcy and a pain-free existence. It is at least five to ten years out before it's available to the public, but even then...the shots cost $3-$4K a month. Who can afford that? For me, it's free.
Thank you for reading and my deepest appreciation for the stars.