2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Desolating Grief "A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was really an awful time for the people in that area of Greece. You have written a brilliant 5-7-5 here, it is really sad. The trees have been hurt and would love a hug to make everything better. Good luck in the contest. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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That was really an awful time for the people in that area of Greece. You have written a brilliant 5-7-5 here, it is really sad. The trees have been hurt and would love a hug to make everything better. Good luck in the contest. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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thank you so much sandra, i appreciate your review
Comment from pipersfancy
I remember the news reports on this terrible fire - wherever wild fire strikes, the toll is that of devastation. Such a terrible loss of human life, and land resources in this event.
Good luck in your contest,
PF
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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I remember the news reports on this terrible fire - wherever wild fire strikes, the toll is that of devastation. Such a terrible loss of human life, and land resources in this event.
Good luck in your contest,
PF
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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thank you for your excellent review and kind words :)
Comment from Delahay
I don't remember hearing about these fires in Greece. I did not know they were prone to wildfires. I hear so much about them in the western U.S. but I guess I never really thought of Greece as being forested. Your poem and the picture that accompany it are so stark and grim.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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I don't remember hearing about these fires in Greece. I did not know they were prone to wildfires. I hear so much about them in the western U.S. but I guess I never really thought of Greece as being forested. Your poem and the picture that accompany it are so stark and grim.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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thank you for your excellent review and kind words :)
Comment from Michaelk
Fire, the ultimate horror to a tree. Your imagery is quite vivid. The trees pleading to Heaven is poignant imaginative. Desolating grief paints a stark picture that completes the story on a 'what do we do now' note.
Well done, speaking volumes in only seventeen syllables.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Fire, the ultimate horror to a tree. Your imagery is quite vivid. The trees pleading to Heaven is poignant imaginative. Desolating grief paints a stark picture that completes the story on a 'what do we do now' note.
Well done, speaking volumes in only seventeen syllables.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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thank you for your excellent review and kind words :)
Comment from visionary1234
I can't believe that this kind of disaster went virtually unnoticed by the rest of the world! What is the 'demotic form' though please? Wonderful 5 7 5!
from a fellow tree hugger,
Sharyn
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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I can't believe that this kind of disaster went virtually unnoticed by the rest of the world! What is the 'demotic form' though please? Wonderful 5 7 5!
from a fellow tree hugger,
Sharyn
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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thank you for your excellent review and kind words :)
Comment from Sis Cat
Wow, this is an effective Tree-Hugger 5-7-5. Your choice words, charred image, fiery red font create a dramatic impact. I closed my eyes to recite your poem to see what image came to mind. "Pleading Branches to Heaven" is the line that stood out because I can see those charred, upraised branches pleading to heaven.
My one suggest is to use lower case throughout to enhance readability. Capitalizing every word like a newspaper headline impedes the flow of your words. You want your words to sink into the reader's consciousness.
This is an excellently written and presented Tree-Hugger 5-7-5. Thank you for sharing and I wish you success in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Wow, this is an effective Tree-Hugger 5-7-5. Your choice words, charred image, fiery red font create a dramatic impact. I closed my eyes to recite your poem to see what image came to mind. "Pleading Branches to Heaven" is the line that stood out because I can see those charred, upraised branches pleading to heaven.
My one suggest is to use lower case throughout to enhance readability. Capitalizing every word like a newspaper headline impedes the flow of your words. You want your words to sink into the reader's consciousness.
This is an excellently written and presented Tree-Hugger 5-7-5. Thank you for sharing and I wish you success in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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thank you for your excellent review and kind words :)
Comment from angel123
Your poem is well written and it held my attention. It flows well and I enjoyed reading it. Your artwork choice goes well with your thoughts and good alliteration of words Longest, Lasting.
Angel123
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Your poem is well written and it held my attention. It flows well and I enjoyed reading it. Your artwork choice goes well with your thoughts and good alliteration of words Longest, Lasting.
Angel123
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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thank you for your excellent review and kind words :)
Comment from JourneyHolm
This is really sad... I felt like it was more biographical than it was picturesque. I learned a lot, but didn't really get a picture of what it might have been like in my mind. "Desolating grief", however, does come close. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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This is really sad... I felt like it was more biographical than it was picturesque. I learned a lot, but didn't really get a picture of what it might have been like in my mind. "Desolating grief", however, does come close. Thank you for sharing.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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thank you
Comment from TAB_that's me
Great imagery and satori. Good alliteration in longest/lasting. Great tree hugger poem and contest entry - good luck.
teresa
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Great imagery and satori. Good alliteration in longest/lasting. Great tree hugger poem and contest entry - good luck.
teresa
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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thank you teresa, i appreciate your review
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello author, a sad but true 5-7-5 poem. Of special note:
Pleading Branches To Heaven
(Good imagery)
Just sharing my afterthoughts:
And so ...
With open arms
Man reaches for the sky
And joyous tears
stream from the Heavens.
Man has been redeemed.
Great artwork choice. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Hello author, a sad but true 5-7-5 poem. Of special note:
Pleading Branches To Heaven
(Good imagery)
Just sharing my afterthoughts:
And so ...
With open arms
Man reaches for the sky
And joyous tears
stream from the Heavens.
Man has been redeemed.
Great artwork choice. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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thank you latebloomer, I appreciate your review