Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Hi anon - this is a very good entry to the contest. In all three haiku your lines l and two interconnect perfectly and your satori is excellent in all three - well done. Warm regards Dorothy x

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Thanks so much my friend for your vote of confidence and very kind comments. Blessings.......................

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Exceptional

Your haiku suite has a strong message. Our veterans have been forgotten by most. Sure the politicians talk about them, but that is all they do--TALK.

Your haiku suite speaks to the problem. When will this change?

Good job on the format and the overall presentation.

Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for such a stunning review, six star rating and best wishes. Blessings....................

Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

I couldn't agree more with the theme - I guess there aren't many votes to be gained by adopting a humane, fair and grateful policy.

I suspect some will wonder where the nature aspect is in these haiku, and may consider them more akin to senryu, but I'm no great expert.

Good luck and best wishes, Ray.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Ray,
Thanks so much for your review and best wishes, greatly appreciated. Blessings...........................

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

The veterans are forgotten after they return, and that shows in the lack of help available. The message here is more important than the poem. I hear you loud and clear. Well done. Les

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for your very kind review and for receiving and understanding the message within. Blessings

Comment from TAB_that's me

Good

A great tribute to our heroes. Your interconnected lines are good. You single lines are more of a summary than an 'aha' moment.

I wouldn't call these 'city' haiku - only the second refers directly to the city and the others could be small towns, rural areas, etc.

I'm not sure this will qualify in the contest.

Teresa

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 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for your very kind and honest review, I have made some changes, could you please review to see if I am in compliance with the rules it would be greatly appreciated. Blessings........................................

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

Your first two haiku seem to comply with the rule for haiku in general and for this competition in particular, however the third one has three consecutive words starting with the same letter "F", "fought for freedom"; see rule three above. I would suggest you change this to comply before they decide to disqualify you. Should you resubmit, let me know and I will review again and regrade.

2nd Review.
Yes now you are in full compliance. BVest wishes for the compertition.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for your very kind and honest review, I really appreciate the heads up. I have made the necessary changes and pray that it meets the rules for this contest. Your kindness and time is greatly appreciated. Blessings.....................

reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Thanks so much my friend for taking the time to review and change your rating; I really appreciate your kindness, forever grateful............Blessings

reply by Pantygynt on 28-Aug-2015

You're welcome.

Comment from OLA THOMAS

Excellent

I think is the best logical haiku suite I have read in the category of the contest. simple theme, clear message and well grounded delivery. Well done.

ola thomas

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for your review and very kind comments. Blessings

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

Hi mystery author, This is a really good entry for this particular competition, I enjoyed this the most because of the wonderful content and message within, I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.

 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for your review, very kind comments and best wishes. Blessings........................

reply by Eric1 on 29-Aug-2015

It was a pleasure to review my friend.

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

This is a fine haiku suite
with a great message
Possible problem with concrete imagery
but good grammatical connection
excellent satori lines
Good connection between the three haiku
make it a very good suite
I might have used "struggle" in the first haiku to match plural of veterans
Good luck in the contest



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 Comment Written 28-Aug-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Aug-2015

Thanks so much for your very kind and honest review very grateful for your suggestion. Blessings