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Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
Your warm and sincere sentiment are expressed beautifully in soft imagery which float upon waves of lilting meter. Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
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Your warm and sincere sentiment are expressed beautifully in soft imagery which float upon waves of lilting meter. Nicely done and I thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016
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Always appreciate your reviews!!!! thank you thank you!!!!
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My pleasure.
Comment from Bill Schott
This love poem, Only You, has a subtle progressive syllable count from seven to ten per stanza. That is a cool style that is like a secret only some can share. Perhaps the code to future interests.
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This love poem, Only You, has a subtle progressive syllable count from seven to ten per stanza. That is a cool style that is like a secret only some can share. Perhaps the code to future interests.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016
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Oh now you know i'll share my secret code with you!!!!!!
Inkwell Climb
The Inkwell Climb was invented by our own Poet Laureate Richard on 20/06/2010. It requires four lines per verse, with a syllable count per line of 7,8,9,10, and a rhyme scheme of a,b,c-c,b, changing in each succeeding verse: that is, verse two, d,e,f-f,e, verse three g,h,i-i,h, etc. Please, note that line three contains an internal rhyme that matches the last syllable. Presentation must be either centered, or aligned left. Three verses minimum, with no maximum requirement.
Thank you for the wonderful review!!! Always appreciate you!!!
Comment from dragonpoet
Good choice of words to evoke the love you feel and how it has brought light and warmth into your heart and life.
I like the internal rhyme the line three of each abcb quatrain. It make the flow very smooth.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016
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Good choice of words to evoke the love you feel and how it has brought light and warmth into your heart and life.
I like the internal rhyme the line three of each abcb quatrain. It make the flow very smooth.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 29-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2016
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Another sweet review!!! hugs :-)
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You're welcome.
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Comment from Dawn Munro
Ah, Susan, this is lovely - your rhyme works wonderfully, but it's the fabulous use of metaphor that appeals most to me, a poetic device often abused, in my opinion, the metaphor only something the author can decipher. Yours is plain, but evokes beautiful imagery. Well done!
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Ah, Susan, this is lovely - your rhyme works wonderfully, but it's the fabulous use of metaphor that appeals most to me, a poetic device often abused, in my opinion, the metaphor only something the author can decipher. Yours is plain, but evokes beautiful imagery. Well done!
Comment Written 29-Dec-2016
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ohhh Dawn!! What a fabulous review!!! smiling and smiling away.......
Comment from judester
This is such a meaningful love poem.I love the line, my daydreams foretold. It is wonderful to find someone to share and understand our meaningful dreams. Breath life within is apt and nicely descriptive. Cheers, judester
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This is such a meaningful love poem.I love the line, my daydreams foretold. It is wonderful to find someone to share and understand our meaningful dreams. Breath life within is apt and nicely descriptive. Cheers, judester
Comment Written 29-Dec-2016
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Thank you!!! I so appreciate your reviews!!!!! HUGS
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Cheers, j
Comment from Ella25
Where loves shines through and opens the heart for you. It is so strong and brings happiness to our lives. Well written, lyrical verses balanced by image and colour. Blessings, Ella
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Where loves shines through and opens the heart for you. It is so strong and brings happiness to our lives. Well written, lyrical verses balanced by image and colour. Blessings, Ella
Comment Written 29-Dec-2016
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thank you Ella for such a fine review!!! Hugs
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You are welcome. Sending hugs to you as well.
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
Susan, this is a wonderful expression of what love truly feels for you. Looking into your heart, realizing what may have been there and opening your heart to this truly special someone.
Everything about this most exceptional piece of poetry is exciting!! Beginning with the stunning artwork of a heart exploding with a new found happiness that I feel you richly deserve. The other thing is how you use the acension of your syllable count in each stanza which begins at seven and adds a syllable per line which culminates to ten. Pure genius Susan because this shows to the poets on FS your truly great creativity. This entire poem reflects who you are!
Very well thought out, written and presented to the site.
I hope you enjoy this day and I would like to wish a very healthy and prosperous New Year of 2017 my friend,,,,,,,,,,,, Jimmy
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Susan, this is a wonderful expression of what love truly feels for you. Looking into your heart, realizing what may have been there and opening your heart to this truly special someone.
Everything about this most exceptional piece of poetry is exciting!! Beginning with the stunning artwork of a heart exploding with a new found happiness that I feel you richly deserve. The other thing is how you use the acension of your syllable count in each stanza which begins at seven and adds a syllable per line which culminates to ten. Pure genius Susan because this shows to the poets on FS your truly great creativity. This entire poem reflects who you are!
Very well thought out, written and presented to the site.
I hope you enjoy this day and I would like to wish a very healthy and prosperous New Year of 2017 my friend,,,,,,,,,,,, Jimmy
Comment Written 29-Dec-2016
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Jim, yInkwell Climb
The Inkwell Climb was invented by our own Poet Laureate Richard on 20/06/2010. It requires four lines per verse, with a syllable count per line of 7,8,9,10, and a rhyme scheme of a,b,c-c,b, changing in each succeeding verse: that is, verse two, d,e,f-f,e, verse three g,h,i-i,h, etc. Please, note that line three contains an internal rhyme that matches the last syllable. Presentation must be either centered, or aligned left. Three verses minimum, with no maximum requirement. ou spoil me with your wonderful reviews. I cant take credit for the form....
I'm happy you enjoyed my attempt at this form....HUGS
Comment from Dean Kuch
Align my heart once again,
and hold my head above water.
Where darkness has been ... breath life within,
flushed by our glow, becoming much hotter. ... Au contraire, ma chere. But there is beauty, breath and life in deep darkness, too.
You simply have to be perceptive enough and look a bit harder to find it.
Have a ever seen a million twinkling stars in broad daylight? The stars shine brightest when night is at it's darkest hour.
Nice poem, Susan. Filled with light, and love, and laughter...as usual.
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Align my heart once again,
and hold my head above water.
Where darkness has been ... breath life within,
flushed by our glow, becoming much hotter. ... Au contraire, ma chere. But there is beauty, breath and life in deep darkness, too.
You simply have to be perceptive enough and look a bit harder to find it.
Have a ever seen a million twinkling stars in broad daylight? The stars shine brightest when night is at it's darkest hour.
Nice poem, Susan. Filled with light, and love, and laughter...as usual.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2016
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Ahh but Deano, the beauty in darkness is not lost on me. Anything worth having is worth the effort...it is usually in the darkest hours truth can be found. There is a rawness and mystery held within the night...a stillness, that at times one can feel like an intruder. At the same time, a glance towards the heavens...can take your breath away. AHHHHHHH. :-) Dean, thank you for this wonderful encouraging review!! I always appreciate you!!! (ps Don't go)
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You're more than welcome, Susan.
It is always a pleasure.
Comment from MelB
Where darkness has been ... breath life within, - breath(e)
A beautiful poem with wonderful imagery and description. The artwork goes perfect.
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Where darkness has been ... breath life within, - breath(e)
A beautiful poem with wonderful imagery and description. The artwork goes perfect.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2016
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YEP!! got it!! Thank you for reading and the correction!!!
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You're welcome.
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a beautifully written and illustrated love poem what rhymes well. I wondered if this is meant to be:
"Where darkness has been ... breath (breathe?) life within,
Your new photo is lovely.
Marilyn
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This is a beautifully written and illustrated love poem what rhymes well. I wondered if this is meant to be:
"Where darkness has been ... breath (breathe?) life within,
Your new photo is lovely.
Marilyn
Comment Written 28-Dec-2016
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Yep!! corrected!! thank you for reading..always appreciate it!! hugs