Love Me Once More
Love is strong and will return to me34 total reviews
Comment from Debbie Pope
From your notes, I am assuming this is a true story. If so, my heart breaks for you. I have no idea how much time has passed, but your parents probably can't love, period. I want to say there is no excuse for this, but they are probably totally empty. You could and should be their reason for living. The tragedy of your brother's death is more than doubled by their treatment of you. Your following words sum up everything--unseen, unloved deserving no breath. Your parents must find the strength to erase these feelings that they have caused. You certainly write beautifully. You clearly have a gift. May you find solace in that.
reply by the author on 28-May-2018
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From your notes, I am assuming this is a true story. If so, my heart breaks for you. I have no idea how much time has passed, but your parents probably can't love, period. I want to say there is no excuse for this, but they are probably totally empty. You could and should be their reason for living. The tragedy of your brother's death is more than doubled by their treatment of you. Your following words sum up everything--unseen, unloved deserving no breath. Your parents must find the strength to erase these feelings that they have caused. You certainly write beautifully. You clearly have a gift. May you find solace in that.
Comment Written 27-May-2018
reply by the author on 28-May-2018
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Thank you so much, I thought this one may be a fizzer as found it hard to write (explain) I hope strength and time will come****kahpot
Comment from Artasylum
Hey Kahpot,
This is well structured and compelling poem. Good write. Good read and very Eerie imagery. Yours, diana
"I needed help to grieve and cope
which you discarded without hope
you need to look past brothers' grave"
reply by the author on 28-May-2018
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Hey Kahpot,
This is well structured and compelling poem. Good write. Good read and very Eerie imagery. Yours, diana
"I needed help to grieve and cope
which you discarded without hope
you need to look past brothers' grave"
Comment Written 27-May-2018
reply by the author on 28-May-2018
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Thank you very much for this wonderful review****kahpot
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about love is lost and will return, love once more as before is the prayer even after death, the desire as if continues at both part; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 28-May-2018
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This speaks about love is lost and will return, love once more as before is the prayer even after death, the desire as if continues at both part; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 27-May-2018
reply by the author on 28-May-2018
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Thank you very much for this wonderful review****kahpot
Comment from aanneee
This made me cry and it is really terribly difficult to say 'What a great write' under circumstances as this. This breaks my heart as it appears your truth so your words really touch - and I cry...Dinah
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reply by the author on 28-May-2018
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This made me cry and it is really terribly difficult to say 'What a great write' under circumstances as this. This breaks my heart as it appears your truth so your words really touch - and I cry...Dinah
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Comment Written 27-May-2018
reply by the author on 28-May-2018
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Thank you very much for this wonderful review****kahpot