A Potpourri of Poetic Curiosities
Viewing comments for Chapter 281 "Earthshine"A collection of poems showcasing unusual words
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Comment from Ulla
Hi Craig. This is an awesome poem, which tells a beautiful story within about the moon, earth and our existence. Yes, I do hope that one day we will shine as at the moment all seems rather bleak. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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Hi Craig. This is an awesome poem, which tells a beautiful story within about the moon, earth and our existence. Yes, I do hope that one day we will shine as at the moment all seems rather bleak. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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Thank you for the lovely comments, Ulla. We can always hope, I guess. Most grateful, Craig
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The author's words are strong, interesting and
extremely thought provoking. The pondered on the author's
words and theme of this poem. The artwork is perfect and
compliments this poem well.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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Excellent Poem! The author's words are strong, interesting and
extremely thought provoking. The pondered on the author's
words and theme of this poem. The artwork is perfect and
compliments this poem well.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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Thank you so much for the lovely comments, I'm most grateful :)
Comment from Scarbrems
Nicely done, Craig. 'Reflective/invective/collective' rolls off the tongue in the most fabulous way. Your interstellar approach to humanity and its failings here puts our species in proper context, as organisms existing within a solar system, rather than as the purpose for the system.
Thanks for the star-studded read, and another great word.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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Nicely done, Craig. 'Reflective/invective/collective' rolls off the tongue in the most fabulous way. Your interstellar approach to humanity and its failings here puts our species in proper context, as organisms existing within a solar system, rather than as the purpose for the system.
Thanks for the star-studded read, and another great word.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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Thanks so much, Emma, for popping in to review this one, and for the lovely comments. I'm glad you enjoyed. Cheers, Craig
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was so well written, with a moral attached. If only we could live in peace and harmony, there is nothing stopping us, only the people who rule lives in a dictator fashion. The average person in every country around the world, does not like the wars and fights leaving them homeless and helpless. I also liked your author's notes. I learnt something today, the meaning of 'Planet' and it makes sense too. Well done, I enjoyed reading both the poem and the authors notes. :) Sandra xx
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That was so well written, with a moral attached. If only we could live in peace and harmony, there is nothing stopping us, only the people who rule lives in a dictator fashion. The average person in every country around the world, does not like the wars and fights leaving them homeless and helpless. I also liked your author's notes. I learnt something today, the meaning of 'Planet' and it makes sense too. Well done, I enjoyed reading both the poem and the authors notes. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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Thanks very much for the thoughtful, and most lovely comments, Sandra. Most grateful, and I'm glad you found it informative. I like where "planets" comes from, as well :) Cheers, Craig
Comment from Kelly Hanna
As always, CD I always enjoy your word of the day! You've doe a phenomena job of setting a creepy, dark mood. The presentation was great. The poem flowed really well and read like a story. The words used were complex, which shows talent. You did great on this. I enjoyed the word of the day, and your ability to make a fantastic poem to go along with it.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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As always, CD I always enjoy your word of the day! You've doe a phenomena job of setting a creepy, dark mood. The presentation was great. The poem flowed really well and read like a story. The words used were complex, which shows talent. You did great on this. I enjoyed the word of the day, and your ability to make a fantastic poem to go along with it.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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Thanks so much, Kelly. It was a bit of a stretch on the old vocab - there are plenty of words to rhyme with "ine", but the rhyme scheme calls for a great many of them lol
Much appreciated,
Craig
Comment from Loredana
Beautiful as usual. This time not historical but planetarian. I nice quick summary of our beginning and our messes. Will WE shine? I doubt it will get any better, but some people will shine, though they are not necessarily 'famous' stars.
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Beautiful as usual. This time not historical but planetarian. I nice quick summary of our beginning and our messes. Will WE shine? I doubt it will get any better, but some people will shine, though they are not necessarily 'famous' stars.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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Thank you for the most generous rating and the lovely comments, Loredana. I suspect you are right, there will always be some who shine, and others, not so much. Truly grateful, Craig
Comment from WildWithWords
This is a really well put together piece - something I found after initially thinking one of the lines could not possibly have correct meter. I treble checked it.... it does. It still looks a little awkward to me in terms of grammar though....
"Thus, a satellite we came by, hanging large and bright in night sky"
No biggee though.
I wondered why you went with the lengthy lines (and internal rhyme) rather than the short form (with end rhyme) AAABCCCBDBB. Then I thought how ponderous that seemed and decided "No.... it's fine as it is!" Check!
I also read this through as an amateur astronomer with an interest in astrophysics and found it cut the mustard there. The whole moon/Earth formation thing makes perfect sense within the story. Another check!
Finally you have a moral to the story, or rather a message to mankind. This ties it all together in a very neat package born of the most massive "disorder" our planet has ever known - many multiple times larger than even Chixulub (google it). LOL.
I was so close to giving that 6 - I'm sorry - but a few awkward parts just dimmed it for me. Really great effort though.
Bill (WildWithWords)
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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This is a really well put together piece - something I found after initially thinking one of the lines could not possibly have correct meter. I treble checked it.... it does. It still looks a little awkward to me in terms of grammar though....
"Thus, a satellite we came by, hanging large and bright in night sky"
No biggee though.
I wondered why you went with the lengthy lines (and internal rhyme) rather than the short form (with end rhyme) AAABCCCBDBB. Then I thought how ponderous that seemed and decided "No.... it's fine as it is!" Check!
I also read this through as an amateur astronomer with an interest in astrophysics and found it cut the mustard there. The whole moon/Earth formation thing makes perfect sense within the story. Another check!
Finally you have a moral to the story, or rather a message to mankind. This ties it all together in a very neat package born of the most massive "disorder" our planet has ever known - many multiple times larger than even Chixulub (google it). LOL.
I was so close to giving that 6 - I'm sorry - but a few awkward parts just dimmed it for me. Really great effort though.
Bill (WildWithWords)
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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Regarding the line you specifically questioned, I originally had:
"Thus, a satellite we came by, large and bright up in the night sky", which perhaps sounds better, But I wanted to avoid using the word "up" in two consecutive lines. I'll chew it over, maybe I can come up with a better alternative.
Thanks for the detailed and kind assessment.
Craig
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Consider this with added alliteration as a bonus ....
".... looming large across the night sky"
Bill (WildWithWords)
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Believe it or not, I DID consider "looming" at one point, however, it can have a slightly negative connotation - e.g. danger.
Anyway, thanks to your advice, I have made an alteration... I hope it's an improvement :)
Craig
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A great fix! Looks good.
Bill (WildWithWords)
Comment from Gloria ....
Excellent metre and rhyme in this terrific poem, Craig. It seems that we've turned the opposite of kind, so this is most definitely a timely reminder to get back on track and get our hearts in action.
Yes gases is how we spell it too.
Superb poem in excellent metre and rhyme.
Gloria
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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Excellent metre and rhyme in this terrific poem, Craig. It seems that we've turned the opposite of kind, so this is most definitely a timely reminder to get back on track and get our hearts in action.
Yes gases is how we spell it too.
Superb poem in excellent metre and rhyme.
Gloria
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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Thanks so much, Gloria, for the lovely comments and the brilliant shiny stars. Most grateful. Craig
Comment from Anntonette
The words really goes with the shine of the moon like in the image and then the background really goes well with the universe like in the image. I see a comparison, a good comparison!
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The words really goes with the shine of the moon like in the image and then the background really goes well with the universe like in the image. I see a comparison, a good comparison!
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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Thanks very much for the great comments, most appreciated :) Craig
Comment from Pamusart
Hi Craig. The plural of gas is gasses with two s. This is different from your usual post. I think man is hopeless. As long as there is money, this will remain so. Greed is inherent in only one species. Man. Other species take only what the need. Nice poem. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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Hi Craig. The plural of gas is gasses with two s. This is different from your usual post. I think man is hopeless. As long as there is money, this will remain so. Greed is inherent in only one species. Man. Other species take only what the need. Nice poem. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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Hi Pam,
In UK English, at least, gases is the plural; gasses is the third person present tense... as in "he gasses insect pests for a living." It's probably different in the US.
Thanks for the kind comments,
Craig.
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Yeah different here. Maybe not. Gases or gasses can be the plural.
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I added a note anyway, to clarify. Thanks for bringing it forward :)