Spend An Hour With Me
Reflecting on love....41 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
This is absolutely beautiful. I would love to hear the melody that plays in your head/heart for this beautiful message. It flows perfectly, as all good lyrics should, and was an easy, peaceful read with solid, unforced rhyming patterns. Good luck in the contest with this, Mystery Lyricist!
(PS There's an 'an' missing in the second 'Spend an hour with me' chorus.) xo
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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This is absolutely beautiful. I would love to hear the melody that plays in your head/heart for this beautiful message. It flows perfectly, as all good lyrics should, and was an easy, peaceful read with solid, unforced rhyming patterns. Good luck in the contest with this, Mystery Lyricist!
(PS There's an 'an' missing in the second 'Spend an hour with me' chorus.) xo
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thank you my dear precious friend and yes I caught that error and it has been corrected thank you so much! Unfortunately the music is scapes me even though I would love to hear it with music but I just haven?t heard that music yet and I couldn?t ride it even if I did so maybe one day someone will come along that has the music that goes with this poem! No melody that I try to hear does it any justice xoxoxo
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That's fine. I was just so curious if it came to your mind replete with music or just with those lovely words.
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I wish I knew someone or how to find someone to collaborate with :(
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Do you have a music store near you? They'd be able to help you find someone, I bet. Or a music school? Or a piano teacher?
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Thanks! Great ideas! There is also another site I found called premium lyrics which you could upload to their library and whenever someone might use your work there?s a 50% royalty. So I might look into that as well. Have a blessed weekend. I?ve got two high school graduations for my great nieces to go to this weekend back to back. So it?s going to be a busy one for me!
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Wow!! That could be a great avenue for you, Diana! Please let me know how it goes!
And have fun at the Graduations. I love to attend them. Such promise and hopefulness fills the day. Ride their wave!! xo
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That?s exactly what my daughter said! She said, ?Mom, this is our next generation of hopefuls, and we have to be there to support their dedicated efforts?. This great niece is going on now to the Navy and I had a really nice talk with her and shared what it was like for me to go in as a young woman into the Army. I told her the hardest part will be homesickness but keep going because the experience will change your life.
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It's nice that you could share that with her, Diana.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written lyrical poem about the friend that we can never get out of our head and we wish we can spend more time with them when we a re all alone and they are not there.
Typo in the third refrain
Spend [an] hour with me;
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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A very well-written lyrical poem about the friend that we can never get out of our head and we wish we can spend more time with them when we a re all alone and they are not there.
Typo in the third refrain
Spend [an] hour with me;
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much for stopping in reading it and yes that has been corrected! I think when I was editing I accidentally removed it! Sincerely appreciate your comment and that you enjoyed it!
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the demands of a Lyrical poem beautifully. The repetitive lines are well chosen and both enhance and sustain the emotion and tone of the piece throughout. The rhyme and meter are melodic and smooth. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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This meets the demands of a Lyrical poem beautifully. The repetitive lines are well chosen and both enhance and sustain the emotion and tone of the piece throughout. The rhyme and meter are melodic and smooth. Good luck in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much! I?m so happy you enjoyed it, but I?m not sure if it will make it into an actual voting situation because, so far, only one person besides me has signed up LoL!
Comment from Anne B Francis
Oh I so wish had a 6 left because this is so deserving of one.
It is so lovely that I will have to come back again and read it.
Loved it every word, you could turn this into a song
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Oh I so wish had a 6 left because this is so deserving of one.
It is so lovely that I will have to come back again and read it.
Loved it every word, you could turn this into a song
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much I wish I could turn it into a song too but the right melody hasn?t been found yet, No I just need that song writer who creates music to come along! xoxoxo
Comment from Sylvia Page
Hi Diana
Why don't you set this to music? I enjoyed this very much and it put me in a holiday mood. It is full of imagery that makes you want to drop everything and spend a carefree hour with someone you care. Best wishes,
Sylvia
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Hi Diana
Why don't you set this to music? I enjoyed this very much and it put me in a holiday mood. It is full of imagery that makes you want to drop everything and spend a carefree hour with someone you care. Best wishes,
Sylvia
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Bless you so much for reading it and thank you for your comment! I have not found the melody that was meant for yet, but hopefully a musician will come along one day and set it to the perfect notes xoxo
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A most enjoyable write filled with friendship with a relaxing holiday feel within these words as memories are accumulated and friendships bond, a joy to read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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A most enjoyable write filled with friendship with a relaxing holiday feel within these words as memories are accumulated and friendships bond, a joy to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thank you Darla for stopping in reading and commenting! I truly value the opinion of such a writer as yourself xoxo
Comment from way2gokevs
Real tear jerker this one, set to music would go far, maybe you should send it to someone? Well written with nice rhyme, thanks for sharing and the best of luck. Cheers, Kev.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Real tear jerker this one, set to music would go far, maybe you should send it to someone? Well written with nice rhyme, thanks for sharing and the best of luck. Cheers, Kev.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much and I?m so happy that you enjoyed it. I know there?s a special melody out there somewhere but I just don?t know who that someone is that I could send it to. Xoxo
Comment from Patty Palmer
Very nice poem! I liked the lines that you chose to repeat that pulled it all together. I'm just learning about all the different kinds of poems there are. It's pretty interesting.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Very nice poem! I liked the lines that you chose to repeat that pulled it all together. I'm just learning about all the different kinds of poems there are. It's pretty interesting.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Thank you so much for reading and for your wonderful comment! If you have not done much lyrical writing I really hope that you take an adventure and try it sometime! xoxo
Comment from Ronni
I love the flow of the sea them in this lyrical poem
Diana, the invitation is as rippling and enticing as
subtle waves teasing towards shore. The repetive plea
and anticipation in the lyrics conveys a yearning and an
adventure yet to found and explored. Lovely to read
and seing and sway with the captivating mood and momentum. Great write dear. Best of luck with prompt enntry!
Best wishes, Ronni
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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I love the flow of the sea them in this lyrical poem
Diana, the invitation is as rippling and enticing as
subtle waves teasing towards shore. The repetive plea
and anticipation in the lyrics conveys a yearning and an
adventure yet to found and explored. Lovely to read
and seing and sway with the captivating mood and momentum. Great write dear. Best of luck with prompt enntry!
Best wishes, Ronni
Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Ronnie, i want to thank you for your always beautifully constructive comments! I have one review from you yet that I'll comment on after the 1st as I have already nominated you, so they won't let me again this month. :)
Comment from Hitcher
Your lyrical poem was a pleasure to read aloud and danced nicely off the tongue. Your lyrics are warmhearted and give the reader a glimpse at the possibility of a romance on the verge of blossoming. Nice!
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reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Your lyrical poem was a pleasure to read aloud and danced nicely off the tongue. Your lyrics are warmhearted and give the reader a glimpse at the possibility of a romance on the verge of blossoming. Nice!
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Comment Written 21-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2019
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Awesome! Thank you so much for your feedback! Greatly appreciated