Burch
He fooled them all.40 total reviews
Comment from IndefinitelySmallx
Wonderful! Very nice. I really did not see that coming as it was well set up. Well done. One minor suggestion: the possessive form of anybody would be anybody's. Great nevertheless.
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Wonderful! Very nice. I really did not see that coming as it was well set up. Well done. One minor suggestion: the possessive form of anybody would be anybody's. Great nevertheless.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2020
Comment from equestrik
The picture should have given me a clue but I fell right in and was expecting a shoot out! I think good writing often does that. Nicely written. :)
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The picture should have given me a clue but I fell right in and was expecting a shoot out! I think good writing often does that. Nicely written. :)
Comment Written 12-Sep-2020
Comment from Gypsymooncat
Well, that was an unexpected twist at the end! Here was I, sure that the reason for Burch's unkempt appearance was long, long weeks of travel and maybe being mugged in the process. But instead, it is the new Preacher, who must've been on the road anyway for a fair while, so I was half right lol! I really enjoyed this poem; it bounced along and kept my attention from start to finish. I did notice this little nit, though:
anybodies guess, should be anybody's
Well said!
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Well, that was an unexpected twist at the end! Here was I, sure that the reason for Burch's unkempt appearance was long, long weeks of travel and maybe being mugged in the process. But instead, it is the new Preacher, who must've been on the road anyway for a fair while, so I was half right lol! I really enjoyed this poem; it bounced along and kept my attention from start to finish. I did notice this little nit, though:
anybodies guess, should be anybody's
Well said!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2020
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
So true Willie and we are all too quick to make assumptions these days when we should give all those we meet a chance to show their inner selves, a fine write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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So true Willie and we are all too quick to make assumptions these days when we should give all those we meet a chance to show their inner selves, a fine write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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Thanks again Dolly.
Comment from Earl Corp
Nice twist at the end, did not see that coming. Your rhymes were tight, the poem made sense, and entertained me. This one was right over the plate for me, I wish I'd wrote it.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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Nice twist at the end, did not see that coming. Your rhymes were tight, the poem made sense, and entertained me. This one was right over the plate for me, I wish I'd wrote it.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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I have read your writing, you do ok yourself. Thank you for the kind review and shiny six stars.
Comment from dovemarie
Dear Willie, YOu certainly took me by surprise at the end of this poem. We never know who we're looking at or what is under their "cover." I thought this poem would be about a horse, the crucifix confused me, until I read the end of the poem. Cleo85 has given me a lot of good pictures too. Dove
P.S. I'd give you a six but I don't have any.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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Dear Willie, YOu certainly took me by surprise at the end of this poem. We never know who we're looking at or what is under their "cover." I thought this poem would be about a horse, the crucifix confused me, until I read the end of the poem. Cleo85 has given me a lot of good pictures too. Dove
P.S. I'd give you a six but I don't have any.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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I'm glad I got your attention with this one. Thanks for your review and stars. poem corrected.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
That is so true Willie. I certainly didn't expect
your subject to be a preacher. LOL I know some where in our upbringing we are taught to judge people by the way they look. That is so wrong. Good poem. Makes one think. Nancy:)
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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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That is so true Willie. I certainly didn't expect
your subject to be a preacher. LOL I know some where in our upbringing we are taught to judge people by the way they look. That is so wrong. Good poem. Makes one think. Nancy:)
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Comment Written 13-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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Thanks for your review and stars. I waited until the end to identify
the man.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
AAAAwww I love it. What an interesting twist to the piece and it was excellently done in every way, truly spot on and loved the whole piece. For a story in apoem, it would be excellent
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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AAAAwww I love it. What an interesting twist to the piece and it was excellently done in every way, truly spot on and loved the whole piece. For a story in apoem, it would be excellent
Comment Written 13-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2019
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Thank you for your kind review and wonderful six stars.
Comment from Cindy Warren
Yep, he fooled them. Or maybe not. With him around they might not want to miss church. I've met a few preachers I wouldn't want to piss off. This could be one of them.
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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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Yep, he fooled them. Or maybe not. With him around they might not want to miss church. I've met a few preachers I wouldn't want to piss off. This could be one of them.
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Comment Written 12-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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Thanks for your comical review and stars. I bet you're a real pistol.
Comment from zanya
A fine twist in the tale here in this story of a stranger come to town - so often we do pass judgement without knowing the facts - told with color and passion
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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A fine twist in the tale here in this story of a stranger come to town - so often we do pass judgement without knowing the facts - told with color and passion
Comment Written 12-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2019
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Thank you so much for the shiny six stars, you humble me.