Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Going at a snails pace here with all the time in the world and I enjoyed the alliteration and the short and long lines where you slowed the pace down and created an atmospheric feel of slow movement, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2020

Thanks Dolly, be well and keep enjoying the sun!

Comment from Janice Canerdy

Excellent

YES! Life simply and kindly demands that we learn to hurry slowly--or go really fast gradually! Life is full of contradictions in what's expected by others and by self. Your satire poem is well-written and thought-provoking.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2020

Janice the presence in truly in each and every moment.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Enjoyed your fun poem and what a picture to match your message. It's in our older stage of life that we can appreciate the slower pace of life so that we can enjoy and not fall.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2020

lyenochka, thank you very much, have a super 4th.

reply by lyenochka on 02-Jul-2020

You have a blessed 4th, too!

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I've never seen a quadruple tectractys before, oh, I've written a few, singles, but never seen a quadruple before. Beautifully written my friend, well donej, great post, good luck Jim, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2020

Thanks very much Roy. It was quite fun to develop.

reply by royowen on 02-Jul-2020

Well done

Comment from Mary Furlong

Excellent

Slithering and dithering are in, at least in my age group. A nice balance of ideas. The design of the poem on the page adds so much interest. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2020

Mary, thank you so much, safe holidays!

Comment from SixFtLion (Suzanna)

Excellent

Love your poem, because it inspires me in my endeavors. I have been learning handstands for a while, and each practice I want to "run" and then I fall, and then I just have to remind myself to do the work, and little by little, the results will come. I am "walking" steadily to my goal. Your poem expresses the life journey just perfectly. The best luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2020

Sixftlion, thank you, it was fun to develop.

Comment from Cindy Decker

Exceptional

Hi, JLR,
I'm giving you six stars because you followed the tetractys form to a "t" and made the poem really fun.
I love the internal rhymes and the way your poem flows. Excellent
Best wishes, Cindy

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2020

Cindy, what a great gift for the start of the 4th of July, I really had fun building this .

Comment from papa55mike

Excellent

I'm not sure how far I can run anymore. What a wonderfully written entry into this contest. I wish I had a six.

Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2020

Thanks Mike have an awesome 4th.

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

This is nicely done using the comparison of run/walk to deliver a message.
The form is perfect according to the notes and done very well for the contest. A strong piece in my eyes

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 Comment Written 02-Jul-2020

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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2020

Thanks much Barb, I appreciate your positive comments.