OL No Name
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Comment from Boogienights
This is fantastic! What an original story, I feel so bad for your main character! The rhyming in this poem is very well done, it's easy to read. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest. :)
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This is fantastic! What an original story, I feel so bad for your main character! The rhyming in this poem is very well done, it's easy to read. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
Comment from JPGeo
A great character and superb finish. Masterful writing, sir. When the story has a natural rhythm like this, it just shows thoughtfulness for the reader. We appreciate that. I read it three times and just don't have a complaint.
John
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A great character and superb finish. Masterful writing, sir. When the story has a natural rhythm like this, it just shows thoughtfulness for the reader. We appreciate that. I read it three times and just don't have a complaint.
John
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
Comment from Susan Newell
You told a good story about a loner who seemed to neither want nor need companionship. Tough, gritty, but not unpleasant -- a mystery to all. The epitaph says it all.
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You told a good story about a loner who seemed to neither want nor need companionship. Tough, gritty, but not unpleasant -- a mystery to all. The epitaph says it all.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
Comment from Mary Vigasin
An excellent entry into the contest. It is a well written story about a man who lived and died alone but under his own terms.
Well done in rhyming.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes
Mary
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An excellent entry into the contest. It is a well written story about a man who lived and died alone but under his own terms.
Well done in rhyming.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
Comment from barbara.wilkey
OH MY!!! I have read a lot of entries this morning for this contest. This is, by far, my favorite story in a poem contest entry. Thank you for sharing. I want to wish you good luck, but I doubt you will need it.
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OH MY!!! I have read a lot of entries this morning for this contest. This is, by far, my favorite story in a poem contest entry. Thank you for sharing. I want to wish you good luck, but I doubt you will need it.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
Comment from Terry Broxson
A really good poem for this contest, among us western fans this will do really well, good luck. I enjoyed reading the poem out loud it flows and sounds great. A sad story, but well-done.
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A really good poem for this contest, among us western fans this will do really well, good luck. I enjoyed reading the poem out loud it flows and sounds great. A sad story, but well-done.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
Comment from Artasylum
Well, this came as a complete surprise... now I'm sad that nobody ever tried to know him. Even cowboys can be in need of something other than their guns... so RIP Ol' no name (didn't capitalize,) better luck next time and next time; speak up... loved it Willie... thanks and godd luck. yours, di
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Well, this came as a complete surprise... now I'm sad that nobody ever tried to know him. Even cowboys can be in need of something other than their guns... so RIP Ol' no name (didn't capitalize,) better luck next time and next time; speak up... loved it Willie... thanks and godd luck. yours, di
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
Comment from ElPoetry001
Excellent.
Although it is sad to realize that many people do not receive sufficient affirmation to sustain them, we can look to technology as a major interference with social interaction.
Too much texting, and emailing. No longer do we receive the handshake, the hug, or the kiss.
Jeremiah Johnson was a movie about "a mountain man." Sad in many respects, realistic in others; a lonely existence.
Having memories that you can recall, helps; the human touch, and acceptance are catalysts to self acceptance.
Yes, I got all of that out your excellent poem.
We must acknowledge others. Watch for the signs, and become a first responders.
HALT is the acronym: Hungry, angry, lonely, or tired.
We all have experienced loneliness. Thank you for putting a face on it.
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Excellent.
Although it is sad to realize that many people do not receive sufficient affirmation to sustain them, we can look to technology as a major interference with social interaction.
Too much texting, and emailing. No longer do we receive the handshake, the hug, or the kiss.
Jeremiah Johnson was a movie about "a mountain man." Sad in many respects, realistic in others; a lonely existence.
Having memories that you can recall, helps; the human touch, and acceptance are catalysts to self acceptance.
Yes, I got all of that out your excellent poem.
We must acknowledge others. Watch for the signs, and become a first responders.
HALT is the acronym: Hungry, angry, lonely, or tired.
We all have experienced loneliness. Thank you for putting a face on it.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
Comment from Sally Law
Sounds like my dad. It was reported that no one came to his funeral. He left our family early on for drink. A wonderful story in a poem entry, Willie, and a winner in my eyes. Bravo!
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs...
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Sounds like my dad. It was reported that no one came to his funeral. He left our family early on for drink. A wonderful story in a poem entry, Willie, and a winner in my eyes. Bravo!
Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs...
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022
Comment from BethShelby
Interesting story you have shared in you rhymed poem but free verse in that it has no set syllable count or lines per verse. It is sad that anyone would live a life with no friends. Apparently such a person had a past that caused him to avoid people.
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Interesting story you have shared in you rhymed poem but free verse in that it has no set syllable count or lines per verse. It is sad that anyone would live a life with no friends. Apparently such a person had a past that caused him to avoid people.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2022