Within My World
A little about me42 total reviews
Comment from Sally Law
Loving this, my friend! I'm floating along on your creative energy. I see you're inspired for the new year. Absolutely beautiful in rhyming poetry.
My favorite:
In my world at FanStory
Love going on a writing spree
One of the best places to be
My friends here are like family...
(I would quite agree!)
Love & Blessings abundant,
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reply by the author on 13-Jan-2024
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Loving this, my friend! I'm floating along on your creative energy. I see you're inspired for the new year. Absolutely beautiful in rhyming poetry.
My favorite:
In my world at FanStory
Love going on a writing spree
One of the best places to be
My friends here are like family...
(I would quite agree!)
Love & Blessings abundant,
BBB XOs
Comment Written 11-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2024
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Hi Sweetie! I cannot thank you enough for such a lovely review and words for my world poem. I am truly honored by them, as well as your six stars. You are so special and I appreciate you so very much. Thanks again, my very dear friend. Lotsa love, Debi
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Most welcome, my friend. Loved this. One of my favorites. Just beautiful.
Love,
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for writing about yourself. I enjoyed reading and getting to know you a little better. I already knew you were an angel and this poem just confirms it.
To go to where my thoughts are free (I am NOT a poet and have no idea about poetic form, but when I read this sentence, I read as if the second 'to' isn't there. Leaving it out probably messes with the syllable count. Pretty sure it doesn't mess with the rhymes. )
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reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Thank you for writing about yourself. I enjoyed reading and getting to know you a little better. I already knew you were an angel and this poem just confirms it.
To go to where my thoughts are free (I am NOT a poet and have no idea about poetic form, but when I read this sentence, I read as if the second 'to' isn't there. Leaving it out probably messes with the syllable count. Pretty sure it doesn't mess with the rhymes. )
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Comment Written 11-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2024
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Hey Barb, you are not that far off, but poets are given a different license than a prose writer. For instance we have to start lines with the word, 'and or but' sometimes. Having the right amount of syllables in the wrong place in a line can make it stumble as if you threw in a road block. The reason is not as much the syllable, even though that is important, but the meter. So in this particular line, without the extra 'to' it stumbles and it stops the flow. Does that make sense? The only other option would be to completely rewrite it and I usually do that about ten times before I am done. LOL.
I love that you are on top of things tho. I also would rather have feedback than compliments because that is how we learn.
However I do love your compliments, my awesome friend. And you know how much I love you. I do wear my heart on my sleeve. Hey that is one I didn't write about. LOL! Love, Debi