Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Fleeting Memories"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from words
I liked the sentiment of the verse.
Tripped a bit over the cut and paste look of the presentation.
The white spaces beneath the type font, I think played against your message.
I especially liked:All the boundaries removed, as our bodies intertwined,
Father Time was forgiving as we floated out to space,
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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I liked the sentiment of the verse.
Tripped a bit over the cut and paste look of the presentation.
The white spaces beneath the type font, I think played against your message.
I especially liked:All the boundaries removed, as our bodies intertwined,
Father Time was forgiving as we floated out to space,
Comment Written 07-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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thank you words for your comments and for reading, Gary
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thanks words went bach and changed the presentation
Comment from Dall
A beautiful poem. so much feeling, so peaceful, as if he didn't want to wake her. I enjoyed this. The flow of it was sensual. The spirit quiet and loving. Very well done!
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A beautiful poem. so much feeling, so peaceful, as if he didn't want to wake her. I enjoyed this. The flow of it was sensual. The spirit quiet and loving. Very well done!
Comment Written 07-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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thank you Dell for reading my work
Comment from Josipher32
deepwater,
"Fleeting Memories" was a well writtten poem. It is nice the sentiment of appreciating a loved one.--Kristen
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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deepwater,
"Fleeting Memories" was a well writtten poem. It is nice the sentiment of appreciating a loved one.--Kristen
Comment Written 07-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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Thank you for reading this Kristen
Comment from FredCollingwood
I really like the poem. The flow and emotions are excellent. The only thing that diminishes it is it's presentation. This one is strong enough to stand alone without any formatting gimmicks.
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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I really like the poem. The flow and emotions are excellent. The only thing that diminishes it is it's presentation. This one is strong enough to stand alone without any formatting gimmicks.
Comment Written 07-May-2010
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thank you Fred for the comment and for reading
Comment from kintesiegel
First upbeat poem about love found rather than love lost that I have read of yours. It is done in the same imimical fashion in which your other works are written. pleasant read
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First upbeat poem about love found rather than love lost that I have read of yours. It is done in the same imimical fashion in which your other works are written. pleasant read
Comment Written 07-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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Thank you Kintesiegel
Comment from WRITER1
Very nice piece about shared love. I think many times we look over at our lover and think how far we have come together and where we are going from here.
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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Very nice piece about shared love. I think many times we look over at our lover and think how far we have come together and where we are going from here.
Comment Written 07-May-2010
reply by the author on 07-May-2010
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thank you for your comments and for reading, Writer1 Gary
Comment from InHisownwrite
What great perception.... Love is too short, even to treat our being loved as something trivial that comes and goes.. Lucky are the two who find in each other what you have expressed so well...love:(father time was forgiving as we floated out to space) i always enjoy reading your work..
It's a good thing that once in a while you get off of the tractor, and write! Good job! Bryan
reply by the author on 06-May-2010
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What great perception.... Love is too short, even to treat our being loved as something trivial that comes and goes.. Lucky are the two who find in each other what you have expressed so well...love:(father time was forgiving as we floated out to space) i always enjoy reading your work..
It's a good thing that once in a while you get off of the tractor, and write! Good job! Bryan
Comment Written 06-May-2010
reply by the author on 06-May-2010
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thank you InHisownwrite i think its time to get back on Gary
Comment from anne1204
I loved this poem. Great writing to express the feeling of waking up with someone you love. Check the spelling of "kiss's" I not sure that is right, but I did not reflect it in my rating. Good writing. Anne 1204
reply by the author on 06-May-2010
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I loved this poem. Great writing to express the feeling of waking up with someone you love. Check the spelling of "kiss's" I not sure that is right, but I did not reflect it in my rating. Good writing. Anne 1204
Comment Written 06-May-2010
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Thank you for reading Anne
Comment from bhogg
I really liked this poem. No fancy footwork, or deft use of words, just a smooth flowing, natural poem with great imagery. Poems are always tough because they are so personal. I saw a couple of areas where if it were my poem, I would have tweeked, but hey - it's your poem and its awfully good!
reply by the author on 06-May-2010
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I really liked this poem. No fancy footwork, or deft use of words, just a smooth flowing, natural poem with great imagery. Poems are always tough because they are so personal. I saw a couple of areas where if it were my poem, I would have tweeked, but hey - it's your poem and its awfully good!
Comment Written 06-May-2010
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Thank you for the comments Bhogg
Comment from Valkarie
I like this because...One should always have memories especially of good times like you describe here in your poem. This is a very good piece of thought provoking poetry with a thought process which is so visual and strong.
Your words speak volumes are concise and very powerful to the latter. A most creative piece of writing which I enjoyed.
Valkarie...
reply by the author on 06-May-2010
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I like this because...One should always have memories especially of good times like you describe here in your poem. This is a very good piece of thought provoking poetry with a thought process which is so visual and strong.
Your words speak volumes are concise and very powerful to the latter. A most creative piece of writing which I enjoyed.
Valkarie...
Comment Written 06-May-2010
reply by the author on 06-May-2010
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Thank you for reading Valkarie