The Rape
Dark Sonnet - after reading William Butler Yeats153 total reviews
Comment from sunshine1
I like how everything flowed together. I lost my breath while reading . It brought strong images and emotion. Im not no pro in writing but if you can describe the smell of it all and the face of the rapist. ugh it gives me the creeps.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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I like how everything flowed together. I lost my breath while reading . It brought strong images and emotion. Im not no pro in writing but if you can describe the smell of it all and the face of the rapist. ugh it gives me the creeps.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2011
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Thanks Sunshine for your review that lets me know the emotions came through!! Have a beautiful day girl!!!
Comment from rlonsdale
Gungalo...I was looking for one of your poems after you were kind enough to review a couple of mine....I was so sad to read this...it's a fantastic poem but I just hope this is you being poetic & isn't something that happened to you.... if it is something that happened to you though..i see a strong person & you're ok ...though I could be wrong......i was once you know, thought i had made a mistake when I hadn't. :D
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2011
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Gungalo...I was looking for one of your poems after you were kind enough to review a couple of mine....I was so sad to read this...it's a fantastic poem but I just hope this is you being poetic & isn't something that happened to you.... if it is something that happened to you though..i see a strong person & you're ok ...though I could be wrong......i was once you know, thought i had made a mistake when I hadn't. :D
Comment Written 26-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2011
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It is not about me sweet one. Don't worry yourself as it was poetry to shed light on the horrors of rape. Sorry to hear about you. Love ya girl and for reading this one.
Comment from Caeric il produttore
Wow, I wish I'd read this poem earlier! It is amazing. The vivid imagery, the intense emotion and the great meter make this poem tense, edgy and riveting. Definitely deserves to be poem of the month. Thanks so much for bringing to light such a wicked issue.
Il Produttore - My $.02
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2011
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Wow, I wish I'd read this poem earlier! It is amazing. The vivid imagery, the intense emotion and the great meter make this poem tense, edgy and riveting. Definitely deserves to be poem of the month. Thanks so much for bringing to light such a wicked issue.
Il Produttore - My $.02
Comment Written 20-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2011
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Thanks so much Caeric!!! Great review for this one!!!
Comment from poetbear
My Dear Poetess,
Suffice it to say that you have captured the horror and pain in nightmares so well that it can be called up again.
Those who have lost their innocence in the dark or the light know this poem by heart and by soul.
Such a shame that the topic is never handled with the grace and insight you have shown here!
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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My Dear Poetess,
Suffice it to say that you have captured the horror and pain in nightmares so well that it can be called up again.
Those who have lost their innocence in the dark or the light know this poem by heart and by soul.
Such a shame that the topic is never handled with the grace and insight you have shown here!
Comment Written 18-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2011
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Thanks you for awesome thoughts about this one. I just know it has to be something all are aware of sweet poet!!!
Comment from prodigal
After reading your comments I thought I'd check out your portfolio. I've been off and on here on FS for over a year. I used to be very active. This is exceptional. It is raw and emotional and very well delivered- sam
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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After reading your comments I thought I'd check out your portfolio. I've been off and on here on FS for over a year. I used to be very active. This is exceptional. It is raw and emotional and very well delivered- sam
Comment Written 17-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2011
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thank you so much Sam. I was surprised by the nomination of this one and ultimately the win. I was still new here then!!!
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I got Poem of the Month on my first month on the site. I used to review all the time and post 2 poems a day. Now I just don't have the time. I am trying to get back to it. Funny how much you miss in a year. All new names out there now.
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I hear you and that's me. Faithfully two writes a night and review everyone regardless of the so called money on their work. I just love poetry and like to see what everyone writes.
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I hope you can keep pace. Once you stop, life gets in the way. I used to write songs. I have a CD with 9 songs on it. I work about 60 hours a week now and am gone from home all the time. Doesn't leave much time or inspiration for writing. Once I stopped it was gone. You have the talent. Keep it up
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Thanks you. I'll be fine. Poetry just pours from my soul. I'd love to hear your songs some day. I do lyrics also but my fav is poetry.
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Oh yeah, you work tooooooo much!!!
Comment from Patrick Jordan
So Powerful! In a chilling way you took me there, a witness to the abuse of humankind. I'm glad I checked in and am not disappointed. You may not have noticed this about this poem, but work like this not only teaches,but has the ability to heal also.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2011
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So Powerful! In a chilling way you took me there, a witness to the abuse of humankind. I'm glad I checked in and am not disappointed. You may not have noticed this about this poem, but work like this not only teaches,but has the ability to heal also.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2011
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Absolutely, Patrick!!! One of the reasons for doing it. Not for me but for many many who will read it. Thank you for your great review and take on it.
Comment from Libaker
This is a late review, but just now seeing it--very emotionally raw obviously. As a woman it strikes a chord deep down in the pit of my stomach to think of such a thing and makes me sick to think of all the people who have gone through it
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2011
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This is a late review, but just now seeing it--very emotionally raw obviously. As a woman it strikes a chord deep down in the pit of my stomach to think of such a thing and makes me sick to think of all the people who have gone through it
Comment Written 07-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2011
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Thanks you. I so agree but we can't ignore it and must be aware of it because it does happen I appreciate your review of this one, girl.
Comment from Fiona Hymn
Powerfully and compelling, the heart stops, the breathing stops, and all is felt in this instant where brutality wins. Innocence lost is violent, vicious, and sadly quite often ignored. You have tackled a subject that is not spoken about in "polite" circles, but as stated, happens every day, almost every instant. Stunning in the way it is told, you deserve all the accolades this work has earned and more. Brilliant write.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2011
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Powerfully and compelling, the heart stops, the breathing stops, and all is felt in this instant where brutality wins. Innocence lost is violent, vicious, and sadly quite often ignored. You have tackled a subject that is not spoken about in "polite" circles, but as stated, happens every day, almost every instant. Stunning in the way it is told, you deserve all the accolades this work has earned and more. Brilliant write.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2011
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Sigh thanks you. I was surprised this one was nominated and een moreso when it won. Thanks so much for a very astute review.
Comment from Fishcake
Very powerful. I felt for the victim. I could almost feel the way the victim felt as if it was myself. The flow was excellent. Well done on this work. I look forward to reading more of your works.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2011
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Very powerful. I felt for the victim. I could almost feel the way the victim felt as if it was myself. The flow was excellent. Well done on this work. I look forward to reading more of your works.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2011
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Thanks you. A subject we can never afford to ignore.
Comment from Checkmate13
strong post...very visual...powerfully written...and so true and a shame it takes place so often...congrat to you on this award.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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strong post...very visual...powerfully written...and so true and a shame it takes place so often...congrat to you on this award.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you Checkmate for your review of this one and the congrats!!!