Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Chapter 12; part one"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from jadapenn
Hi Barbara, plenty of action going on in this chapter. You've still got 100 pages to go. This is a long novel.
Two little gremlins for you:
sun that peaked [peeked] over the horizon.
The second man fell to the floor, as the third man wrestled Joe to the floor.
(floor twice in short succession)
luv jada
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Hi Barbara, plenty of action going on in this chapter. You've still got 100 pages to go. This is a long novel.
Two little gremlins for you:
sun that peaked [peeked] over the horizon.
The second man fell to the floor, as the third man wrestled Joe to the floor.
(floor twice in short succession)
luv jada
Comment Written 06-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I will double check that area.
Comment from ashleymvaughn
Sometimes it's hard to come into the middle of a novel, but your characters and storyline are engaging, and I found myself lost in the story. There are so many stories here that I want to read completely, and I hope I'm able to finish reading yours. Good work.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Sometimes it's hard to come into the middle of a novel, but your characters and storyline are engaging, and I found myself lost in the story. There are so many stories here that I want to read completely, and I hope I'm able to finish reading yours. Good work.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
This was a very exciting chapter it moved the story along nicely and leaves the reader wanting to read the next chapter to find out what happens next
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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This was a very exciting chapter it moved the story along nicely and leaves the reader wanting to read the next chapter to find out what happens next
Comment Written 06-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from Lekatt
I really like this kind of story, it is well written and very interesting. Hostage situations can go almost any direction. I wait for the next installment.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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I really like this kind of story, it is well written and very interesting. Hostage situations can go almost any direction. I wait for the next installment.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
Good tense ending to this chapter part, I guess its going to be touch and go for the next one though, there are still a few too many baddies unaccounted for.
I'll be interested to see how this pans out.
Patrick
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Hi Barbara,
Good tense ending to this chapter part, I guess its going to be touch and go for the next one though, there are still a few too many baddies unaccounted for.
I'll be interested to see how this pans out.
Patrick
Comment Written 06-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Nicnac
Oh wow. This is action packed. A real page-turner!
I could picture the scene clearly.
I feel everything coming to a head and I can't wait to read more.
Well done, Barbara! You're doing a great job. The suspense is fabulous.
Nic
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Oh wow. This is action packed. A real page-turner!
I could picture the scene clearly.
I feel everything coming to a head and I can't wait to read more.
Well done, Barbara! You're doing a great job. The suspense is fabulous.
Nic
Comment Written 06-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Thank you Nic, for your review and support.
Comment from dmjones
Hi Barbara, This is an excellent chapter. Very fast paced which is how it should be when there's action involved. I didn't spot any errors.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Hi Barbara, This is an excellent chapter. Very fast paced which is how it should be when there's action involved. I didn't spot any errors.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your review and support.
Comment from patwannabe
Barb, sounds like we're getting close to the end. Great chapter, but I was a little confused with the "fell to the floor" right after shots were fired. Apparently they didn't get hit(?) Had to re-read about two men dragging Joe off because I thought there were only three men and the second one down (fell to the floor). Apparently Derek didn't get hit(?).
Anyhow, waiting for your chemo "story".
Love your story. Your characters are the greatest. pat
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Barb, sounds like we're getting close to the end. Great chapter, but I was a little confused with the "fell to the floor" right after shots were fired. Apparently they didn't get hit(?) Had to re-read about two men dragging Joe off because I thought there were only three men and the second one down (fell to the floor). Apparently Derek didn't get hit(?).
Anyhow, waiting for your chemo "story".
Love your story. Your characters are the greatest. pat
Comment Written 06-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Thank you earlier in the chapter I said there were 8 men in the house and 3 girls.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
Oh my God! I loved this thrills-a-minute narrative in this chapter. We know this is a romantic story, but in this chapter there is a lot of good suspense about the kidnapping. Thanks for the author note, we keep our praying for your total recovery.
God bless you dear Barbara,
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Oh my God! I loved this thrills-a-minute narrative in this chapter. We know this is a romantic story, but in this chapter there is a lot of good suspense about the kidnapping. Thanks for the author note, we keep our praying for your total recovery.
God bless you dear Barbara,
Comment Written 06-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Realist101
A cliff hanger chapter for sure...geez. I think your dual love/crime genre here is great Barb. You sure have the parallels going really well. Exciting and tense too. Hope you are feeling okay! Take things slow, okay? Don't worry about reviewing for me until you feel like it Barb...I understand and just want you to get well! Pet the babies for me?? HUGS!! Susan
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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A cliff hanger chapter for sure...geez. I think your dual love/crime genre here is great Barb. You sure have the parallels going really well. Exciting and tense too. Hope you are feeling okay! Take things slow, okay? Don't worry about reviewing for me until you feel like it Barb...I understand and just want you to get well! Pet the babies for me?? HUGS!! Susan
Comment Written 06-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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The babies are right beside me, well, one is in my lap. I am sure you know which one. Thank you for your review.
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Oh yes, the biggest one probably...little madame' is sitting here, watching me type, trying to get me to get the Fancy Feast going! So happy to hear from you Miss Barbara! I hope too, that you are warm, I am bundled in a throw, the heat blasted, it's only about 9 degrees, and I have to go out and take the dog around and feed the nags some hay. I do NOT want to go. ") Luv, Susan