Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Part One chapter three"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from FmblingTwrdXtacy
aww @ the husbands note- Sometimes when you write on heavy topics you just gotta ad the disclaimer- just in case.
At any rate, this was a great followup to the last chapter I read. It is very realistic. Troy thinks Anna will press charges and divorce this guy....but we'll see if she does what he expects.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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aww @ the husbands note- Sometimes when you write on heavy topics you just gotta ad the disclaimer- just in case.
At any rate, this was a great followup to the last chapter I read. It is very realistic. Troy thinks Anna will press charges and divorce this guy....but we'll see if she does what he expects.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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I am not sure what Anna is going to do at this point.
Comment from JW
This chapter is another great addition to your story. At least the monster is in jail now. It's a shame they don't hand out life sentences for abuse like this.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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This chapter is another great addition to your story. At least the monster is in jail now. It's a shame they don't hand out life sentences for abuse like this.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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I wish they did. In SC you can get a stiffer jail sentence for abusing your dog than you can for abusing your wife. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I enjoyed this, Barbara...
the conversation beteen
father and son, flowed
so naturally....
I used to caddie for you and you three used to try to I I used to caddie for you and the three of you used to (just ignore if not in agreement, my friend)
Paul stroked at worn
Paul stroked a worn
Margaret
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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I enjoyed this, Barbara...
the conversation beteen
father and son, flowed
so naturally....
I used to caddie for you and you three used to try to I I used to caddie for you and the three of you used to (just ignore if not in agreement, my friend)
Paul stroked at worn
Paul stroked a worn
Margaret
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and finding those areas that need work.
Comment from dbmccarter
This chapter moves the story along just right. I am very interested to find out what happens next. This is a very serious topic and I like the way you are handling it. Looking forward to more.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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This chapter moves the story along just right. I am very interested to find out what happens next. This is a very serious topic and I like the way you are handling it. Looking forward to more.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from bhogg
Hi Barbara - this one is picking up pace quickly. You know that I'll stay tuned. I don't know about Stockholm syndrome, but I've known of situations where women stayed in abusive relationships for a lot of wrong reasons. Regards, Bill
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Hi Barbara - this one is picking up pace quickly. You know that I'll stay tuned. I don't know about Stockholm syndrome, but I've known of situations where women stayed in abusive relationships for a lot of wrong reasons. Regards, Bill
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. I want this story to move, I hope I am not taking it too fast. I don't want to drag either.
Comment from Chris Tee
An amazing Chapter!!
The conclusion is very good.the father warns troy from a legal side. Again you kept me locked in and mesmerized
It is superb to say the least.I have followed this story from the outset and enjoy it.
Thank you for sharing this
Well done!!
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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An amazing Chapter!!
The conclusion is very good.the father warns troy from a legal side. Again you kept me locked in and mesmerized
It is superb to say the least.I have followed this story from the outset and enjoy it.
Thank you for sharing this
Well done!!
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
A very well written chapter. Keeping not only the interest but the suspense of the reader is not easy, but you can do it so well.
I'm so glad that you have a normal and good husband.
:)
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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A very well written chapter. Keeping not only the interest but the suspense of the reader is not easy, but you can do it so well.
I'm so glad that you have a normal and good husband.
:)
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Helen Tan
I hope Troy listens to his dad's professional advice or it could jeopardise Anna's case against her husband.
A woman officer carried Michael
A female officer...
as they forced him into the patrol car's backseat.
This might flow better - ...into the backseat of the patrol car.
He stared at a photo of Paul, Betty, and himself on a camping trip.
Since this is from Troy's POV, I think it should read as "his parents" rather than "Paul, Betty,". I know Troy is adopted but since he addresses Paul and Betty as Dad and Mom, he considers them as his parents.
You need to stay away to make sure you don't complicate the situation.
A great piece of advice, the last thing Anna needs is to be rumoured to be having an affair.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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I hope Troy listens to his dad's professional advice or it could jeopardise Anna's case against her husband.
A woman officer carried Michael
A female officer...
as they forced him into the patrol car's backseat.
This might flow better - ...into the backseat of the patrol car.
He stared at a photo of Paul, Betty, and himself on a camping trip.
Since this is from Troy's POV, I think it should read as "his parents" rather than "Paul, Betty,". I know Troy is adopted but since he addresses Paul and Betty as Dad and Mom, he considers them as his parents.
You need to stay away to make sure you don't complicate the situation.
A great piece of advice, the last thing Anna needs is to be rumoured to be having an affair.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I have made a hard copy of your suggestions so I don't miss anything.
Comment from The Stranger
despite Troys best advice, I am sure he knows in his heart of heart that Anna will return once more to Booy, one time more may prove to be fatal..
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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despite Troys best advice, I am sure he knows in his heart of heart that Anna will return once more to Booy, one time more may prove to be fatal..
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from markk
Well written and a good continuation to this story. I feel there is so much to learn about this Troy (which I guess is one of the things we'll see as the story progresses). I will continue to follow and I'm very pleased that this is not a reflection of your own life. I wish you luck as well with the continuation of your treatment.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Well written and a good continuation to this story. I feel there is so much to learn about this Troy (which I guess is one of the things we'll see as the story progresses). I will continue to follow and I'm very pleased that this is not a reflection of your own life. I wish you luck as well with the continuation of your treatment.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2011
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Thank you four your kind review.