Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Part two chapter three"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
This is a good chapter. The storyline moves at a good pace and I'm glad she's found a friend in Troy. I'm eagerly waiting to find out the mystery surrounding Troy's parents and why his dad is so willing to pay for the lawyer
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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This is a good chapter. The storyline moves at a good pace and I'm glad she's found a friend in Troy. I'm eagerly waiting to find out the mystery surrounding Troy's parents and why his dad is so willing to pay for the lawyer
Comment Written 25-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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I didn't know Troy's dad is willing to pay for the lawyer. I guess I better reread, I might have missed something. (LOL) Thank you for the kind review.
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Maybe I misunderstood but I assumed he was paying for it as he knows she has no money but he still set up a meeting. Unless Troy's footing the bill, of course. I'm sure all will be revealed in the coming chapters ;-)
Comment from jclark
My hands are starting to sweat fearful that somehow her loser husband is out of jail..that's how good your writing is. I can always feel the "under current" in each chapter. I enjoy the visuals you create that paint a perfect picture of each character.
Judy
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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My hands are starting to sweat fearful that somehow her loser husband is out of jail..that's how good your writing is. I can always feel the "under current" in each chapter. I enjoy the visuals you create that paint a perfect picture of each character.
Judy
Comment Written 25-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. It doesn't take Bobby long to bail himself out of jail.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
It is so tragic when domestic abuse involves children. It makes it so much harder to break the cycle and I can't imagine growing up in the middle of that could leave any child unscathed. I am so glad you are addressing this issue. I hope your treatments are going well!!! DEbbie
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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It is so tragic when domestic abuse involves children. It makes it so much harder to break the cycle and I can't imagine growing up in the middle of that could leave any child unscathed. I am so glad you are addressing this issue. I hope your treatments are going well!!! DEbbie
Comment Written 25-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Troy is giving Anna the nudges she needs to move in the right direction. She's right that she'll always be in danger from her husband, though, ex- or not, prison or not. She'll hide for the rest of her life. Such a shame. Well done. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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Troy is giving Anna the nudges she needs to move in the right direction. She's right that she'll always be in danger from her husband, though, ex- or not, prison or not. She'll hide for the rest of her life. Such a shame. Well done. :) Nancy
Comment Written 25-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and insight.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Poor Anna... what terror..
and it's too late for Troy..
he already is involved...
stood in the door(way)
"I can't afford a lawyer." Tears streamed - might I suggest..
"I can't afford a lawyer," she repeated. Tears....
started to leaned over
.......... lean
crib,a nurse - space after comma
or (in a)woman's shelter
Margaret
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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Poor Anna... what terror..
and it's too late for Troy..
he already is involved...
stood in the door(way)
"I can't afford a lawyer." Tears streamed - might I suggest..
"I can't afford a lawyer," she repeated. Tears....
started to leaned over
.......... lean
crib,a nurse - space after comma
or (in a)woman's shelter
Margaret
Comment Written 25-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your eagle eye and kind review.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
I enjoyed this chapter. Her confusion and denial prior to seeing Michael is pretty common. Kids help convince their moms to leave; but following through it takes courage, a lot of supportive interventions, and LUCK. Too darn many women die at the hands of abuse; I hear at least two incidence a week. You may wish to add to your authors notes a hot-line number.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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I enjoyed this chapter. Her confusion and denial prior to seeing Michael is pretty common. Kids help convince their moms to leave; but following through it takes courage, a lot of supportive interventions, and LUCK. Too darn many women die at the hands of abuse; I hear at least two incidence a week. You may wish to add to your authors notes a hot-line number.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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I like the idea of a hot-line number, I will add that to my next post. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
barbara:
One of the saddest things in these cases is there are
not that many Troys willing to help and many of them
like him who do get seriously hurt or killed in the
process. Most women will not allow anyone to help them
for fear they will only get hurt worse or that the
person helping them will get hurt. It truly is a vicious
cycle.
thanks for sharing another intense chapter
tell your husband, he must be more like Troy
love,
jan
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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barbara:
One of the saddest things in these cases is there are
not that many Troys willing to help and many of them
like him who do get seriously hurt or killed in the
process. Most women will not allow anyone to help them
for fear they will only get hurt worse or that the
person helping them will get hurt. It truly is a vicious
cycle.
thanks for sharing another intense chapter
tell your husband, he must be more like Troy
love,
jan
Comment Written 25-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and insight.
Comment from amada
This is a beautiful and caring chapter. I like that the story is linear and follows a readable sequence of events. Well written. I can't wait what's next!
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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This is a beautiful and caring chapter. I like that the story is linear and follows a readable sequence of events. Well written. I can't wait what's next!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Writeaway...
Yay the next chapter, I always look forward to the next chapter of your book Barbara. This is an excellent piece which kept me entertained throughout the story, a brilliant job, keep writing!! :)
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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Yay the next chapter, I always look forward to the next chapter of your book Barbara. This is an excellent piece which kept me entertained throughout the story, a brilliant job, keep writing!! :)
Comment Written 25-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from koneart
What I like about your writing is it has a good, clear, chronological order to it. You keep the pace without scattering around from one 'problem to the next'. Well done. I didn't see any errors. Your writing is good. One thing--and just a suggestion--you've kept [from what I have read] the action in the 'after thought'. You might want to go ahead and step into the 'crime' that's being committed. I haven't read the whole story, so you might have done this already and I missed it. Again though, just an all around good job. Kone
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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What I like about your writing is it has a good, clear, chronological order to it. You keep the pace without scattering around from one 'problem to the next'. Well done. I didn't see any errors. Your writing is good. One thing--and just a suggestion--you've kept [from what I have read] the action in the 'after thought'. You might want to go ahead and step into the 'crime' that's being committed. I haven't read the whole story, so you might have done this already and I missed it. Again though, just an all around good job. Kone
Comment Written 25-Apr-2011
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2011
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A few chapters back I wrote about Anna being beaten by her husband, Bobby. It was a blow by blow chapter. Thank you for your kind review.
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I had wondered about that. Kinda thought you had. It's a good story.