Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "Part one, Chapter 9"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Jay Squires
Very well written and edited, as uaual. Found no SPAG. Only one concern, below:
When Troy released Anna, she lifted Michael from the swing, tightly cuddled him, and glanced at Paul. "I'll do anything, as long as I don't lose my son." [I find it odd that she would say this while she has Michael in her arms.
Well done.
Jay
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2011
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Very well written and edited, as uaual. Found no SPAG. Only one concern, below:
When Troy released Anna, she lifted Michael from the swing, tightly cuddled him, and glanced at Paul. "I'll do anything, as long as I don't lose my son." [I find it odd that she would say this while she has Michael in her arms.
Well done.
Jay
Comment Written 21-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I will rethink that area.
Comment from Rama Rao
An excellent chapter, as usual. The story is moving on. Sometimes things turn for better well beyond our expectations.I hope Anna's troubles are over. Looking forward to the next post.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2011
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An excellent chapter, as usual. The story is moving on. Sometimes things turn for better well beyond our expectations.I hope Anna's troubles are over. Looking forward to the next post.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from ulster3
Hello, barbara.
Paul and his family are so generous to Anna. It would be good if everyone who needs the help could meet such nice people. You statistics in your notes provide a good grasp of the situation. You must have researched a lot for this.
I know you will enjoy being back at school.
Warmly, rebecca
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2011
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Hello, barbara.
Paul and his family are so generous to Anna. It would be good if everyone who needs the help could meet such nice people. You statistics in your notes provide a good grasp of the situation. You must have researched a lot for this.
I know you will enjoy being back at school.
Warmly, rebecca
Comment Written 21-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
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You are most welcome. It was truly an exceptional write. The research alone was exceptional. :)
Comment from Nanashirley
The story is growing well. I like the way everyone is being so kind. There are a lot of people out there who don't want to get involved. I saw no need for editing.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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The story is growing well. I like the way everyone is being so kind. There are a lot of people out there who don't want to get involved. I saw no need for editing.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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You are very correct about that. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from *erin*
Wow, so much is happening to Anna! I'm amazed that she can process it as well as she can. I really hope Bobby doesn't get released from jail any time soon. Troy and his family are such life savers for Anna. This was a very well written chapter with strong characters. No mistakes that I could find. Great job, and I'm looking forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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Wow, so much is happening to Anna! I'm amazed that she can process it as well as she can. I really hope Bobby doesn't get released from jail any time soon. Troy and his family are such life savers for Anna. This was a very well written chapter with strong characters. No mistakes that I could find. Great job, and I'm looking forward to reading more.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jclark
Like Anna, I am worried about what may be around the corner. You do a great job of bringing Anna's true feelings to life and I can "feel" her angst and fear. Great chapter.
Judy
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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Like Anna, I am worried about what may be around the corner. You do a great job of bringing Anna's true feelings to life and I can "feel" her angst and fear. Great chapter.
Judy
Comment Written 21-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Piggies Grandma
I enjoyed reading this chapter very much Barbara. Anna was very lucky to meet people that could help her. Your story was cleverly written and very well thought out. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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I enjoyed reading this chapter very much Barbara. Anna was very lucky to meet people that could help her. Your story was cleverly written and very well thought out. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Barbara, Anna is so lucky to have Troy's family support her as they do. Like she said, it is too good to be real. I'm wary what 'the corner' might bring her. Anyway she will have the break she needs. Thanks for an interesting chapter.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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Hi, Barbara, Anna is so lucky to have Troy's family support her as they do. Like she said, it is too good to be real. I'm wary what 'the corner' might bring her. Anyway she will have the break she needs. Thanks for an interesting chapter.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Queenise
Barbara, this is another great chapter to read. Kind of slowed it down a little which I thought was a smart move. Just like in real life. No one is rushing, busy, drama filled all of the time. Need a little relaxing. Good imagery,flow and pace and the story line is so enjoyable to read. Blessings,friend. Have a wonderful week at school.Queenise
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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Barbara, this is another great chapter to read. Kind of slowed it down a little which I thought was a smart move. Just like in real life. No one is rushing, busy, drama filled all of the time. Need a little relaxing. Good imagery,flow and pace and the story line is so enjoyable to read. Blessings,friend. Have a wonderful week at school.Queenise
Comment Written 21-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
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You're welcome. Queenise
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
My friend you've written a teriffic chapter. Anna is a special lady and I'm glad she found such wonderful people to help her our. Troy and his parents are wonderful. I can understand her feeling that with everything going so well that somethig bad is lurking around the corner. As always you're a professional writer. Your dialogue and descriptive writing are both very good. It's nice of Paul to give her a grand and set up a bank account for her that's also in Paul's name until she gets established. I have a feeling bad things are around the corner involving her abusive ex and his horrid mother. My dad says women like her has a set of balls. I look forward to your next chapter next weekend. Don't let school planning overwhelmed you. I pray for your continued good health. Have a blessed weekend.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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Barbara,
My friend you've written a teriffic chapter. Anna is a special lady and I'm glad she found such wonderful people to help her our. Troy and his parents are wonderful. I can understand her feeling that with everything going so well that somethig bad is lurking around the corner. As always you're a professional writer. Your dialogue and descriptive writing are both very good. It's nice of Paul to give her a grand and set up a bank account for her that's also in Paul's name until she gets established. I have a feeling bad things are around the corner involving her abusive ex and his horrid mother. My dad says women like her has a set of balls. I look forward to your next chapter next weekend. Don't let school planning overwhelmed you. I pray for your continued good health. Have a blessed weekend.
Melissa.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support.