Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I thought the court scene
was really well set up, Barbara..
I felt I was there with Anna.
Well-penned, my friend.
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Margaret
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2011
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I thought the court scene
was really well set up, Barbara..
I felt I was there with Anna.
Well-penned, my friend.
lace yoke short sleeved sweater
lace-yoked, short-sleeved sweater
pediatrician
paediatrician - unless USA spelling of course.
Margaret
Comment Written 19-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2011
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US spelling on pediatrician. Will fix the sweater issue.
Thank your for your kind review.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
your chapter is splendidly written with excellent descriptive writing and great dialogue. The court scene is riveting and well written. Talk about melodrama to the max. Her ex is a total ass hole and his mother is a big old loudmouthed bitch! I loved this part: {Bobby's mother jumped up and yelled, "My son's innocent. The bitch lied." "Bailiff, remove that person from the courtroom and forbid her entrance for the duration of this trial." Judge Kirk nodded toward Paul.} You, go Judge. Bobby is such a tool. I can't believe the nerve of Bobby's mother coming to her outside the court and being hateful and ugly. Good for Paul telling that bitch off. Bobby showed himself as an abusive turd! I look forward to your next chapter, my friend. This was a wicked excellent chapter. I'd recommend this chapter to others to read, but it appears you have tons of reviews. Have a nice week, my friend. I hope school is going good for you.
Melissa!
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Barbara,
your chapter is splendidly written with excellent descriptive writing and great dialogue. The court scene is riveting and well written. Talk about melodrama to the max. Her ex is a total ass hole and his mother is a big old loudmouthed bitch! I loved this part: {Bobby's mother jumped up and yelled, "My son's innocent. The bitch lied." "Bailiff, remove that person from the courtroom and forbid her entrance for the duration of this trial." Judge Kirk nodded toward Paul.} You, go Judge. Bobby is such a tool. I can't believe the nerve of Bobby's mother coming to her outside the court and being hateful and ugly. Good for Paul telling that bitch off. Bobby showed himself as an abusive turd! I look forward to your next chapter, my friend. This was a wicked excellent chapter. I'd recommend this chapter to others to read, but it appears you have tons of reviews. Have a nice week, my friend. I hope school is going good for you.
Melissa!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2011
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Thank your for your kind review.
Comment from The Stranger
Well first the story, This has captivated me from the first moment I saw it, it is excellent and the truth is that it just keeps getting better.
Secondly, great to see you back online my friend
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Well first the story, This has captivated me from the first moment I saw it, it is excellent and the truth is that it just keeps getting better.
Secondly, great to see you back online my friend
Comment Written 19-Sep-2011
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Thank your for your kind review. It's always good to hear from you.
Comment from stanishmichelle
Mrs. Rodgers started the ball rolling by getting kicked out of court. That's great. I was amused by Bobby's answer of what disciple vs hitting is.His answers are lame and shows ignorance and bullish behavior. This is a wonderful court scene, believable and moving. It is a nicely structure story and it held my attention once again.
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Mrs. Rodgers started the ball rolling by getting kicked out of court. That's great. I was amused by Bobby's answer of what disciple vs hitting is.His answers are lame and shows ignorance and bullish behavior. This is a wonderful court scene, believable and moving. It is a nicely structure story and it held my attention once again.
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Thank your for your kind review and your support.
Comment from smudge
I see what you meant that the divorce would be a re run of the assault proceedings. The question is will the mother be sent Anna's address in the papers.
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I see what you meant that the divorce would be a re run of the assault proceedings. The question is will the mother be sent Anna's address in the papers.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2011
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Thank your for your kind review.
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Your welcome
Comment from Larrypic11
I don't think it is overly long at all, Barbara.It holds your attention all the way through. I missed some of your earlier chapter with Bobby in them, but he comes across as a totally arrogant and obnoxious jerk. My only comment is to ask if that is what you intended, or did you want the abuser to be more subtle. Considering Booby's mother's character, a jerk would seem right. Good luck as you continue. Larry
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I don't think it is overly long at all, Barbara.It holds your attention all the way through. I missed some of your earlier chapter with Bobby in them, but he comes across as a totally arrogant and obnoxious jerk. My only comment is to ask if that is what you intended, or did you want the abuser to be more subtle. Considering Booby's mother's character, a jerk would seem right. Good luck as you continue. Larry
Comment Written 19-Sep-2011
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Thank your for your kind review.
Comment from Dractonis
This is a well produced, well written story with some unique flair. This is quite a sad theme but I think you have dealt with it well and your characterisation is excellent. Thank you for sharing.
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This is a well produced, well written story with some unique flair. This is quite a sad theme but I think you have dealt with it well and your characterisation is excellent. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2011
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Thank your for your kind review.
Comment from jadapenn
Hi Girlfriend, a nice fast paced chapter and good believable court procedures. This Bobby is a real ass and hope he goes and stays with his good momma.
Well written. I didn't notice any spag. luv jada
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Hi Girlfriend, a nice fast paced chapter and good believable court procedures. This Bobby is a real ass and hope he goes and stays with his good momma.
Well written. I didn't notice any spag. luv jada
Comment Written 19-Sep-2011
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Thank your for your kind review. Doing better??
Comment from peggles
I can't wait to read the next chapter of this gripping story
If is ever published and
I am sure it should be
I would buy a copy
Your notes are like a Minnie lesson very helpful
I am enjoying this very much
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I can't wait to read the next chapter of this gripping story
If is ever published and
I am sure it should be
I would buy a copy
Your notes are like a Minnie lesson very helpful
I am enjoying this very much
Comment Written 19-Sep-2011
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Thank your for your kind review.
Comment from Hareem.S
No this is not long really. Or maybe it doesnot seems like because it is interesting. I have been following the story and was looking forward to the courtroom part. Love this chapter too, cant wait to read more.
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No this is not long really. Or maybe it doesnot seems like because it is interesting. I have been following the story and was looking forward to the courtroom part. Love this chapter too, cant wait to read more.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2011
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Thank your for your kind review.