Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from fionageorge
Barbara, another excellent and realistic chapter, which sees Anna still wrapped up in her past. Can her late husband have someone stalk her? Or is she imagining. I guess I will learn more next chapter? Well written, good usse of dialogue and excellent characterisation. Thanks for sharing and warmest regards, Marijke :o)
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Barbara, another excellent and realistic chapter, which sees Anna still wrapped up in her past. Can her late husband have someone stalk her? Or is she imagining. I guess I will learn more next chapter? Well written, good usse of dialogue and excellent characterisation. Thanks for sharing and warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment Written 05-Dec-2011
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Thank yu for yoru kind review.
Comment from Chris Tee
This is now becoming quite a tense situation with the phone call and muffler here Barbara old sport.
I enjoyed this part so much and looking forward for the next.
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This is now becoming quite a tense situation with the phone call and muffler here Barbara old sport.
I enjoyed this part so much and looking forward for the next.
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Thank yu for yoru kind review.
Comment from The Stranger
mmmm more intrigue, the story certainly does not stop to pause for breath and I find each chapter more exciting by the minute, this is splendid writing!
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mmmm more intrigue, the story certainly does not stop to pause for breath and I find each chapter more exciting by the minute, this is splendid writing!
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Thank yu for yoru kind review.
Comment from emmaysavage
The story is moving right along, and I am liking both Anna and Troy as their characters and experiences develop. Waiting for more, Mary Ann
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The story is moving right along, and I am liking both Anna and Troy as their characters and experiences develop. Waiting for more, Mary Ann
Comment Written 04-Dec-2011
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Thank yu for yoru kind review.
Comment from RebelRose
Another good chapter. Good dialogue and description. The story is flowing along nicely and I like the way each chapter leaves up in suspense.
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Another good chapter. Good dialogue and description. The story is flowing along nicely and I like the way each chapter leaves up in suspense.
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Thank yu for yoru kind review.
Comment from gypsynet
suspenseful intro that cahes the
atention.. in the pursuing paragraphs,
the pacing is well attended with
the arrival of troy and images the
depict that danger is not yet resolved..
the role of troy is still to be reckoned with..
pounding write!
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suspenseful intro that cahes the
atention.. in the pursuing paragraphs,
the pacing is well attended with
the arrival of troy and images the
depict that danger is not yet resolved..
the role of troy is still to be reckoned with..
pounding write!
Comment Written 04-Dec-2011
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Thank yu for yoru kind review.
Comment from Rama Rao
Now I get this muffler thing. It is going to play a significant role in taking the story forward. Good going. I always look forward to Monday morning for there will be your post.
Wish you good luck.
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Now I get this muffler thing. It is going to play a significant role in taking the story forward. Good going. I always look forward to Monday morning for there will be your post.
Wish you good luck.
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Comment from patwannabe
barbara I'm still reading, still involved. One thing stood out this time and you can fix it or not, but in the next to the last paragraph, you have wait and waiter rather close together. You might change the word to "server". That's what they're called now anyhow. No more waiters. Your choice, of course.
still a good story. pat
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barbara I'm still reading, still involved. One thing stood out this time and you can fix it or not, but in the next to the last paragraph, you have wait and waiter rather close together. You might change the word to "server". That's what they're called now anyhow. No more waiters. Your choice, of course.
still a good story. pat
Comment Written 04-Dec-2011
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Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
A good place to end the chapter, with something about to happen. Will Anna rush into something with Troy because she feels threatened? That could be a mistake.
I enjoyed this read and have one trivial comment:
"But why would anybody stalk me." This is a question and needs a question mark.
Dave
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Barbara,
A good place to end the chapter, with something about to happen. Will Anna rush into something with Troy because she feels threatened? That could be a mistake.
I enjoyed this read and have one trivial comment:
"But why would anybody stalk me." This is a question and needs a question mark.
Dave
Comment Written 04-Dec-2011
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I just made that change. Thank you for the eagle eye. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
At last Anna relaxed enough to go to sleep in a soothing bubble bath. Then the phone summons her to the kitchen. she tried to answer, but was greeted first by silence and then by the sound of loud breathing. Then when she hung up she again heard the distinctive loud muffler. Was it real or only paranoia? She huddled on the kitchen floor.
Later that day, Troy took her to lunch. They discussed her fears and as Troy tried to ease her worries, they heard the loud muffler again.
Great cliffhanger.
These last two posts together portray a common pattern coming after a troubled divorce. Will Anna ever be or feel safe again?
Love and Irish hugs,
Roger
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Hi Barbara:)
At last Anna relaxed enough to go to sleep in a soothing bubble bath. Then the phone summons her to the kitchen. she tried to answer, but was greeted first by silence and then by the sound of loud breathing. Then when she hung up she again heard the distinctive loud muffler. Was it real or only paranoia? She huddled on the kitchen floor.
Later that day, Troy took her to lunch. They discussed her fears and as Troy tried to ease her worries, they heard the loud muffler again.
Great cliffhanger.
These last two posts together portray a common pattern coming after a troubled divorce. Will Anna ever be or feel safe again?
Love and Irish hugs,
Roger
Comment Written 04-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words. I always enjoy hearing from you. I hope things are going good.