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Lonely Hearts Meet

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Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.

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Comment from Tammara
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WOW...Another Great chapter in your book, I love reading your story! I know that I haven't been able to leave some reviews for you lately, but I was writing that story for the contest. So now I am getting caught up with yours. I love how your story is going with Anna. Such a great at showing Anna's insecurities as she still believes anything she does wrong is going to make Troy leave her. Also how Anna tries to have normal feelings and reactions to everyday life. Your story is such a good read and I can't wait to read more of it! It was a pleasure to read and to review your great work! :)


Tammara

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
    Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
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I remember the Indian Blanket he did. Beautiful-keep harping. Sometimes I think men like the attention they are getting when we nag. This is another well written chapter. I think all mothers blame themselves when harm comes to their children. Probably more so in this case though. Happy New Year!!! Debbie

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
    Happy New Year!! I agree, when my boys got hurt, I always figured I could have prevented it. Anna has self esteem issues. Thank yuo for the kind review.
Comment from emmaysavage
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Great, heartwarming story for a New Year's day. I found myself hoping that this accepting loving family can help melt away Anna's insecurities

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
    I am hoping they can to. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Janie King
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Another new tear..they're coming quicker and quicker..pretty soon I won't want to sleep for fear of missing something.. Very good chapter,,so sad the scars, the insecurities and fears that abuse leaves in one's life. God bless and Happy New Year.

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
    Thank you for the kind review and your support.
Comment from Shirley McLain
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Excellent chapter. Anna's insurcurities are easy to see in this chapter. I'm ready for her to get a little self esteem. Great job.

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
    I am working on that, but it can't happen over night or it won't be realistic. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hi Barb
I simply love your very natural way with your dialogue and how you showed how Troy doesn't want to show or say how much pain he really is in.

Gert

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
    My guys are like that. My third son broke his arm playing street hockey when he was in the 6th grade. He came home, I was standing over the stove stirring something. I remember it like it was yesterday. He stood in the kitchen doorway and calmly said, "Mom, I think I broke my arm." I looked up and said, "I think you did too." The bone was sticking out of an open wound. I rushed him to the ER. He never shed a tear until that night in bed, then the tears flowed. Thank you for the kind review.
reply by Gert sherwood on 01-Jan-2012


    Barb you are welcome.

    Your son must of been brave or he was in in shock of what happened to him.

    Gert
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
    I don't know, he's 26 and still has a scare on his arm from the bone sticking out.
Comment from livingwords
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Hey, Barbara. Continuing excellent writing. Excellent interpersonal dialogue. Very real sounding. Small nit: Looks like a typo, misspelling 'stitches" Best, Dan :))

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
    Thank you for catching that. My brain works faster than my fingers often, but of course sometimes my brain doesn't work at all. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from adewpearl
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I'll get desert. - dessert
What a lovely ending to this chapter, to have such a positive thing happen to offset the accident.
You do an excellent job of showing Anna's insecurities as she still believes anything she does wrong is going to make Troy leave her. Excellent dialogue that conveys characters' personalities and attitudes well. :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
    OH FART!!!!! I hate it when I do that. I will immediately fix that. Thank you for your eagle eye.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
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Anna's well-conditioned. Everything is her fault. Does she apologize if someone doesn't like the current weather? (I'm not being sarcastic - I did.)

This is coming along great, Barbara. :) Nancy

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
    I am sure she would, her self-esteem is that low. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
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Hi Barbara,

A good chapter. I've certainly missed a few in the interrim. Your characters have developed nicely and the story certainly has taken shape very well.

Patrick

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 01-Jan-2012
    Thank you for your kind review and I know I have said this before, but welcome back.