Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 55 "Part two, Chapter 17"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from WLHall
Very interesting story unfolding. I've read 2 or 3 of yours so far and they've been excellent. You're very good with dialogue and the actions of the characters. I only spotted a couple of minor, minor snags, but doesn't deserve a 4. You need to close the quotation when the waitress says...about five minutes. And you need a question mark when Everett ask "Troy, are you afraid you'll get hungry this afternoon?" See, no biggy. We all over look little things like that once in a while. But very good writing, keep it up!
Blessings,
Wanda
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2012
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Very interesting story unfolding. I've read 2 or 3 of yours so far and they've been excellent. You're very good with dialogue and the actions of the characters. I only spotted a couple of minor, minor snags, but doesn't deserve a 4. You need to close the quotation when the waitress says...about five minutes. And you need a question mark when Everett ask "Troy, are you afraid you'll get hungry this afternoon?" See, no biggy. We all over look little things like that once in a while. But very good writing, keep it up!
Blessings,
Wanda
Comment Written 04-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2012
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I will take care of those areas. Thank you for your eagle eye.
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No problem, glad I could help.
Comment from Writingfundimension
You've done an excellent job of portraying the kind of people that Anna has dealt with in her past and that give her a reason to be afraid, barbara. The good guys are ahead for now. Well done! Bev
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2012
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You've done an excellent job of portraying the kind of people that Anna has dealt with in her past and that give her a reason to be afraid, barbara. The good guys are ahead for now. Well done! Bev
Comment Written 04-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, barbara. Bev
Comment from Janie King
So the homeless man is with Troy and Everett in helping guard Anna...this would just be one's worst nightmare...good chapter. God bless.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2012
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So the homeless man is with Troy and Everett in helping guard Anna...this would just be one's worst nightmare...good chapter. God bless.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from misscookie
Another interesting chapter.I like how the story never comes to a dull moment
I like how your story moves.
This is a good write.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2012
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Another interesting chapter.I like how the story never comes to a dull moment
I like how your story moves.
This is a good write.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from gramalot8
Barbara, very good as always. I can see how uncomfortable and frightening for Anna to remember and talk about Slim. I hope the nightmare for her ends soon.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2012
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Barbara, very good as always. I can see how uncomfortable and frightening for Anna to remember and talk about Slim. I hope the nightmare for her ends soon.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Belinda
Hi Barbara. Wow... a dangerous trio is in the picture now. I do hope the homeless man is 'just' one and not dangerous to Anna as well...:) Thanks for sharing this interesting chapter.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2012
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Hi Barbara. Wow... a dangerous trio is in the picture now. I do hope the homeless man is 'just' one and not dangerous to Anna as well...:) Thanks for sharing this interesting chapter.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
Everett might to be closer to solving this case than he knows. Poor Ana is scared to death and I don't blame but she has Troy, Paul and Everett that will keep her safe...I hope. The conversations are as real as if I were standing there. Another wonderful chapter....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2012
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Hi Barbara,
Everett might to be closer to solving this case than he knows. Poor Ana is scared to death and I don't blame but she has Troy, Paul and Everett that will keep her safe...I hope. The conversations are as real as if I were standing there. Another wonderful chapter....blessings, chey
Comment Written 04-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Great job at building suspense. This is getting really creepy. It is so thoughtful of her to think of the homeless man when she was in so much fear. Well written!!! DEbbie
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2012
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Great job at building suspense. This is getting really creepy. It is so thoughtful of her to think of the homeless man when she was in so much fear. Well written!!! DEbbie
Comment Written 04-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Barbara, I did expect that the homeless vet was Sam, and that's a giggle to break up the rest of the very serious situation. This is developing really well. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2012
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Barbara, I did expect that the homeless vet was Sam, and that's a giggle to break up the rest of the very serious situation. This is developing really well. :) Nancy
Comment Written 04-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gungalo
Boy now that she knew wo this guy is what;s gonna happen? Will they fin him and have his arrested or is there gonna be more coming her way? Oh boy, this is beginning to worry me!
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2012
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Boy now that she knew wo this guy is what;s gonna happen? Will they fin him and have his arrested or is there gonna be more coming her way? Oh boy, this is beginning to worry me!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2012
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Thank you for your kind review. It will heat up as we move towards the end.
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Oh I am sure it will, Barbara.