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Lonely Hearts Meet

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Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.

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Comment from Cumbrianlass
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Love the image of all those Indian Blankets in the room. What a total sweetie Troy is. Anna is reviving, slowly but surely, thank goodness. So nice how she responds to her child. You described it well. It is one of the strongest bonds for sure.

Look forward to the next, Barbara.

Hugs, Av

 Comment Written 21-May-2012


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Comment from Margaret Snowdon
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what a hard, emotional time
for them all, particularly
for Troy whose heart is lost
to Anna...

I was so relieved when she opened her eyes
at the end.

Margaret

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Comment from RaymondJohn
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Interesting choice, Indian blankets. I'm glad the patient is recovering, and that the previous movements weren't mere quirks. Good chapter. Ray.

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Comment from guinea
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This is such a good story. I have followed some of it. I could picture Michael calling his momma Anna. It shows deep thinking and compassion.

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Comment from bookishfabler
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another lovely chapter. It read quickly, and I see and end nearing. I hope there is an epilogue with the relationship between Anna and Troy. Again, didn't notice any nits of spags.
hugs Heidi

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Comment from robina1978
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Yes, what you said at the end I have heard as well. Even knew somebody that took dogs in to help. But favourite songs and all these emotional things can be tried. Glad she is awake again.

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Comment from purrfect tale
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I thought at first this would be your final chapter. I'm rather glad there's more to come.

Troy turned off the overhead light before he (turned - instead of using the same word twice in one sentence, maybe try something like flipped or switched here) on the wall light away from Anna's bed(,) dimming the room lighting.

 Comment Written 21-May-2012


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    Thank you for the kind review and help. I will fix those areas.
Comment from Chris Tee
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Barbara this is another excellent pert chapter here and I am so glad that Anna is getting better. Well done with another splendid piece here ma'am.

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Comment from gramalot8
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Barbara, boy, that Doctor is a doubting Thomas for sure, and his timing is sure off. LOL... none the less, she is on her way back and hopefully none for the worse. Good job and always. Thanks so much for sharing this story and your talent with us.

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Comment from tinams
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You have a nice flow to your writing Barbara. Your characters feel real and your dialog sounds natural. I really enjoyed the read :) Tina

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