Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 72 "part one, Chapter 22"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, you did a great job writing this chapter where anna's parents come to visit and her mother is still judging her for past mistakes but they make up a little
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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this is very well written, barbara, you did a great job writing this chapter where anna's parents come to visit and her mother is still judging her for past mistakes but they make up a little
Comment Written 25-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jaeladarling
Another great chapter! Leave it up to good ol' dad to be thinking what he thought after all she'd already been through. LOL Nice work on this chapter. Keep it up!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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Another great chapter! Leave it up to good ol' dad to be thinking what he thought after all she'd already been through. LOL Nice work on this chapter. Keep it up!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind reviw.
Comment from RazberryBullet
Can't say I care much for Abner. I'm sure he means well, but he sounds hard to live with. Louise comes across as both caring and loving. With this background, I can see why Anna ran off.
Good job!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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Can't say I care much for Abner. I'm sure he means well, but he sounds hard to live with. Louise comes across as both caring and loving. With this background, I can see why Anna ran off.
Good job!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mumsyone
A good chapter, Barbara; so typical of some parents!
Betty shook the White's (Whites')hands.
Everyone found a seat,(no comma) but sat in silence(,) avoiding each other's eyes.
"How could your mother and me (I) hold our heads up?
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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A good chapter, Barbara; so typical of some parents!
Betty shook the White's (Whites')hands.
Everyone found a seat,(no comma) but sat in silence(,) avoiding each other's eyes.
"How could your mother and me (I) hold our heads up?
Comment Written 24-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2012
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I will fix the first two, but not the second, even though it's correct. It's dialogue and Abner isn't well educated. Thank you for the kind review.
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Okay.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Barbara, it seems that things are getting more complicated for Anna, especially after she met her parents with their views about everything. You are such a good story teller, my friend. You think about every thing and every detail...:)
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2012
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Hi, Barbara, it seems that things are getting more complicated for Anna, especially after she met her parents with their views about everything. You are such a good story teller, my friend. You think about every thing and every detail...:)
Comment Written 24-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from sunnilicious
I don't think the baby understood what happened. Maybe Anna doesn't either. I wonder about her true emotional state. Always someone new in the story. Good dialogue going along. I like that the family did grace before dinner. It's a refreshing change. Nicely done. Keep up the good work.
Lovely artwork.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2012
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I don't think the baby understood what happened. Maybe Anna doesn't either. I wonder about her true emotional state. Always someone new in the story. Good dialogue going along. I like that the family did grace before dinner. It's a refreshing change. Nicely done. Keep up the good work.
Lovely artwork.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
Seeing the parents after so many years is hard for Anna, but it makes an interesting and emotional story. You make her father the unforgiving type who has definite ideas about a woman's place. "A woman has no business trying to be independent." I can understand why Troy thinks it might help Anna heal if she sees her parents, but her father's attitude might just make matters worse. Very well written and believable. judi
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2012
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Seeing the parents after so many years is hard for Anna, but it makes an interesting and emotional story. You make her father the unforgiving type who has definite ideas about a woman's place. "A woman has no business trying to be independent." I can understand why Troy thinks it might help Anna heal if she sees her parents, but her father's attitude might just make matters worse. Very well written and believable. judi
Comment Written 24-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome. judi
Comment from adewpearl
Excellent character development of the father, especially.
Wonderful use of dialogue to convey his conservative attitudes and his suspicions. This is an excellent chapter. Brooke
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2012
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Excellent character development of the father, especially.
Wonderful use of dialogue to convey his conservative attitudes and his suspicions. This is an excellent chapter. Brooke
Comment Written 24-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2012
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from gramalot8
Barbara, boy, her daddy is really a winner. Makes one wonder why did he even come there? He will never really forgive her. And, lurking in the distance, maybe a hurricane to mix things up? Very good, entertaining chapter.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2012
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Barbara, boy, her daddy is really a winner. Makes one wonder why did he even come there? He will never really forgive her. And, lurking in the distance, maybe a hurricane to mix things up? Very good, entertaining chapter.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cornelius2000
Thanks for the background which helps a lot, as this is my first exposure to your novel. I really liked this Part of Chapter 22. Even jumping into the middle of it, it's obvious that this is excellent quality writing. Anna is completely beliveable in her vulnerability, and Troy has just the right amount of assertiveness. Abner has zero tact, but is doing what thinks is necessary to help Anna. I got a good feel, good vibes, about the novel and I wish you well with it.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2012
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Thanks for the background which helps a lot, as this is my first exposure to your novel. I really liked this Part of Chapter 22. Even jumping into the middle of it, it's obvious that this is excellent quality writing. Anna is completely beliveable in her vulnerability, and Troy has just the right amount of assertiveness. Abner has zero tact, but is doing what thinks is necessary to help Anna. I got a good feel, good vibes, about the novel and I wish you well with it.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.