Life, Love, and Other Disasters
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Come, Woodsman"A collection of poems on these themes
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Comment from uniqueauthor
What a beautiful tribute to someone had died. We all see our fathers as the mighty Oak that's upon the mount to guard our land and protect our home. This well written, long form sonnet, and I enjoyed the read.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2012
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What a beautiful tribute to someone had died. We all see our fathers as the mighty Oak that's upon the mount to guard our land and protect our home. This well written, long form sonnet, and I enjoyed the read.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2012
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Thank you. I am glad you appreciated the underlying message.
Steve
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You're welcome. Peace for today.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Excellent piece! The life of a tree parallels our own. Everything that lives must accept death. That last line is just perfect! :)
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2012
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Excellent piece! The life of a tree parallels our own. Everything that lives must accept death. That last line is just perfect! :)
Comment Written 07-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2012
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Phyllis, thank you for the review and the kind words.
Steve
Comment from justatuna
If I could give you a 6 star rating I would. I'm out. What a great poem. Perfect structure and incredible imagery. More imporantly, the message. You made my day with your beautiful words. Good luck in all your endeavors.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2012
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If I could give you a 6 star rating I would. I'm out. What a great poem. Perfect structure and incredible imagery. More imporantly, the message. You made my day with your beautiful words. Good luck in all your endeavors.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2012
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Thank you for your kind words. I appreciate your review and the virtual Six.
Steve
Comment from donaldww
This is a well written Shakespearean style sonnet. The meter is excellent, as are the perfect rhymes. And in the Autumn, time to chop down the old tree--the cycle of life.
Cheers!
DW
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2012
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This is a well written Shakespearean style sonnet. The meter is excellent, as are the perfect rhymes. And in the Autumn, time to chop down the old tree--the cycle of life.
Cheers!
DW
Comment Written 07-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2012
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Donald, thank you for your kind words. I appreciate your review.
Steve
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
What a touching tribute to your father's memory: this lovely and well-crafted sonnet. The final couplet is indeed powerful. [The tiniest of personal nitpicks: I think the "Summer" and "Autumn" do not need capitalization here.] My best regards, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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What a touching tribute to your father's memory: this lovely and well-crafted sonnet. The final couplet is indeed powerful. [The tiniest of personal nitpicks: I think the "Summer" and "Autumn" do not need capitalization here.] My best regards, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 07-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Thanks, Jeanie - possibly the capitalisation was because of the personification of the seasons - it felt right somehow, though I know it's not traditional.
Steve
Comment from Quire's Gal
What fun is was to study this one Steve. It's so rich in its metaphors it took me a few readings to absorb it all. So eloquently expressed with deep poetic style I could quote most of it as favorite lines, but alas, my typing skills are so poor, It takes me forever to review so bear with me.
I love your volta as you so tenderly express the reality of the situation.
I must admit to being a bit thrown off with last line and the repetition of the phrase "it's time" but ignore me Steve, for I'm sure it's just a personal preference and I applaud its originality.
Best wishes to you and thanks so very much for sharing. I have an 84 yr old father that just got out of the hospital so I can certainly relate to this commentary on mortality.
Cheers and be well,
Katherine
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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What fun is was to study this one Steve. It's so rich in its metaphors it took me a few readings to absorb it all. So eloquently expressed with deep poetic style I could quote most of it as favorite lines, but alas, my typing skills are so poor, It takes me forever to review so bear with me.
I love your volta as you so tenderly express the reality of the situation.
I must admit to being a bit thrown off with last line and the repetition of the phrase "it's time" but ignore me Steve, for I'm sure it's just a personal preference and I applaud its originality.
Best wishes to you and thanks so very much for sharing. I have an 84 yr old father that just got out of the hospital so I can certainly relate to this commentary on mortality.
Cheers and be well,
Katherine
Comment Written 07-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Thanks, Katherine for the thoughtful review and the personal response (as well as the six stars!)
Part of the feeling that permeates through that ending is a response to my father-in-law's situation - he is 85, has skin cancer, prostate cancer, heart irregularity and has now broken his hip. All of this has taken its toll on his mind as well. He is in a home now, confused, lonely and angry - guilt and unhappiness all round with no end in sight and more operations planned soon. My mother in law is still relatively fit, but has had her own battles with cancer. There is no doubt in my mind what the best outcome would be....
Thanks again - hope you didn't mind me getting that off my chest.
Steve
Comment from WilliamDeen
Your Sonnet Poem, Come, Woodsman, is well written with an excellent rhyming scheme and a smooth and easy cadence too. I like the story of the life of the tree. It tells the of the circle of life. GREAT POEM!
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Your Sonnet Poem, Come, Woodsman, is well written with an excellent rhyming scheme and a smooth and easy cadence too. I like the story of the life of the tree. It tells the of the circle of life. GREAT POEM!
Comment Written 07-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind words - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from lilyg
You did a good job on this verse. The flow from verse to verse is good and the rhyming is good as well. I think you told the story well, and made me anxious to see what the ending would be. You summed it up perfectly.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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You did a good job on this verse. The flow from verse to verse is good and the rhyming is good as well. I think you told the story well, and made me anxious to see what the ending would be. You summed it up perfectly.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind words - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
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My pleasure
Comment from janalma
What a lovely and poignant poem. A fine tribute to your father. Yes, we do grow old and die, and it's sad but inevitable for everyone and everything. I judge mostly on content and it was very good, but the poem itself seemed excellent to me.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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What a lovely and poignant poem. A fine tribute to your father. Yes, we do grow old and die, and it's sad but inevitable for everyone and everything. I judge mostly on content and it was very good, but the poem itself seemed excellent to me.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind words - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Joy Graham
I really enjoyed the story you tell of this tree. I enjoyed your meter and rhyme scheme. Best wishes to you in this contest.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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I really enjoyed the story you tell of this tree. I enjoyed your meter and rhyme scheme. Best wishes to you in this contest.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind words - glad you enjoyed.
Steve