Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 49 "The Dying Art"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Tegan1311
A very well done poem. It's deep and serious, but not overwhelming. It's easy to understand and your words flow well. One thing: I think it might sound better if you said, "We try to surround ourselves with people (of) integrity," instead of using 'with' again. Just my opinion.
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A very well done poem. It's deep and serious, but not overwhelming. It's easy to understand and your words flow well. One thing: I think it might sound better if you said, "We try to surround ourselves with people (of) integrity," instead of using 'with' again. Just my opinion.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2014
Comment from Kausar_Javeria
Hello there~
Wow. this is really well-written. And I'm now gonna go read the other chapters~ Great Job and Good Luck with the rest of the book~
God Bless~!
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Hello there~
Wow. this is really well-written. And I'm now gonna go read the other chapters~ Great Job and Good Luck with the rest of the book~
God Bless~!
Comment Written 13-Jun-2014
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Deepwater,
Love the artwork! Great message in this poem, as you address the theme of the contest very well too.
Nicely done.
Cheers,
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
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Hi Deepwater,
Love the artwork! Great message in this poem, as you address the theme of the contest very well too.
Nicely done.
Cheers,
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
Comment Written 13-Jun-2014
Comment from anthony shacknofsky
This poem contains a very deep message that leads one to personal introspection as to one's own conduct in dealing with other persons that enter one's lives, and to correct our own faults. For that I thank you.
It is a well written piece with good use of vocabulary and sound advice, but I found it more in the nature of prose than poetry, and for that reason I have not awarded it six stars
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This poem contains a very deep message that leads one to personal introspection as to one's own conduct in dealing with other persons that enter one's lives, and to correct our own faults. For that I thank you.
It is a well written piece with good use of vocabulary and sound advice, but I found it more in the nature of prose than poetry, and for that reason I have not awarded it six stars
Comment Written 13-Jun-2014
Comment from risktaker
This is the experience of life. We come into life as individuals and we die as individuals. We all experience hurt, rejection, good friends and some untrustworthy friends. Life is full if risks and some failures. We all do the best we can at the time. We gain wisdom and then we die.
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This is the experience of life. We come into life as individuals and we die as individuals. We all experience hurt, rejection, good friends and some untrustworthy friends. Life is full if risks and some failures. We all do the best we can at the time. We gain wisdom and then we die.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2014
Comment from visionary1234
a little too prosaic for my poetry tastes, though a lovely summary of what makes life tick! I'll be interested to see what follows. A few very minor spags:
friends that(who) make you laugh
no illusion(s) of(about) what is to come.
flexibility and accountability to others (who)cross
"who" is used where the antecedent is 'people' - otherwise 'that' or 'which' for objects
:)Sharyn
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a little too prosaic for my poetry tastes, though a lovely summary of what makes life tick! I'll be interested to see what follows. A few very minor spags:
friends that(who) make you laugh
no illusion(s) of(about) what is to come.
flexibility and accountability to others (who)cross
"who" is used where the antecedent is 'people' - otherwise 'that' or 'which' for objects
:)Sharyn
Comment Written 13-Jun-2014
Comment from Charlene0513
To deepwater,
To be able to express yourself and know that your emotions about life are sincere and in all essence permeates your true self and have fulfilled your purpose on earth without compromise I'm sure He will say "Well done my faithful servant."
Charlene
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To deepwater,
To be able to express yourself and know that your emotions about life are sincere and in all essence permeates your true self and have fulfilled your purpose on earth without compromise I'm sure He will say "Well done my faithful servant."
Charlene
Comment Written 13-Jun-2014
Comment from Laurie's Legacy
Beautifully written, such wisdom in so few lines, the message you share should be taken to heart by everyone who reads it. Though you are referencing a loss in life, it really pertains to more than that. Thanks for sharing.
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Beautifully written, such wisdom in so few lines, the message you share should be taken to heart by everyone who reads it. Though you are referencing a loss in life, it really pertains to more than that. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2014
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is beautifully penned. I tend to be a bit less hard core and go by what I feel so I feel this is intended to be free verse and leave it go at that. You convey a depth of emotion and passion that is easily conveyed to the reader in your well chosen words. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
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This is beautifully penned. I tend to be a bit less hard core and go by what I feel so I feel this is intended to be free verse and leave it go at that. You convey a depth of emotion and passion that is easily conveyed to the reader in your well chosen words. Nicely done and I thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2014
Comment from Devon Phipps
So deep and full of emotion. I read it a couple of times because, the message is so deep. Also beautiful presentation. The poem to me contains a lot of life lessons. Thank you for sharing Gary :)
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So deep and full of emotion. I read it a couple of times because, the message is so deep. Also beautiful presentation. The poem to me contains a lot of life lessons. Thank you for sharing Gary :)
Comment Written 13-Jun-2014