Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

Formatting in a color other than blue really makes the blue stand out. I like the Satori first. It seems to pack more punch. Maybe that's just because it is a fresh look at the haiku. Excellent imagery in your concise wording.

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014

Thanks, debi, and I struggled a bit with the background color, I'll admit. I decided on the orange after tying several shades of blues and whites. I truly appreciate your wonderful review, and I'm glad that you liked it.

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

As you probably know, I am not a poet and couldn't tell a Satori from a Lamborghini, but this reads so well and I love the use of cerulean, such a lovely word. Despite my lack of knowledge of rules for this style, I enjoyed this very much and wish you all the best in the contest.

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 Comment Written 17-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2014

Thanks.

Comment from PearlW

Excellent

I'm not great at reviewing poetry, especially haikus ... but I'll give it a bash.

I love the words you use - they are so descriptive. Cerulean isn't a word you come across very often to describe what is basically, blue.

I did notice you used the same variation of 'Neath in another haiku, but that's hardly important, is it? I just pick up on these little things. It's annoying, I know. Sorry.

Excellent job.



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 Comment Written 17-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014

Thank you, Pearl, and ironically, these were written months apart. I wrote the wolf one for the contest, and the other has been sitting in my word processor for quite awhile, although I did reverse the satori line.

I guess that word somehow has possessed me, LOL. :>}

reply by PearlW on 17-Jun-2014

It happens. Sometimes, we just really, really like a word and can't stop using it ;-)