Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Winds of Change"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from RGstar
Good rhetorical questions here. The winds of change is forever blowing and we know not where they may find us or in which direction they will take us. We hope that they will be kind for we are forever at their mercy.
Nice write,
Best wishes,
RGstar
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Good rhetorical questions here. The winds of change is forever blowing and we know not where they may find us or in which direction they will take us. We hope that they will be kind for we are forever at their mercy.
Nice write,
Best wishes,
RGstar
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
Comment from Charlene0513
To deepwater,
An overwhelming sense of emptiness and uncertainty of the future with a so-called soul-mate.
Many areas of proximate statements that leave you hanging onto the past
Nice simile: the discomfort of being apart,
Like ripples betraying still waters,
Charlene
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To deepwater,
An overwhelming sense of emptiness and uncertainty of the future with a so-called soul-mate.
Many areas of proximate statements that leave you hanging onto the past
Nice simile: the discomfort of being apart,
Like ripples betraying still waters,
Charlene
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
Comment from adewpearl
good use of alliteration in phrases like so still and dare to dream
like ripples disturbing still waters - an effective simile
excellent use of imagery to express soulful emotion
good use of questions to intensify the emotion
Brooke
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good use of alliteration in phrases like so still and dare to dream
like ripples disturbing still waters - an effective simile
excellent use of imagery to express soulful emotion
good use of questions to intensify the emotion
Brooke
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
Comment from McMurry903
I like the somber tone and longing questions you bring to light here, GW. I like questions within a poem as it often engages the reader further into the piece. Very well done, I enjoyed much!
Brian
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I like the somber tone and longing questions you bring to light here, GW. I like questions within a poem as it often engages the reader further into the piece. Very well done, I enjoyed much!
Brian
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
Comment from Dean Kuch
Sometimes, dreams are all we have left, deepwater.
I loved the line, "Like ripples betraying still waters, will you stay with me?" Nice metaphor for longing and doubt...
The entire free style verse is both genuine and touching. A meandering melancholy musing...
Well done.
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Sometimes, dreams are all we have left, deepwater.
I loved the line, "Like ripples betraying still waters, will you stay with me?" Nice metaphor for longing and doubt...
The entire free style verse is both genuine and touching. A meandering melancholy musing...
Well done.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
Comment from Bryan G
This is an excellent poem. I can feel the ache of unanswered questions from the one you love. My favorite line is, "When I fall will you extend your inner spirit to catch my worthlessness,". I hope you get your questions answered in the way your heart desires.
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This is an excellent poem. I can feel the ache of unanswered questions from the one you love. My favorite line is, "When I fall will you extend your inner spirit to catch my worthlessness,". I hope you get your questions answered in the way your heart desires.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
Comment from chasennov
Writings From the Heart 'Winds of Change.' No problems with this poem either. The chapters just keep on getting better, and better. Well done.
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Writings From the Heart 'Winds of Change.' No problems with this poem either. The chapters just keep on getting better, and better. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
Comment from Smoothiecool
are you the love of my life
or are you going to be cast aside an forgotten
good visual to portray your message
true love will last
but if not can we take the rejection
flows well
cheers..Smoothiecool
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are you the love of my life
or are you going to be cast aside an forgotten
good visual to portray your message
true love will last
but if not can we take the rejection
flows well
cheers..Smoothiecool
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
Comment from Jackarrie
a beautiful poem, it appears to be written from the heart, about feeling insecure in the relationship.
Like ripples betraying still waters, will you stay with me?
Or run for the shelter of the near shores,
I feel these two line do not fit well, I would change them to
Like ripples betraying still waters, will you leave me?
and run for shelter to the nearest shore.
Well written.
Mary
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a beautiful poem, it appears to be written from the heart, about feeling insecure in the relationship.
Like ripples betraying still waters, will you stay with me?
Or run for the shelter of the near shores,
I feel these two line do not fit well, I would change them to
Like ripples betraying still waters, will you leave me?
and run for shelter to the nearest shore.
Well written.
Mary
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014
Comment from royowen
I guess there's nothing worse than getting to know somebody and the threat of them leaving is always at the back of your mind! It takes time to learn to trust, and even then if you've had a history of betrayal it can be difficult to process that on board! Well written, articulate and descriptive, well done, Blessings, Roy.
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I guess there's nothing worse than getting to know somebody and the threat of them leaving is always at the back of your mind! It takes time to learn to trust, and even then if you've had a history of betrayal it can be difficult to process that on board! Well written, articulate and descriptive, well done, Blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014