Comment from Arkine

Excellent

Well, I'm glad in the end she came to her senses and rescued him. I can see how, he couldn't really blame them, what do you do when there is nothing to eat? Still, rather creepy, but a happy ending it seems, or beginning. Nicely done!

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reply by the author on 03-May-2010

Thank you, Arkine. I wanted to end Part 1 with a strong sense of hope, born in the darkest moments. We shall see where it leads the Wandering man ...

Mike

Comment from closetpoetjester

Excellent

Wow, this was an epic read but well worth staying on the ride for. You write with such clever turn of phrase I am in awe. The background info was appreciated and helped towards my understanding of this thoughtfully crafted piece as I read. I also got many visuals from your write so your narratives displayed just the right amount of description and were by no means overdone.
A pleasure to read and I think a truly wonderful write on your behalf.
Cheers and thanks for sharing.
Closetpoetjester

 Comment Written 02-May-2010

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reply by the author on 03-May-2010

Thank you, CPJ :-). I've always been a very visual writer, always imagining the scenes I'm depicting playing out in front of me, so it's great to know that's carried through into this story/poem hybrid of mine. Thanks for your great comments :-)

Mike

Comment from patmedium

Excellent

I am pleased to see that you are well into your stride now, Mike... I have thoroughly enjoyed this part as well! This is, as I am sure I have said before, a highly individual piece of work. Pat. xxx

 Comment Written 02-May-2010

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reply by the author on 03-May-2010

Thank you, Pat. Yes, I'm getting on well now. I had trouble with chapter 3, but this one came out with nary a hitch :-)

Mike

reply by patmedium on 03-May-2010

I suspect you've now got some sort of skeleton of the future plot etched out in the back of your mind. Let's face it, you're heading off in a direction you didn't originally plan, aren't you? It's compulsive, this read... fantasy in a row of nutshells! Pat. xx

reply by the author on 03-May-2010

Oh, I've never been great at plotting; I know how I want to start, and I let the characters lead me from there. I usually sketch out a detailed plotonce I'm about half way through something :-)

In other words, you got me!

Mike

reply by patmedium on 03-May-2010

LOL

Comment from kintesiegel

Excellent

You have some brilliant lines here. This seems like a post modern version of the Greek philosopher looking for one honest man. what was his name?

Do you mean "nought" here:dead people in a dying land
have nowt to keep them strong.

So now that he has a good woman is everything all right?

 Comment Written 02-May-2010

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reply by the author on 03-May-2010

Thank you :-). Nowt is just English dialect for Naught, but it's thrown an awful lot of reviewers, so clearly it's not well known across the pond! He has his companion now, and hope in his heart, but the laws of drama mean the sailing cannot be smoothe... ;-)

Mike

Comment from Josipher32

Excellent

Fleedleflump,

"Black Moon Glinting" was a wonderfully written fantasy poem chapter of your poetry book "Chronicles of the Wandering Man" There was great imagery.

 Comment Written 02-May-2010

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reply by the author on 03-May-2010

Thank you, J. I really appreciate the read and review :-)

Mike

Comment from rivki1111

Excellent

Hello, this is quite a story. It is detailed and you have a very descriptive way of writing.

I saw no errors, just a lot of great imagery.

Thanks for sharing your poetry, which I would recommend to other readers for review, cheers, rivki

 Comment Written 02-May-2010

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reply by the author on 03-May-2010

Thank you, Rivki. I'm so glad you enjoyed it, and thankful that you took the time to share your thoughts with me :-)

Mike

Comment from cheyennewy

Excellent

Hi Mike,

This is an amazing poem and one I thoroughly enjoyed reading. Your rhyme is impeccable and the phrases are outstanding. In your first line in X111 I suggest using 'freed' instead of 'loosed' unless you think it changes the meaning. Also in X111 third verse last line you have a typo after 'now' Good writing! chey

 Comment Written 02-May-2010

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reply by the author on 03-May-2010

Thank you, Chey; I'm so glad you enjoyed the read :-). Nowt is an English variant of Naught, but I'm quickly realising it's not traversed the Atlantic! I'll have a think about 'freed'; I don't think it changes the meaning, and it does seem to flow a little better. Thank you :-)

Mike

Comment from skye

Excellent

Once again you have captured the dark and light side, entwined them in a poetic journey that takes thought and contemplation to thoroughly glean.
Your words are stark, well formulated, and the ending is a wow.
Well done.

 Comment Written 02-May-2010

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reply by the author on 03-May-2010

Thank you, Skye :-). I was really on a roll when I wrote this one, and then the last poem (XIV) I wrote at the last minute, because I felt a proper conclusion was needed. So glad you enjoyed :-)

Mike

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I admire your penning this odyssey and was intrigued by your many metaphors, from "obscene" and "Medusa/snakes" to "dream rained" and "Night Adam" and "Eve." I also liked your "lunatics" simile and personification of the "moon." Thanks for sharing your vivid imagination and storytelling talent.

 Comment Written 02-May-2010

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reply by the author on 03-May-2010

Thank you, Joan :-). I'm flattered by your wonderful review.

Mike

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

This is a very well written story/poem with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. The adventure of Life is dependant upon many things; good and bad.

 Comment Written 02-May-2010

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reply by the author on 03-May-2010

Thank you! Yes, this is very much a tale of the necessary contrast between dark and light.

Mike

reply by c_lucas on 03-May-2010

You're welcome, Mike. Charlie