Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "The promise given"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from FredCollingwood
Your last two have been loaded with heaviosity. Well done. One comment:
The eyes, the inner window giving lightness to the spirit, or darkness and (dome), > doom?
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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Your last two have been loaded with heaviosity. Well done. One comment:
The eyes, the inner window giving lightness to the spirit, or darkness and (dome), > doom?
Comment Written 17-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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thank you Fred for the comment and review Gary
Comment from Ronni
Very elegan and enigmatic poem here on "The Promise"
relating to a promise given during exchange of marital
vowes. Very serene and succinct presentation of the
entire being's engagement and entwining of virtues and
strengths each has to offer. Great artwork and tone
throughout. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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Very elegan and enigmatic poem here on "The Promise"
relating to a promise given during exchange of marital
vowes. Very serene and succinct presentation of the
entire being's engagement and entwining of virtues and
strengths each has to offer. Great artwork and tone
throughout. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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thank you for reading Ronni
Comment from evolove
i really love the used of the metaphors, really captivating, I want to read and read it again (The feet, you stand like an oak, holding the promise of your commitments) , especially this lin. powerful conveyed and so deep
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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i really love the used of the metaphors, really captivating, I want to read and read it again (The feet, you stand like an oak, holding the promise of your commitments) , especially this lin. powerful conveyed and so deep
Comment Written 17-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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thanks
Comment from JimLee
I find the contrasts you write of interesting and tend to agree with most of them. I like how you went from the spiritual to the physical and how they all relate to the whole being.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2010
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I find the contrasts you write of interesting and tend to agree with most of them. I like how you went from the spiritual to the physical and how they all relate to the whole being.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2010
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thank you for reading jimlee
Comment from Kingsland
This poem flows well and has some good wisdom in its poetic verve. I found nothing in error in this well written verse. It was just a delight to have read and written a review for... John
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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This poem flows well and has some good wisdom in its poetic verve. I found nothing in error in this well written verse. It was just a delight to have read and written a review for... John
Comment Written 17-Jun-2010
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thank you John
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi GW,
I like this poem with its wise words. You have some good phrasing and your word choices are well done. Just a couple of things.."win's" should be "wins" and I am wondering if in your 10th line do you mean "doom" rather than "dome?" You last line is especially powerful. Well done....chey
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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Hi GW,
I like this poem with its wise words. You have some good phrasing and your word choices are well done. Just a couple of things.."win's" should be "wins" and I am wondering if in your 10th line do you mean "doom" rather than "dome?" You last line is especially powerful. Well done....chey
Comment Written 17-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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thank you for the comment and review chey Gary
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your sharing of your words of wisdom. I especially liked your many metaphors: "eclipse," "butterfly" and "window/dome." I very much admired the "oak" simile in your powerful last line.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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I enjoyed your sharing of your words of wisdom. I especially liked your many metaphors: "eclipse," "butterfly" and "window/dome." I very much admired the "oak" simile in your powerful last line.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2010
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thank you Joan for reading
Comment from Ruthi Hurwitz
Another though provoking poem, providing a choice and of opposites as well as a cause and effect list of the consequences of the choices we make. I liked the listing of the separate body parts and their involvement in making up the whole: heart, mind, soul, body, eyes, hands, legs and feet.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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Another though provoking poem, providing a choice and of opposites as well as a cause and effect list of the consequences of the choices we make. I liked the listing of the separate body parts and their involvement in making up the whole: heart, mind, soul, body, eyes, hands, legs and feet.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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thank you Ruthi for reading
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
An enjoyable piece of spiritual
poetry - your words ringing true.
The mind win's
The mind wins
The temple(,) your body(,) is given freely in love
The eyes(,) the inner window
The hands(,)
The legs give the - now this is correct as it is a run-on sentence - but the others you've presented like listings.
Margaret
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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An enjoyable piece of spiritual
poetry - your words ringing true.
The mind win's
The mind wins
The temple(,) your body(,) is given freely in love
The eyes(,) the inner window
The hands(,)
The legs give the - now this is correct as it is a run-on sentence - but the others you've presented like listings.
Margaret
Comment Written 17-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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thank you Margaret for the commets on change and your welcome review
Comment from JeJo
My favorite lines were
"The hands earthly importance helps to carry your compassion in life,
The legs give the strength to move on the path set by your forefathers,
The feet you stand like an oak, holding the promise of your commitments" There is a lot of determination exuding from these words. - JeJo
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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My favorite lines were
"The hands earthly importance helps to carry your compassion in life,
The legs give the strength to move on the path set by your forefathers,
The feet you stand like an oak, holding the promise of your commitments" There is a lot of determination exuding from these words. - JeJo
Comment Written 17-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2010
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thank you Jejo