Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Hand In Hand"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from fictionwriter
I love the old pictures and the older ways of love. There was so much respect and genuine feeling back then, not so superficial and shallow as today. Great job.
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I love the old pictures and the older ways of love. There was so much respect and genuine feeling back then, not so superficial and shallow as today. Great job.
Comment Written 21-May-2010
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thank you
Comment from Wild Flower
I liked the first line. Its full of optimism and hope. Not sure about the second line. Sorry, in my head it just doesn't go along with the first. Is there something that I'm missing? I thought there might be a detail about the lovely picutre that I wasn't understanding.
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I liked the first line. Its full of optimism and hope. Not sure about the second line. Sorry, in my head it just doesn't go along with the first. Is there something that I'm missing? I thought there might be a detail about the lovely picutre that I wasn't understanding.
Comment Written 21-May-2010
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thank you
Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas
Fewer are your words, and you you make them count.
This is enjoyable stuff.
The faith of love blooms high this day
As Birds on wing do hail[ loved the flow]
Best of luck in the contest
K
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Fewer are your words, and you you make them count.
This is enjoyable stuff.
The faith of love blooms high this day
As Birds on wing do hail[ loved the flow]
Best of luck in the contest
K
Comment Written 21-May-2010
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thank you
Comment from bhogg
What can you do in fifteen words? I think you did pretty well. I've always thought pictures were important, I think especially so in such a short work. The picture was perfect. You can see love in her face and even her confident walk
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What can you do in fifteen words? I think you did pretty well. I've always thought pictures were important, I think especially so in such a short work. The picture was perfect. You can see love in her face and even her confident walk
Comment Written 21-May-2010
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thank you
Comment from percival86jack
Kudos my friend for a very short dissertation on love! Ah yes, spring, when a young man's fancy turn to what the ladies have been thinking about all year long! LOL Cheers!
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Kudos my friend for a very short dissertation on love! Ah yes, spring, when a young man's fancy turn to what the ladies have been thinking about all year long! LOL Cheers!
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Comment from sgalletti
I am reviewing all of the short poem entries before voting. Great picture. Nice metaphor. Best of luck in the contest. Sue
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I am reviewing all of the short poem entries before voting. Great picture. Nice metaphor. Best of luck in the contest. Sue
Comment Written 21-May-2010
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thank you Sue
Comment from Peter@Poole
I guess these lines speak of the lady in the picture anticipating a meeting with her lover, but it has to be a guess. You are buying lots of favourable reviews; why not earn them by spending more time refining your poetry? Don't copy my suggestion; you can surely do it yourself. I'm offering help, not censure.
The faith of love flies high this day [alliteration added]
As Birds sing on the wing [rhyme added]
P.S. I've regraded but I stand by my critique, Peter
reply by the author on 21-May-2010
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I guess these lines speak of the lady in the picture anticipating a meeting with her lover, but it has to be a guess. You are buying lots of favourable reviews; why not earn them by spending more time refining your poetry? Don't copy my suggestion; you can surely do it yourself. I'm offering help, not censure.
The faith of love flies high this day [alliteration added]
As Birds sing on the wing [rhyme added]
P.S. I've regraded but I stand by my critique, Peter
Comment Written 21-May-2010
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thanks
Comment from donnadiann
Of course I adore this short poem which says so much briefly. But since the picture is set in the 40's I relate to that to, because my parents met and married then, actually it was 1946 when they married. I feel like maybe you had someone in mind from this time period, but whatever the inspiration, I think the words speak of being in love and being so happy.
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Of course I adore this short poem which says so much briefly. But since the picture is set in the 40's I relate to that to, because my parents met and married then, actually it was 1946 when they married. I feel like maybe you had someone in mind from this time period, but whatever the inspiration, I think the words speak of being in love and being so happy.
Comment Written 21-May-2010
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thank you
Comment from MsRefusenik
What a perfect picture to go with the dreams of young love coming soon. You really said a lot in such a very short poem. You deserve your "Recognized" award and more. Good luck in the contest.
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What a perfect picture to go with the dreams of young love coming soon. You really said a lot in such a very short poem. You deserve your "Recognized" award and more. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-May-2010
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thank you
Comment from dportwood
This poem leaves me rather puzzled. 'Faith of love' to me is a strange expression. Hailing birds on wing also seems strange.
Duane
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This poem leaves me rather puzzled. 'Faith of love' to me is a strange expression. Hailing birds on wing also seems strange.
Duane
Comment Written 21-May-2010
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thank you for reading