Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "October Morn"A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from Leineco
An interesting piece of introspection, in contemplation of that day that will some day come. Will I be able to say I did my best, did I pass the test my father set?
Regrets may have set the path we are on, but so did the triumphs and glories -
life is full of opportunities - may we grab them all and make the best of it.
:-)
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An interesting piece of introspection, in contemplation of that day that will some day come. Will I be able to say I did my best, did I pass the test my father set?
Regrets may have set the path we are on, but so did the triumphs and glories -
life is full of opportunities - may we grab them all and make the best of it.
:-)
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
Comment from w.j.debi
Strange, isn't that we will never know the legacy we leave behind. It may be one that lasts many generations or not. Well expressed, pensive work. Thank you for sharing.
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Strange, isn't that we will never know the legacy we leave behind. It may be one that lasts many generations or not. Well expressed, pensive work. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
Comment from mommydear42
Well, thanks a lot for making me cry. Of course, some days it is easy to do. Your poem was lovely. I'm one of those people who likes happy endings, but knowing full well that
they can't always be. I did enjoy the poem, even though I read it through wet tissue. It is beautiful.
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Well, thanks a lot for making me cry. Of course, some days it is easy to do. Your poem was lovely. I'm one of those people who likes happy endings, but knowing full well that
they can't always be. I did enjoy the poem, even though I read it through wet tissue. It is beautiful.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Memories and regrets! This is a contemplative poem - slightly sad but very well written. Free verse with occasional rhyme. First and last line repeated is very effective. Reading this, your title, Writings From The Heart. is very apt. I do get the impression you are writing this from the heart. A good read. Regards Dorothy
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Memories and regrets! This is a contemplative poem - slightly sad but very well written. Free verse with occasional rhyme. First and last line repeated is very effective. Reading this, your title, Writings From The Heart. is very apt. I do get the impression you are writing this from the heart. A good read. Regards Dorothy
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
Comment from TAB_that's me
This gives the reader much to ponder - As I lay at rest, did my life pass the test set by my father before?
rest in peace.
Teresa
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This gives the reader much to ponder - As I lay at rest, did my life pass the test set by my father before?
rest in peace.
Teresa
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
Comment from lakeport
October morn, indeed that's a very heartfelt expressed story poem, very nice flow, I enjoyed reading it. God bless you. Lakeport.
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October morn, indeed that's a very heartfelt expressed story poem, very nice flow, I enjoyed reading it. God bless you. Lakeport.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
Very good, Gary. I enjoyed this piece, also.
As I lay at rest, did my life pass the test set by my father before?
Regrets I have some, did it change the outcome, to what was so expected>>>clever choice of words. Feeling is really here.
Isaiah
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2010
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Very good, Gary. I enjoyed this piece, also.
As I lay at rest, did my life pass the test set by my father before?
Regrets I have some, did it change the outcome, to what was so expected>>>clever choice of words. Feeling is really here.
Isaiah
Comment Written 03-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2010
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thank you Isaiah
Comment from idnami
There is a bravery and quiet pride in this poem that I really like. The speaker works through self doubt by reflecting that he has done the best he could with uncertainty, confusion and the tools life presented him. The opening and closing lines are like parentheses framing a too-short life.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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There is a bravery and quiet pride in this poem that I really like. The speaker works through self doubt by reflecting that he has done the best he could with uncertainty, confusion and the tools life presented him. The opening and closing lines are like parentheses framing a too-short life.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2010
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thank you for reading
Comment from LadyWave
I thought this was a very thought-provoking piece, making one examine their own life and what they'll leave behind. Great job with the rhythm and flow of it. Great work.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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I thought this was a very thought-provoking piece, making one examine their own life and what they'll leave behind. Great job with the rhythm and flow of it. Great work.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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thank you
Comment from InHisownwrite
What a great piece! Who couldn't learn from reading this?
We all have regrets.. But, it's when we learn from them, and are able to pass it on, that we can lay down, knowing that we did our best.... That's what October Morn says to me! Bryan
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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What a great piece! Who couldn't learn from reading this?
We all have regrets.. But, it's when we learn from them, and are able to pass it on, that we can lay down, knowing that we did our best.... That's what October Morn says to me! Bryan
Comment Written 01-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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thank you for the welcome review Bryan