Another Pretty Face
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Comment from FredCollingwood
First of all how are you?
Now ... what kind of meds are they giving you (and make sure you spell it right. I don't want to get the wrong kind.)
One of the best sexual scenes I've read (and the second bes, and the third, and....)
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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First of all how are you?
Now ... what kind of meds are they giving you (and make sure you spell it right. I don't want to get the wrong kind.)
One of the best sexual scenes I've read (and the second bes, and the third, and....)
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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I am posting a cancer essay next week. I will be explaining a little about my next surgery and I just mentioned the chemo and radation. I didn't go into the types of meds, maybe I should. I might acutally help someone.
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I was trying to make a little joke, because your story was so sexy. I thought it might be the meds. If it is, I want some.
Best of luck to you. I hope everything goes well.
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Sorry, I didn't catch it. I was worried that it wasn't sexy enough. Some of the stuff written here is down right steamy and I didn't feel this was anywhere close.
Comment from Meshe Nair
Excellent chapter. Romance and lovemaking scene is nicely presented. I can visualize well. Can't wait to read the next chapter.
Meshe Nair
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Excellent chapter. Romance and lovemaking scene is nicely presented. I can visualize well. Can't wait to read the next chapter.
Meshe Nair
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from mshugh
Wow - has your writiing ever improved!
And you handled the whole situation very realistically.
Sorry jumpin in the middle
Just back from a looooong sojourn
Michael
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Wow - has your writiing ever improved!
And you handled the whole situation very realistically.
Sorry jumpin in the middle
Just back from a looooong sojourn
Michael
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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I have missed you so much and have often thought about you. I have wondered if my written was up to your eagle eye. Are you going to be around for awhile? Or just dropping in and then leaving us again?
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I will be in for about two months, I think
Hope all is well with you and the family
Michael
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My family is doing well. They have been under some stress. I have breast cancer and the initial surgery didn't get it all, so I am having another surgery in about a week and a half. I have to undergo chemo, radiation then additional therapy. I am writing a post explaining it for next week.
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I wish you well - and I know that your spiritual strength will get you through this - and I know that your family will be there for you
I will think of you next week
Keep well my friend
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Thank you. Are you writing? I am sure as long as you have been gone, you have plenty of things to write about.
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always writing
I had to stop the last one because it was getting too close to what was happening in Afghanistan and people might question what my source was
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HUMMMMMM, that is probably true. My oldest son on is in Afghanistan now, but unable to tell us exactly where he is.
Comment from hyway94
You just go ahead and post the rest of it. I can't wait for it. This story is quit good and the thought you have put into it is really good. I hope everything goes alright for you. God bless you. Are wishes are with you always.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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You just go ahead and post the rest of it. I can't wait for it. This story is quit good and the thought you have put into it is really good. I hope everything goes alright for you. God bless you. Are wishes are with you always.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and well wishes. I hope to get the next part posted this weekend. I am posting a concer essay. I hope to do both.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Wonderful chapter and I am eagerly waiting for more. Your dialogue is excellent and your descriptive ability made me visualize the pictures. Fantastic work.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Wonderful chapter and I am eagerly waiting for more. Your dialogue is excellent and your descriptive ability made me visualize the pictures. Fantastic work.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
They done it...Yes lol. Very well written and very tastefully described. I especially liked this line it is so realistic.
[My stomach has stretch marks. I bet you've never made love to someone who's had a baby before." ] - I remember saying those exact words to someone once.
excellent stuff well done
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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They done it...Yes lol. Very well written and very tastefully described. I especially liked this line it is so realistic.
[My stomach has stretch marks. I bet you've never made love to someone who's had a baby before." ] - I remember saying those exact words to someone once.
excellent stuff well done
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. Another reviewer took issue with that line, said it wasn't realistic.
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Trust me it is. I was in a similar situation, only i had three kids instead of one. The guy was very good looking and popular with the girls. All I could think about was OMG i've got stretch marks and he's got a body to die for lol
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I have a feeling it happens often.
Comment from Connie P
The post didn't seem long. I've been waiting patiently for them to get to this point. Sara is very damaged and she's lucky to have Joe. She seems to look for reasons for their relationship to fail. I suppose that's what insecurity does.
Connie
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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The post didn't seem long. I've been waiting patiently for them to get to this point. Sara is very damaged and she's lucky to have Joe. She seems to look for reasons for their relationship to fail. I suppose that's what insecurity does.
Connie
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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I am sure that's what insecurity does to one. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from lola29
You wrote a very tenderly sweet intimate scene, but Now I'm worried about Sara because they've only known each other a few days. I'm hoping Joe is not a big-time player.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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You wrote a very tenderly sweet intimate scene, but Now I'm worried about Sara because they've only known each other a few days. I'm hoping Joe is not a big-time player.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Bad things are just around the corner. I have to get them out of bed, then there will be a hint of the disaster before them.
Comment from bookishfabler
Okay, my friend. Maybe you should block readers who don't normally get into the romance stuff, like myself. I like drama, I like turmoil, and then the hugs and kisses. What I'm saying, well, are you building to something happening to Sara and he walks the endso f the earth to save her. Or is there going to be something that happens to him and she freaks. Maybe I'm in the early baby stages as the characters build and we love them and we now don't want to have anything happen. (I guess I'm wicked) Please don't take this as negative, I'm not a romance writer or reader. the fact that I love your writing should say alot. It's just a suggestion, and yo may already have some major plan. I do love them.
He shook his head. "You're right. You're the first woman I've made love with who has a child, but I already knew about your child. I've met her. I'm forty-one years old, not exactly a teenager. Should I be worried about my body?" Not waiting for an answer, he cupped her breasts.
(hold the phone, are you saying he never had sex with someonme who had a kid before at his age? Was he married for a long time and not experienced t much of the world of women? Just curious)
and rubbed himself against her(,) returning the kiss.
With a loud moan, Joe rolled her over and moved inside her. They released moans of ecstasy.
Here, at this point, I think you may want to take a break, And then move intot a later scene.Other wise it seems this magic moment was a whanm bam. It just seemed to go to the top and then, well thanks and rolled over. You know what I mean?
hugs
Book
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Okay, my friend. Maybe you should block readers who don't normally get into the romance stuff, like myself. I like drama, I like turmoil, and then the hugs and kisses. What I'm saying, well, are you building to something happening to Sara and he walks the endso f the earth to save her. Or is there going to be something that happens to him and she freaks. Maybe I'm in the early baby stages as the characters build and we love them and we now don't want to have anything happen. (I guess I'm wicked) Please don't take this as negative, I'm not a romance writer or reader. the fact that I love your writing should say alot. It's just a suggestion, and yo may already have some major plan. I do love them.
He shook his head. "You're right. You're the first woman I've made love with who has a child, but I already knew about your child. I've met her. I'm forty-one years old, not exactly a teenager. Should I be worried about my body?" Not waiting for an answer, he cupped her breasts.
(hold the phone, are you saying he never had sex with someonme who had a kid before at his age? Was he married for a long time and not experienced t much of the world of women? Just curious)
and rubbed himself against her(,) returning the kiss.
With a loud moan, Joe rolled her over and moved inside her. They released moans of ecstasy.
Here, at this point, I think you may want to take a break, And then move intot a later scene.Other wise it seems this magic moment was a whanm bam. It just seemed to go to the top and then, well thanks and rolled over. You know what I mean?
hugs
Book
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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There is more to come. Something bad is just around the corner. At the end of my next post will give you a hint of who and if you have been following closer what is going to happen. Thank you for your kind reveiw. Hey, I may need Sharpe to solve this one.
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I have three chapters working, and I'm trying to tie stuff together, to bring it to the big bang, so to say. I have one here in preview mode, but no time. Off to work I go.
see ya later. babe.
hugs Heidi
Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
It's hard to describe sex without using purple prose, and you've described this scene well. I was waiting for this scene, and I enjoyed reading it. I couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Barbara,
It's hard to describe sex without using purple prose, and you've described this scene well. I was waiting for this scene, and I enjoyed reading it. I couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
Comment Written 05-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and support.