Another Pretty Face
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Comment from Glynnis W
I can't imagine trying to write a novel, especially something as involved and convuoluted as the storyline is in this novel. Upi've written a thrillp-a-minute narrative in this chapter. Great suspense and ongoing character development.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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I can't imagine trying to write a novel, especially something as involved and convuoluted as the storyline is in this novel. Upi've written a thrillp-a-minute narrative in this chapter. Great suspense and ongoing character development.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from marcii
You describe things very well in this chapter and it is a joy to read.
As for your comments on your story, I have read all your story so far and I think if this was just a love story I wouldn't be enjoying it as much as I have.
You can tell that love is part of it but if you didn't say it was a love story I would have thought the main story was the kidnapping.
My personal thoughts.
Marcii
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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You describe things very well in this chapter and it is a joy to read.
As for your comments on your story, I have read all your story so far and I think if this was just a love story I wouldn't be enjoying it as much as I have.
You can tell that love is part of it but if you didn't say it was a love story I would have thought the main story was the kidnapping.
My personal thoughts.
Marcii
Comment Written 06-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your review and thoughts.
Comment from R. K. Alan
If there were nits I didn't see them... to busy reading... totally absorbed with the read. Great job on the tension and action.
suggestion... Matt, a martial arts expert, kicked the gun away. Hand to hand combat ensued. Combining these and taking out the reference to Matt being a martial arts expert (that should be understood by this point) It may read better as...
Matt kicked the gun away. They briefly wrestled. Matt's quickness and training overpowered the man.
ray aka krylon
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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If there were nits I didn't see them... to busy reading... totally absorbed with the read. Great job on the tension and action.
suggestion... Matt, a martial arts expert, kicked the gun away. Hand to hand combat ensued. Combining these and taking out the reference to Matt being a martial arts expert (that should be understood by this point) It may read better as...
Matt kicked the gun away. They briefly wrestled. Matt's quickness and training overpowered the man.
ray aka krylon
Comment Written 06-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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I iwll double check that area. Thank you for the review.
Comment from marcellawachtel
This chapter is incredibly thrill-packed; there is so much happening! As usual, well-told and well researched, and great in building up suspense.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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This chapter is incredibly thrill-packed; there is so much happening! As usual, well-told and well researched, and great in building up suspense.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Well done with this chapter Barbara. I am picking up the story as I go along but each chapter I read I enjoy very much.
There certainly are some great people on Fan Story. God bless,
Giddy
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Well done with this chapter Barbara. I am picking up the story as I go along but each chapter I read I enjoy very much.
There certainly are some great people on Fan Story. God bless,
Giddy
Comment Written 05-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Thank you for our kind review.
Comment from jknc
Wow..the action is really picking up now. I found myself holding my breath about halfway through. I can't wait to see how this all turns out. I am afraid it might not be good for all the girls.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Wow..the action is really picking up now. I found myself holding my breath about halfway through. I can't wait to see how this all turns out. I am afraid it might not be good for all the girls.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Barbara. This is an interesting continuation of the drama of Cassie's kidnapping. The tension is escalating. I feel like watching a film. Take care ...
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Hi, Barbara. This is an interesting continuation of the drama of Cassie's kidnapping. The tension is escalating. I feel like watching a film. Take care ...
Comment Written 05-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from fictionwriter
Another great chapter full of tension and action. I think you handled this very well. I enjoyed reading this section. Great job.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Another great chapter full of tension and action. I think you handled this very well. I enjoyed reading this section. Great job.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from nora arjuna
Hi barb, looks like I haven't missed a lot since Cassie is still held. Some great actions here. I'll try to check earlier chapters. I wish you all the best in your therapy. Take care and don't exert yourself.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2010
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Hi barb, looks like I haven't missed a lot since Cassie is still held. Some great actions here. I'll try to check earlier chapters. I wish you all the best in your therapy. Take care and don't exert yourself.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from L.lora
Barbara you've given us
another wonderful addition.
Your discriptions are always
spot on an so very fulfilling.
Your dialogues always complete
the picture and hold the reader's
attention. The excitement and
tension has escalated and you
gave us a "cliff hanger" this
time--so I'm looking forward to
your next post with more anticipation.
no nits or spags. Lora
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2010
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Barbara you've given us
another wonderful addition.
Your discriptions are always
spot on an so very fulfilling.
Your dialogues always complete
the picture and hold the reader's
attention. The excitement and
tension has escalated and you
gave us a "cliff hanger" this
time--so I'm looking forward to
your next post with more anticipation.
no nits or spags. Lora
Comment Written 05-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2010
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Thank you foe your support and the review.