Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Chapter 13; part one"Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from marcellawachtel
Last things first: The flow is fine. Nothing jarring and all logical. I think you have a special gift for dialog- most of this piece is conversation and it is really good.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2010
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Last things first: The flow is fine. Nothing jarring and all logical. I think you have a special gift for dialog- most of this piece is conversation and it is really good.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2010
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Thank you for yoru kind review.
Comment from The Stranger
nice even flow, good interraction with both narrative and main storyline text, well presented and reading made easy by short but concise paragraphs
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nice even flow, good interraction with both narrative and main storyline text, well presented and reading made easy by short but concise paragraphs
Comment Written 27-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from gramalot8
Barbara, Joe does seem to jump, move and speak without thinking at times.. Oh, yeah, he's a man. LOL. Hope it all gets straightened out. Good chapter and keep writing.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2010
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Barbara, Joe does seem to jump, move and speak without thinking at times.. Oh, yeah, he's a man. LOL. Hope it all gets straightened out. Good chapter and keep writing.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from harleyangelbrat
This is a very interesting story. I haven't read all your chapters, but this one certainly kept my interest. I really enjoyed reading this very much. It is an excellent read. God bless you!
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2010
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This is a very interesting story. I haven't read all your chapters, but this one certainly kept my interest. I really enjoyed reading this very much. It is an excellent read. God bless you!
Comment Written 27-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
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You're so very welcome. I hope you have a wonderfully blessed New Year! Marilyn
Comment from bookishfabler
Well, girlfriend, another great chapter. I only had one messge tonight and I was glad it was yours. I only found one single nit.
She set (the) laundry down.
Great job. Have a happy and healthy New Year
hugs book
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2010
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Well, girlfriend, another great chapter. I only had one messge tonight and I was glad it was yours. I only found one single nit.
She set (the) laundry down.
Great job. Have a happy and healthy New Year
hugs book
Comment Written 27-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and finding that error. I will get right on it.
Comment from dportwood
barbara,
Well! The romance seems to have hit a patch of rocks. As usual, I find no fault with your writing and find it riveting and enjoyable. Well done.
Duane
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2010
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barbara,
Well! The romance seems to have hit a patch of rocks. As usual, I find no fault with your writing and find it riveting and enjoyable. Well done.
Duane
Comment Written 27-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and support. All romances hit a few bumps in the road.
Comment from teacherdub
Barbara, this is well written for sure. It held my attention even though I haven't read the previous chapters. If a section can hold the interest of the reader separate from the storyline leading up to it, I feel that gives it merit. I continue to enjoy reading your material anytime possible. Good level of intensity. td
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2010
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Barbara, this is well written for sure. It held my attention even though I haven't read the previous chapters. If a section can hold the interest of the reader separate from the storyline leading up to it, I feel that gives it merit. I continue to enjoy reading your material anytime possible. Good level of intensity. td
Comment Written 27-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Nanashirley
I think Sarah needs a spanking. I am involved in the story so I want to shake her and tell her Joe is too good for a whimp like her. Is that the reaction you expected. Good job.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2010
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I think Sarah needs a spanking. I am involved in the story so I want to shake her and tell her Joe is too good for a whimp like her. Is that the reaction you expected. Good job.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2010
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I agree Sara is acting up. We will have to see if she gets her act together or not. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
You did a good job with this post. Cassie is safe, but there's still a lot to work through.
I enjoyed this read and have one suggestion:
"No. Mom won't let me [bat, do that] outside the ball field." I stumbled a bit over this line - it could be interpreted as Sara locking Cassie inside the ball field.
Dave
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2010
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Barbara,
You did a good job with this post. Cassie is safe, but there's still a lot to work through.
I enjoyed this read and have one suggestion:
"No. Mom won't let me [bat, do that] outside the ball field." I stumbled a bit over this line - it could be interpreted as Sara locking Cassie inside the ball field.
Dave
Comment Written 27-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2010
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I will take care of that. Thank you for catching it for me. I appreciate your support.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
Great job. It all looks good. You have Sara being totally consistent with her questions. Is this going to Harlequin by chance. They seem to have the couple separate then come back together.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2010
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Great job. It all looks good. You have Sara being totally consistent with her questions. Is this going to Harlequin by chance. They seem to have the couple separate then come back together.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2010
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I don't usually write Harlequin type romances. Mine, hopefully has more story to them, than the Harequine. But it is a romance and all romance novels have a certain theme, and the split is one of them. Thank you for your kind review.