Another Pretty Face
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "Sara and Dani talk."Can love survive small town gossip?
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Comment from The Stranger
A fine, balanced storyline, good use of descriptive text and well presented in short but concise paragraphs, the interactions blend perfectly making it nice and easy to read
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A fine, balanced storyline, good use of descriptive text and well presented in short but concise paragraphs, the interactions blend perfectly making it nice and easy to read
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
I feel the sentence below needs to be edited; otherwise the chapter flows well.
You comment on his action when he discovered who the man was that raped you like it was his standard behavior .
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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I feel the sentence below needs to be edited; otherwise the chapter flows well.
You comment on his action when he discovered who the man was that raped you like it was his standard behavior .
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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I will recheck that line. Thank you for your eagle eye.
Comment from Simply Jane
Your ability to let a conversation flow is incredible. I often have a hard time following when a story has too much conversation, but I found myself not even stopping once to double check who was saying what.
Well done, and very realistic.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Your ability to let a conversation flow is incredible. I often have a hard time following when a story has too much conversation, but I found myself not even stopping once to double check who was saying what.
Well done, and very realistic.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Nanashirley
This is a good chapter. I think that Sarah has been hurt but she is an adult. I think you have done a good job with Joe's friends. I saw no need for editing.
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This is a good chapter. I think that Sarah has been hurt but she is an adult. I think you have done a good job with Joe's friends. I saw no need for editing.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from timberstarr
Great dialogue. All of the action was very natural, and the chapter left me curious about the path Sara will choose. I haven't read the previous chapters, but I am now curious enough to read backwards as well. Nicely done!
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Great dialogue. All of the action was very natural, and the chapter left me curious about the path Sara will choose. I haven't read the previous chapters, but I am now curious enough to read backwards as well. Nicely done!
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Great reading. I am glad that Sara has people that talk straight to her. I am looking forward to the next chapter. Being the romantic I want things to work out between Matt and Sara. Good job my friend.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Great reading. I am glad that Sara has people that talk straight to her. I am looking forward to the next chapter. Being the romantic I want things to work out between Matt and Sara. Good job my friend.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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I am a romantic too, so I hope things work out between Joe and Sara. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Michelle S
What a wonderful chapter. You portrayed the confusion and fear that Sara is feeling well. It is hard to open your heart and soul to another person, but when its the right person it can be pure magic. Well done!
Michelle
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What a wonderful chapter. You portrayed the confusion and fear that Sara is feeling well. It is hard to open your heart and soul to another person, but when its the right person it can be pure magic. Well done!
Michelle
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Fireshadow
Barbara, terrific segment to this story. Very well penned narrative with very strong and credible dialogue. Especially loved the heart-to-heart talk and wise advise Dani offered Sara. Excellent work, my friend.
Ama
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Barbara, terrific segment to this story. Very well penned narrative with very strong and credible dialogue. Especially loved the heart-to-heart talk and wise advise Dani offered Sara. Excellent work, my friend.
Ama
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
Sometimes it is so hard to see what's staring you right in the face.
"I was seated on the plane[] when I realized I had one more thing to do."
"He hasn't had much sleep for what[--]seven or eight nights?
Roberta
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Sometimes it is so hard to see what's staring you right in the face.
"I was seated on the plane[] when I realized I had one more thing to do."
"He hasn't had much sleep for what[--]seven or eight nights?
Roberta
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your eagle eye. I appreciate your review.
Comment from Rama Rao
An excellent chapter, as usual, which made absorbing reading. However, I couldn't make out why Sara is doubting Joe's love for her. Secondly, Joe has come across as an ideal man- a paragon of virtue. I wish you had made his character well rounded with some deficiency, albeit minor to make him look more real.
the man was that raped you - you can delete the 'was' unpopular with editors.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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An excellent chapter, as usual, which made absorbing reading. However, I couldn't make out why Sara is doubting Joe's love for her. Secondly, Joe has come across as an ideal man- a paragon of virtue. I wish you had made his character well rounded with some deficiency, albeit minor to make him look more real.
the man was that raped you - you can delete the 'was' unpopular with editors.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2011
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2011
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Thank you for your eagle eye. I appreciate your comments.