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Comment from Herb
I liked the write and it's depth and intelligence.
I think these contests are good exercises and great to get the juices flowing. But I find this one would be restricting, using long words for long words sake, seems to stifle more than express. So this 'dictionary' seems a little contradictory. Still brilliant write (within the rules)
I understand sonnets have to have the ten syllables (pentameter) but must they also be Iambic? I think the rhythm here was not strictly iambic all the way through.
I will look through it again if you wish to have the strict rhythm.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2011
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I liked the write and it's depth and intelligence.
I think these contests are good exercises and great to get the juices flowing. But I find this one would be restricting, using long words for long words sake, seems to stifle more than express. So this 'dictionary' seems a little contradictory. Still brilliant write (within the rules)
I understand sonnets have to have the ten syllables (pentameter) but must they also be Iambic? I think the rhythm here was not strictly iambic all the way through.
I will look through it again if you wish to have the strict rhythm.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2011
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Hi Herb. Awesome review, mate; really glad you enjoyed it. I hear what you're saying about the restrictions on this one, and I was worried at first. In the end, though, I could have gone for a far shorter poem to make things easier. In tackling this, I only found myself with two or three lines that didn't naturally have a three syllable word, and needed fiddling. It helps that I have a minor obsession with long words to start with!
It reads iambic enough for me - I see you're a fellow Brit so I can't claim the transatlantic pronunciation barrier, but I can use the colloquialism defence, lol.
Thanks again; I really appreciate it.
Mike
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Mike,
A crown of sonnets is no easy task and I must applaud you for this one. It demonstrates a good command of the English language that not everyone owns.I did appreciate your explanation of some words as a couple of them I would have had to look up. Your iambic pentameter is right as is your rhyme scheme. Well done and good luck in the contest....chey
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2011
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Hi Mike,
A crown of sonnets is no easy task and I must applaud you for this one. It demonstrates a good command of the English language that not everyone owns.I did appreciate your explanation of some words as a couple of them I would have had to look up. Your iambic pentameter is right as is your rhyme scheme. Well done and good luck in the contest....chey
Comment Written 23-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2011
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Thank you, chey :-). I did wonder if I was a glutton for punishment, trying to write an epic dictionary poem, but in the end all but a few lines naturally came out with long words in them anyway! So I got to play with words and write a poem at the same time - bliss :-). I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
Mike
Comment from Jean Lutz
Very skillful application of words. I do thank you for the Author Notes which saved me time from looking up. Knowledge can be gained from books, but wisdom comes from another source. Best to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2011
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Very skillful application of words. I do thank you for the Author Notes which saved me time from looking up. Knowledge can be gained from books, but wisdom comes from another source. Best to you in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2011
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Thank you, Jean. I hope I wasn't patronising with the word definitions. I'm so glad you enjoyed it :-)
Mike
Comment from Maxine Kendall
Phew! There is a lot of work in this. You must have been burning the midnight oil!
This is a mega poem full to the brim with wonderful words and phrases, many of which I had to look up in the old dictionary.
There are many quote worthy lines, though it would take too long to write them here.
The ending couplet really is superb.
Well done and good luck.
Maxine x
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2011
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Phew! There is a lot of work in this. You must have been burning the midnight oil!
This is a mega poem full to the brim with wonderful words and phrases, many of which I had to look up in the old dictionary.
There are many quote worthy lines, though it would take too long to write them here.
The ending couplet really is superb.
Well done and good luck.
Maxine x
Comment Written 23-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2011
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This composition represents a loo break and an hour's lunch yesterday with my notebook, a mad fit of typing this morning, then another lunch break editing. All good fun!
I'm so happy you enjoyed it, and thank you for looking up the words!
Mike
Comment from amahra
I seldom reward six stars, because I'm afraid I'll use them up and not have any left for such a work as this. Wow. I don't know what to say. I'm all for free verse, but once in a while I'd love to read a more complex work such as this. The complex one I've tackled so far, are Sonnets, Acrostics, and Sestina. Bravo my friend. This work is poetry in all its glory. Many times "Bravo".
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2011
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I seldom reward six stars, because I'm afraid I'll use them up and not have any left for such a work as this. Wow. I don't know what to say. I'm all for free verse, but once in a while I'd love to read a more complex work such as this. The complex one I've tackled so far, are Sonnets, Acrostics, and Sestina. Bravo my friend. This work is poetry in all its glory. Many times "Bravo".
Comment Written 23-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2011
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Thank you, Amahra! You've really made my day :-). I love writing free verse too, but I find strict forms help breed creativity, and there is a deep sense of accomplishment to gettingeverything just right whilst still serving up what you want to. I'm thrilled by your response :-)
Mike
Comment from chita
Your arthor notes are superb-you have a good flow with your poem-you rhyme well-you are descriptive and write about inspiration-You write about many words that connect well with your poem - one of my favorite lines in this poem is ( In colours multitudinous we sublime-we sear towards our destiny as one) this is so true--I could go on and on about your poem--superb job.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2011
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Your arthor notes are superb-you have a good flow with your poem-you rhyme well-you are descriptive and write about inspiration-You write about many words that connect well with your poem - one of my favorite lines in this poem is ( In colours multitudinous we sublime-we sear towards our destiny as one) this is so true--I could go on and on about your poem--superb job.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2011
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Thank you so much, Chita :-). What a wonderful reviee! I had a great time writing this and I'm thrilled you enjoyed it.
Mike
Comment from surupa basu
Beginning was so confusing. Didnot get through my head. But later ont he poem made some sense to me. Words used are very tough to understand and relate to
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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2011
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Beginning was so confusing. Didnot get through my head. But later ont he poem made some sense to me. Words used are very tough to understand and relate to
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Comment Written 23-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2011
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I feel a little sad that you perceive your lack of understanding as a fault in my poetry, but that is your right. I believe good poetry invites involvement and educates as well as entertaining. Thank you for taking the time to read through.
Mike
Comment from cheery blossom
I gave you five stars because you know all those big words (which I do not) and I do admire you for that. However, for my own taste, I prefer things simple (possibly because because of my lack of education). Anyway your poem is impressive and I really enjoyed what I understood of it. It is beautiful. Maybe, someday---
Meanwhile, know that I mean it when I say I envy you.
Very sincerely, Cheery.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2011
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I gave you five stars because you know all those big words (which I do not) and I do admire you for that. However, for my own taste, I prefer things simple (possibly because because of my lack of education). Anyway your poem is impressive and I really enjoyed what I understood of it. It is beautiful. Maybe, someday---
Meanwhile, know that I mean it when I say I envy you.
Very sincerely, Cheery.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2011
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Thank you, cheery, for not marking me down (as another has). I wish only to entertain, and exercise some words that bring me joy so others can enjoy them too. You pay me beautiful compliments, and I'm deeply grateful for them :-)
Mike
Comment from Writingfundimension
Wow, this was truly a leap through a dictionary for me and many of the words I must admit to never hearing, let alone, reading before. Doesn't prevent from enjoying your excellent rhymes and the sheer, dizzying power of your words. Like a good marathon runner, you paced yourself for the race and presented a complex and complete picture/conclusion. Best wishes...Bev
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2011
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Wow, this was truly a leap through a dictionary for me and many of the words I must admit to never hearing, let alone, reading before. Doesn't prevent from enjoying your excellent rhymes and the sheer, dizzying power of your words. Like a good marathon runner, you paced yourself for the race and presented a complex and complete picture/conclusion. Best wishes...Bev
Comment Written 23-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2011
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Thank you, Bev :-). I am in love with obscure words, and have been criticised in the past. A dictionary poem, though; what a perfect excuse to exorcise the demons! I'm so glad you enjoyed my lengthy poem.
Mike
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I applaud your creativity. Why do people feel the need to criticze something just because it forces them to think?! I was thoroughly in awe of your efforts my friend.
Comment from Writeaway...
An in thralling piece Fleedleflump, your writing is well-written an cleverly structured. I was kept interested from beginning to end and cannot suggest anything for improvment, an excellent job, keep writing!! :)
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2011
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An in thralling piece Fleedleflump, your writing is well-written an cleverly structured. I was kept interested from beginning to end and cannot suggest anything for improvment, an excellent job, keep writing!! :)
Comment Written 23-Feb-2011
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2011
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Thank you, Jakeyboy - I really appreciate that :-)
Mike