Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Part two Chapter four"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Piggies Grandma
This is well thought out and very well written. I enjoyed reading your story, it flowed along well and the characters are very believable. I look forward to reading the next chapter.
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This is well thought out and very well written. I enjoyed reading your story, it flowed along well and the characters are very believable. I look forward to reading the next chapter.
Comment Written 16-May-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Wow, I can see your story is attracting a lot of attention. You have upped the tension considerably in this short episode, probably needed to shock the reader out of any complacency about things going so smoothly. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 16-May-2011
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Wow, I can see your story is attracting a lot of attention. You have upped the tension considerably in this short episode, probably needed to shock the reader out of any complacency about things going so smoothly. Keep writing.
Comment Written 16-May-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
A good write with a well written descriptive story line. I enjoyed reading your story. The story has imagery and has
A good descriptive script which held my attention. Mary
reply by the author on 16-May-2011
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A good write with a well written descriptive story line. I enjoyed reading your story. The story has imagery and has
A good descriptive script which held my attention. Mary
Comment Written 16-May-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from writerwish
This seems so realistic. I could just picture this happening to someone. My daughter was with a man like this for awhile. I was petrified for her. I am glad that is over. Story holds interest well. I just put my book chapters on line. I have to break them up and give them the next chapter number. I like the way you noted this on your page here. Great story.
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This seems so realistic. I could just picture this happening to someone. My daughter was with a man like this for awhile. I was petrified for her. I am glad that is over. Story holds interest well. I just put my book chapters on line. I have to break them up and give them the next chapter number. I like the way you noted this on your page here. Great story.
Comment Written 16-May-2011
reply by the author on 16-May-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from R. K. Alan
Barbara, your story has me cheering for Anna and her new knight in shining armor, and absolutely coming out of my chair with Bobby. You are pulling on heart strings and making your reader feel the pain and hopelessness of this woman and so many others trapped like her. Good job. BTW... do you mind if I slip Anna a large caliber handgun? Ray aka R. K. Alan
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Barbara, your story has me cheering for Anna and her new knight in shining armor, and absolutely coming out of my chair with Bobby. You are pulling on heart strings and making your reader feel the pain and hopelessness of this woman and so many others trapped like her. Good job. BTW... do you mind if I slip Anna a large caliber handgun? Ray aka R. K. Alan
Comment Written 16-May-2011
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Anna may need a gun with some of her future dealing with Bobby. Since I know nothing about guns, I will rely on your help. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
I can never understand judges and lawyers who will apply for and grant bail to men of this type. The lawyer and the judge should be arrested and charged as accessories to any further harm they do after being released.
Patrick
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Hi Barbara,
I can never understand judges and lawyers who will apply for and grant bail to men of this type. The lawyer and the judge should be arrested and charged as accessories to any further harm they do after being released.
Patrick
Comment Written 16-May-2011
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I agree, but they get out, often and the women continue to suffer at their hands. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
It is a good chapter even being short. You have shown a lot of tension and movement in the chapter with the abusive husband showing up at the hospital. Great job.
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It is a good chapter even being short. You have shown a lot of tension and movement in the chapter with the abusive husband showing up at the hospital. Great job.
Comment Written 15-May-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from jehanned
Women who are abused also end up bouncing from one bad relationship to another, never ending the chain without help. This issue is sadly still hidden by so many children and women. I hope that the woman in your story gets out. Cheers!
reply by the author on 16-May-2011
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Women who are abused also end up bouncing from one bad relationship to another, never ending the chain without help. This issue is sadly still hidden by so many children and women. I hope that the woman in your story gets out. Cheers!
Comment Written 15-May-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from sopranodebs
Great imagery, awesome intensity. True to life events. (Dated an asshole like him once, nearly married him due to him wearing my confidence down, luckily a friend rescued me). No typos or grammatical errors that I could find. Look forward to the rest.
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Great imagery, awesome intensity. True to life events. (Dated an asshole like him once, nearly married him due to him wearing my confidence down, luckily a friend rescued me). No typos or grammatical errors that I could find. Look forward to the rest.
Comment Written 15-May-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
Sounds like Bobby just doesn't learn. It's easy to see that he's building his own prison cell or digging his grave, but we'll wait to see how. He may have already stepped through a restraining order.
I enjoyed this short read and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
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Barbara,
Sounds like Bobby just doesn't learn. It's easy to see that he's building his own prison cell or digging his grave, but we'll wait to see how. He may have already stepped through a restraining order.
I enjoyed this short read and couldn't find anything to criticize.
Dave
Comment Written 15-May-2011
reply by the author on 16-May-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.