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Lonely Hearts Meet

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Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.

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Comment from Paradox Tremors
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Another good chapter my friend. I hope he can find her and make her aware there are good people waiting to help. Enjoyed it and look forward to the next chapter.

 Comment Written 29-May-2011


reply by the author on 30-May-2011
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
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The parting scene when Mr. Keller is on the phone and Troy suggests dinner next month was a little confusing. Are they actually friends?
Otherwise, this took the story further forward.

Congrats on making it through the school year; glad you'll have the summer to rest hopefully free from treatments that make you feel icky too. God bless - Fiesty

 Comment Written 29-May-2011


reply by the author on 30-May-2011
    They did know each other previous, but not friends. He welcomed Troy to the neighborhood when Troy's aunt left him the bookstore. There businesses are side by side. I hope this helps. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from RebelRose
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Well, the meeting with Mr. Keller proved fruitful as far as getting the info he needed. I hope Troy is able to locate her before Bobby does. Another great chapter.

Kudos to you for making to the end of the school year. Now, you can get some much needed rest without the obligation of the job hanging over your head although I guess, in a way, it was your saving grace.

 Comment Written 29-May-2011


reply by the author on 30-May-2011
    My work kept my mind busy so I wasn't worrying over the cancer. First graders have a way of doing that. I appreciate your kind review and support.
Comment from Piggies Grandma
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This chapter was cleverly written and very well thought out. I enjoyed reading it very much, and I look forward to reading the next chapter.

 Comment Written 29-May-2011


reply by the author on 30-May-2011
    Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from denhagan
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This was an interesting part of chapter four to read, about how Troy finds out where Anna is from, and lets his dad know.
I enjoyed reading this part and learning more about what is happening regarding Troy trying to find Anna so that he may help her.

 Comment Written 29-May-2011


reply by the author on 30-May-2011
    Thank you for your kind review.
reply by denhagan on 30-May-2011
    You are quite welcome! ~denhagan
Comment from mumsyone
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Glad Troy is probably going to try to find Anna.
Happy to hear that this school year is done and that all of our prayers are being answered.

 Comment Written 29-May-2011


reply by the author on 29-May-2011
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Dave M
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Barbara,

In this short chapter, Troy and his father find out where Anna is from. OW, she seems to have disappeared. Somehow, I don't think she went home.

I enjoyed this read and found no problems with the text, but Evil Eddie got you in the author notes:

"You are not the cause of your partner¢¿•¿½?•¿½¢¢¿•¿½•¿½¿•¿½?¢•¿½¿¢¿•¿½??s abusive behavior."

Dave

 Comment Written 29-May-2011


reply by the author on 29-May-2011
    I will take a look at those notes. Thank you for telling me. It doesn't show up on the edit version. Thank you for the kind review
Comment from axelbeariter
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Again, this is a well written chapter. I only have one question. Maybe I missed something earlier (I am old, forgetful and do a lot of reviewing), but if not, I'm curious why Mr. Keller would give out such personal information so willingly. If I'm right in my assumption, at least make Troy jump through more hoops to get it.

 Comment Written 29-May-2011


reply by the author on 29-May-2011
    Mr. Keller sort of knows Troy. The bookstore is next door to the ad agency. I will recheck it though. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Belinda
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Hi, it seems that Troy has a good way of drawing information about Anna, her home town, her maiden name. That;s indeed a lead for him to follow through, though perhaps not too useful. So you're in holidays already? Enjoy!

 Comment Written 29-May-2011


reply by the author on 29-May-2011
    Thank you for the kind review and continued support.
Comment from adewpearl
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Well Dad, Anna's from
Capitalize Dad since it's being used like his name in this context.
Troy is clever at getting information and certainly determined in his quest. Brooke

 Comment Written 29-May-2011


reply by the author on 29-May-2011
    I can't believe I made that stupid mistake. I hate when I make those mistakes. Thank you for catching it.
reply by adewpearl on 29-May-2011
    It's a wonderful chapter - don't be feeling all negative because of one letter in one word!! :-)
reply by the author on 29-May-2011
    What bother's me is I knew it needed to be capitalized. No matter how many times I read over something, I still don't catch things.