Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Part 2 Chapter 5"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
I biting my fingernails wondering where Anna ran off to with her son. I know she not with her creep of an abusive husband. I enjoyed learning about Troy's parents and his aunt showed up to do a sketch of Anna. The ice tea they were drinking sounds refreshing. It's so hot and humid her in my part of Oklahoma that my sweat is sweating. Once again you're narrative and descriptive writing are splendidly written. Your dialogue is great and natural. You doing an excellent job writing this story. You're stringing the reader along like any successful writer does in their books. I'm praying for you to kick cancers butt! I hope you have a blessed Sunday. By the way your art work you used is cool.
Love and smooches....Melissa!
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Barbara,
I biting my fingernails wondering where Anna ran off to with her son. I know she not with her creep of an abusive husband. I enjoyed learning about Troy's parents and his aunt showed up to do a sketch of Anna. The ice tea they were drinking sounds refreshing. It's so hot and humid her in my part of Oklahoma that my sweat is sweating. Once again you're narrative and descriptive writing are splendidly written. Your dialogue is great and natural. You doing an excellent job writing this story. You're stringing the reader along like any successful writer does in their books. I'm praying for you to kick cancers butt! I hope you have a blessed Sunday. By the way your art work you used is cool.
Love and smooches....Melissa!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review, Melissa. I always appreciate hearing from you.
Comment from Connie P
Okay, so where is she? No, don't tell me!! I thought sure she was in a shelter. I hope that horrible husband doesn't have her captured someplace, but now I'm afraid he may. I'm always trying to guess into the plot, but you're keeping me wondering on this one.
Connie
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Okay, so where is she? No, don't tell me!! I thought sure she was in a shelter. I hope that horrible husband doesn't have her captured someplace, but now I'm afraid he may. I'm always trying to guess into the plot, but you're keeping me wondering on this one.
Connie
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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I had hoped to keep my readers wondering about Anna. I am glad it's working. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Darla9
This is a first chapter that I read, but I found it very engaging. You painted a lovely picture of a family get together. Enjoyable read, well done.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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This is a first chapter that I read, but I found it very engaging. You painted a lovely picture of a family get together. Enjoyable read, well done.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is another great chapter for your book, barbara, i enjoyed reading this, with what they are doing to find anna, but i have to admit i'm ready to hear something from anna again, even if they don't find her yet.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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this is another great chapter for your book, barbara, i enjoyed reading this, with what they are doing to find anna, but i have to admit i'm ready to hear something from anna again, even if they don't find her yet.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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I wanted my readers to worry about Anna. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from stanishmichelle
Nice little family get-together. I like the warm setting and dialogue which I found convincing. Betty has Paul on a strict one cookie allowed diet. I hope Margaret's sketch will get results. It was an interesting story as more search is underway to find Anna. I like the suspense each time I read.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Nice little family get-together. I like the warm setting and dialogue which I found convincing. Betty has Paul on a strict one cookie allowed diet. I hope Margaret's sketch will get results. It was an interesting story as more search is underway to find Anna. I like the suspense each time I read.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from anabelle
Lovely chapter, Barbara. I haven't been around, and this is my first chapter. However, you've pulled me in and made me want to read more. Isn't that what a good novelist does?
How are you doing in the health department? I was so thrilled to see you in 2nd spot and writing like crazy.
xo Anabelle
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Lovely chapter, Barbara. I haven't been around, and this is my first chapter. However, you've pulled me in and made me want to read more. Isn't that what a good novelist does?
How are you doing in the health department? I was so thrilled to see you in 2nd spot and writing like crazy.
xo Anabelle
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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I have survived all the treatments. I am in the building my strength back up now. Thank you for asking. I apprecite your kind review.
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Wow! Good for you. You're an inspiration to the rest of us. I'm so happy all is well.
A.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Margaret, it seems Troy was raised in a happy family in which his mom always happens to have extra home made cookies and steak ... This sketch of family life is delightful.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Hi, Margaret, it seems Troy was raised in a happy family in which his mom always happens to have extra home made cookies and steak ... This sketch of family life is delightful.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from kiwisteveh
Hey, I'll still give this a five, but I think it's a bit of a nothing chapter. I know those are necessary from time to time, but this one doesn't seem to achieve any particular purpose. We already know (I think) the relationship between Troy and his parents explored again here, and the plot development (ongoing search and use of sketch artist) could have been covered in a few well-chosen sentences.
You have introduced a new character (Margaret) who is probably going to be extraneous to the plot....
Sorry - call it as I see it.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Hey, I'll still give this a five, but I think it's a bit of a nothing chapter. I know those are necessary from time to time, but this one doesn't seem to achieve any particular purpose. We already know (I think) the relationship between Troy and his parents explored again here, and the plot development (ongoing search and use of sketch artist) could have been covered in a few well-chosen sentences.
You have introduced a new character (Margaret) who is probably going to be extraneous to the plot....
Sorry - call it as I see it.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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That is your privilage. I disagree, I think short post will be very valuable later. Thank you for the review.
Comment from Patrick Jordan
Barbara, we have talked before about your use of the written page to inform us - and my God this is an issue we need to be informed about! I am now a retired pastor and I have seen it all. What really pisses me off is that so many people ignore the warning signs. Keep writing. You have an excellent style and a heart to deliver.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Barbara, we have talked before about your use of the written page to inform us - and my God this is an issue we need to be informed about! I am now a retired pastor and I have seen it all. What really pisses me off is that so many people ignore the warning signs. Keep writing. You have an excellent style and a heart to deliver.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words. My 18 year old son came to me today, one of his female friends is in a horrid relationship and won't get out. He asked how to help her. Unfortunately, there's nothing we can do, but help pick up the pieces and PRAY!
Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
A well written chapter, Barbara. Your characters are interacting great. Very nice narration. I'd look over the author's notes if I were you--evil eddie got in there, I think.
Isaiah
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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A well written chapter, Barbara. Your characters are interacting great. Very nice narration. I'd look over the author's notes if I were you--evil eddie got in there, I think.
Isaiah
Comment Written 11-Jun-2011
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2011
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I will recheck my author's notes, nobody has said anything. Thank you for the kind review.
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Yes, it's just computer garble where your bullets would be. Might just be my computer.
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I went in and fixed it.