Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "Part one, Chapter 13"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from fairy77
Marvellous!Your story is developing a nice love story.Picnics in the park.Your description was very good.I figure if I read more stories it may help my scripts.Also I enjoyed this one.Good romantic piece.beth fairy77.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2011
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Marvellous!Your story is developing a nice love story.Picnics in the park.Your description was very good.I figure if I read more stories it may help my scripts.Also I enjoyed this one.Good romantic piece.beth fairy77.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Connie P
Oh, I have such hope that he's about to take a step toward asking her to marry him. I'd say considering Anna's situation, she's landed in a pretty good place with Troy and his family.
Connie
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2011
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Oh, I have such hope that he's about to take a step toward asking her to marry him. I'd say considering Anna's situation, she's landed in a pretty good place with Troy and his family.
Connie
Comment Written 13-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
Chapter forty, but thirteen for you is cleverly written. I'm happy Troy showed up to take Anna to lunch by brown bagging it. Your dialogue is excellent in your chapter. Ooh, I'm on the edge of my seat. What does Troy have to shoe Anna. She freaked while in the park when she heard the rattling of a muffler. Poor Anna is still tormented by her abusive ex who's still in jail. You did a teriffc job writing your latest chapter. I look forward to reading more. I'd recommend your chapter to other reviewers, my friend. Please have a superb Sunday.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2011
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Barbara,
Chapter forty, but thirteen for you is cleverly written. I'm happy Troy showed up to take Anna to lunch by brown bagging it. Your dialogue is excellent in your chapter. Ooh, I'm on the edge of my seat. What does Troy have to shoe Anna. She freaked while in the park when she heard the rattling of a muffler. Poor Anna is still tormented by her abusive ex who's still in jail. You did a teriffc job writing your latest chapter. I look forward to reading more. I'd recommend your chapter to other reviewers, my friend. Please have a superb Sunday.
Melissa.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review, the support, and the friendship.
Comment from jclark
I continue to enjoy your novel. Your characters are genuine and you continually carry your message about abusive relationships. I hope for a very happy ending for Anna.
Judy
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2011
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I continue to enjoy your novel. Your characters are genuine and you continually carry your message about abusive relationships. I hope for a very happy ending for Anna.
Judy
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mumsyone
Good chapter, Barbara, but you left us hanging, wondering what Troy is going to show Anna! Ha! Good job! Dialogue is good and sounds natural.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2011
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Good chapter, Barbara, but you left us hanging, wondering what Troy is going to show Anna! Ha! Good job! Dialogue is good and sounds natural.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from KinaSalad
Hey there Barbara, I enjoyed reading your chapter here. I have missed out on a few of your chapters, but will go back and read when I have time. Thanks so much for sharing
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2011
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Hey there Barbara, I enjoyed reading your chapter here. I have missed out on a few of your chapters, but will go back and read when I have time. Thanks so much for sharing
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Belinda
What's Troy up to? I am as anxious and curious as Anna. Sometimes men don't know what they do...:) Just hope it does not endanger Anna. Your author notes are informative (though scrambled by Evil Eddie...:))
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2011
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What's Troy up to? I am as anxious and curious as Anna. Sometimes men don't know what they do...:) Just hope it does not endanger Anna. Your author notes are informative (though scrambled by Evil Eddie...:))
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. I will unscramble EE doings.
Comment from rwilliam
"Why we here?"~OOPS... Why 'are' we here?
She swallowed loudly. "OK, I'll trust you this once. ~I don't care for the word 'loudly' here. Maybe: She swallowed 'hard'? Just a thought.
Good chapter. It moved along very well. Easy read. Great job!
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2011
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"Why we here?"~OOPS... Why 'are' we here?
She swallowed loudly. "OK, I'll trust you this once. ~I don't care for the word 'loudly' here. Maybe: She swallowed 'hard'? Just a thought.
Good chapter. It moved along very well. Easy read. Great job!
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. I know Why are we here is correct, but in dialogue I rarely hear the are.
Comment from Malerie
I've followed some chapters of your novel; I like the way you tell this story. I'm intrigued by Troy and Anna and you keep the readers guessing as to where their relationship is headed. One minute I'm sure Troy is for Anna, the next, I'm not so sure. Great story, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2011
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I've followed some chapters of your novel; I like the way you tell this story. I'm intrigued by Troy and Anna and you keep the readers guessing as to where their relationship is headed. One minute I'm sure Troy is for Anna, the next, I'm not so sure. Great story, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from purrfect tale
I'm never ready to stop reading when I get to the end of one of your chapters! I always want more. I understand her mistrust and believing she won't find happiness. Very realistic. One note: At the park(,) the couple found a picnic table
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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I'm never ready to stop reading when I get to the end of one of your chapters! I always want more. I understand her mistrust and believing she won't find happiness. Very realistic. One note: At the park(,) the couple found a picnic table
Comment Written 12-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.