Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "Part two Chapter 14"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Deejharrington
I'm so glad Michael wasn't hurt. Another sign of PTS, Anna fearing she would be have her child taken away,for a innocent mistake. The loud muffler (car) is suspicious. I'm sure all of it will come out soon.
deb
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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I'm so glad Michael wasn't hurt. Another sign of PTS, Anna fearing she would be have her child taken away,for a innocent mistake. The loud muffler (car) is suspicious. I'm sure all of it will come out soon.
deb
Comment Written 18-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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Yes, it is all going to come out shortly, well maybe shortly isn't the correct word. I appreciate your kind review.
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Long or short, I'll be reading!
deb
Comment from bhogg
Hi Barbara - loved your post. Great post written with your usual perfect pacing and excellent editing. I'm always glad to see your name pop up! Warm regards and Merry Christmas to you as well. Bill
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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Hi Barbara - loved your post. Great post written with your usual perfect pacing and excellent editing. I'm always glad to see your name pop up! Warm regards and Merry Christmas to you as well. Bill
Comment Written 18-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Writingfundimension
A great chapter with plenty of suspense and the usual self-blaming that poor Anna does to herself. I'm glad she has good people to mirror back to her that she's doing a good job despite how she feels, barbara. They're good people. Kind regards, Bev
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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A great chapter with plenty of suspense and the usual self-blaming that poor Anna does to herself. I'm glad she has good people to mirror back to her that she's doing a good job despite how she feels, barbara. They're good people. Kind regards, Bev
Comment Written 18-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
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You're welcome, barbara. Happy Holidays...Bev
Comment from adewpearl
who those pipes belong too - to
I'm horrible mother. - I'm a horrible
Anna sure is in need of a confidence boost - I'm so glad Troy is reassuring her that she did nothing horrible.
Accidents DO happen - someone is not to blame for every event in our world. :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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who those pipes belong too - to
I'm horrible mother. - I'm a horrible
Anna sure is in need of a confidence boost - I'm so glad Troy is reassuring her that she did nothing horrible.
Accidents DO happen - someone is not to blame for every event in our world. :-) Brooke
Comment Written 18-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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I will fix that to, I appreciate your eagle eye.
Comment from jadapenn
HI Barbie, nice to talk to you again. Gosh, I have been absent and busy off site. The story progressed well. I feel sorry for Anna. With all Bobby's nonsense she really suffers from low self esteem and it's going to take lots of gentleness from Troy to make her believe in herself. Well done. luv jada
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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HI Barbie, nice to talk to you again. Gosh, I have been absent and busy off site. The story progressed well. I feel sorry for Anna. With all Bobby's nonsense she really suffers from low self esteem and it's going to take lots of gentleness from Troy to make her believe in herself. Well done. luv jada
Comment Written 18-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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Thank you for your kind review. I just took a huge hit. It felt like a dummy, but after I checked out the review, the reviewer was in error, often. I hope you hang around for awhile.
Comment from purrfect tale
Glad to get this one. It was hard waiting all week to see what happened. I don't remember the previous chapter mentioning there were two dogs, but that might just be me. But it seemed all of a sudden when the kid went back home that he had 2 dogs instead of 1.
Notes:
Inside the apartment(,)
I'm (a) horrible mother.
If Troy (hadn't) dropped by,
my baby might be fighting for his life(,)
I've already figured it out(,)
After the officer() listened
The officer scanned () the crowd.
"I'm sorry() you were bit."
It was (an) accident.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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Glad to get this one. It was hard waiting all week to see what happened. I don't remember the previous chapter mentioning there were two dogs, but that might just be me. But it seemed all of a sudden when the kid went back home that he had 2 dogs instead of 1.
Notes:
Inside the apartment(,)
I'm (a) horrible mother.
If Troy (hadn't) dropped by,
my baby might be fighting for his life(,)
I've already figured it out(,)
After the officer() listened
The officer scanned () the crowd.
"I'm sorry() you were bit."
It was (an) accident.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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I mentioned in the previous chapter he was walking two large breed dogs. I will check those areas out. It seems I'd better review my punctuation book. I will let you know what corrections have been made.
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I have made the corrections.
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I changed the ranking to 5. Looking forward to next weeks. Ooops, that will be Christmas so I guess I'll have to wait longer. Merry Christmas.
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Thank you, I probably won't post until Monday. I am writing it as we speak.
Comment from axelbeariter
You bring out the tension of possibly tainted blood splashing on Anna and the child very well.----Bobby was right. I'm horrible mother. Because I put Michael at risk, Troy was bitten. If Troy wouldn't have dropped by, my baby might be fighting for his life or worse. I'm going to lose him and there's nothing Paul can do. Why didn't I put him in the front seat? That would have been the best way to handle it. Why am I so stupid?/For my own info; is this typical thinking of a formerly abused woman?----The officer scanned at the crowd./Awkward; drop at.----It's my fault Troy got bit./That may be too much self flagellation. The reader should get the point by now.----This is another great chapter; full of flawed character glimpses. Well done.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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You bring out the tension of possibly tainted blood splashing on Anna and the child very well.----Bobby was right. I'm horrible mother. Because I put Michael at risk, Troy was bitten. If Troy wouldn't have dropped by, my baby might be fighting for his life or worse. I'm going to lose him and there's nothing Paul can do. Why didn't I put him in the front seat? That would have been the best way to handle it. Why am I so stupid?/For my own info; is this typical thinking of a formerly abused woman?----The officer scanned at the crowd./Awkward; drop at.----It's my fault Troy got bit./That may be too much self flagellation. The reader should get the point by now.----This is another great chapter; full of flawed character glimpses. Well done.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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Yes, it is typical behavior for abused women. She needs to build her self-esteem. She believes she deserved all the bad that happened to her. I will kick the at out and delete the last line. Thank you for the honest review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Sweet Anita
I'm glad it was Troy instead of Michael that got bit too. Troy is a hero in Anna's eyes and saved Michael from being hurt, so it all worked out well. They seem to be getting closer to whoever it is that owns the car with the loud muffler. I love dogs too, Barbara.. cats too. But like you said accidents do happen. Hope you have a Merry Christmas and wonderful New Year!
Nita :-)
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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I'm glad it was Troy instead of Michael that got bit too. Troy is a hero in Anna's eyes and saved Michael from being hurt, so it all worked out well. They seem to be getting closer to whoever it is that owns the car with the loud muffler. I love dogs too, Barbara.. cats too. But like you said accidents do happen. Hope you have a Merry Christmas and wonderful New Year!
Nita :-)
Comment Written 18-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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Thank you for the kind reveiw and support.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
I will be glad when I can give you the six stars you deserve.
What a nerve wracking day for Anna and Troy
You kept up a perfect pace throughout this chapter.
I just wonder if the dog that bit Troy should be checked out?
Gert
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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Hello Barb
I will be glad when I can give you the six stars you deserve.
What a nerve wracking day for Anna and Troy
You kept up a perfect pace throughout this chapter.
I just wonder if the dog that bit Troy should be checked out?
Gert
Comment Written 18-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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I am sure it should be. The teenager should have had a tighter grip or control. I appreciate your kind review.
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You are welcome Barb
Gert
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara
What an exciting chapter, I'm glad Troy saved Anna's son. I feel for her when she thought the police were going to get her. I loved this chapter. Your story is riveting and splendidly penned. I like how you show and not tell. This is really a super chapter and as I read your chapter ten I could see the action take place in my head with fine imagery. I'd recommend your latest chapter to other reviewers as a 'must' read for a good time. I'd encourage you to keep moving forward with your entertaining story, my friend. I hope to catch your next chapter. Please have a blessed Christmas & a prosperous New Years.
Melissa.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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Barbara
What an exciting chapter, I'm glad Troy saved Anna's son. I feel for her when she thought the police were going to get her. I loved this chapter. Your story is riveting and splendidly penned. I like how you show and not tell. This is really a super chapter and as I read your chapter ten I could see the action take place in my head with fine imagery. I'd recommend your latest chapter to other reviewers as a 'must' read for a good time. I'd encourage you to keep moving forward with your entertaining story, my friend. I hope to catch your next chapter. Please have a blessed Christmas & a prosperous New Years.
Melissa.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2011
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and friendship. I cherish your friendship.