Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 67 "part three, Chapter 20"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Rdfrdmom2
barbara:
This is another great chapter. When I was dying from acute
pancreatitis two summers ago, God provided me with a view
of my then 18 month old granddaughter, Lexi, running up and
down the hallway across from my room while my brother, daughter, and aunt were talking together against the wall.
When I relayed that information to my daughter after what all the medical professionals involved have termed a miraculous recovery, she said everything I told her had happened except my granddaughter was never there. I believe God "placed" her in the scene to give me extra strength to fight for my life even after one of the doctors told me I was not going to make it.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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barbara:
This is another great chapter. When I was dying from acute
pancreatitis two summers ago, God provided me with a view
of my then 18 month old granddaughter, Lexi, running up and
down the hallway across from my room while my brother, daughter, and aunt were talking together against the wall.
When I relayed that information to my daughter after what all the medical professionals involved have termed a miraculous recovery, she said everything I told her had happened except my granddaughter was never there. I believe God "placed" her in the scene to give me extra strength to fight for my life even after one of the doctors told me I was not going to make it.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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Wow, what a story, I enjoyed your review.
Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
This is an excellent chapter about Anna's slow recovery. I enjoyed this read and found nothing to criticize. I suppose you've got the last chapters in the hopper, but I'd like to see the next one from Anna's point of view, her trying to wake up.
Dave
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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Barbara,
This is an excellent chapter about Anna's slow recovery. I enjoyed this read and found nothing to criticize. I suppose you've got the last chapters in the hopper, but I'd like to see the next one from Anna's point of view, her trying to wake up.
Dave
Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 21-May-2012
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Thank you for your review and support.
Comment from Janie King
I agree that there is nothing stronger than the love between a mother and her child..at least I have hope now she may live..good chapter. God bless.
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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I agree that there is nothing stronger than the love between a mother and her child..at least I have hope now she may live..good chapter. God bless.
Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and insight.
Comment from AprilShower
It is looking promising she will regain consciousness. Did you give up and go out to take the picture yourself? This was short, but I enjoyed reading it. She hasn't noticed the Indian blankets yet, though.
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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It is looking promising she will regain consciousness. Did you give up and go out to take the picture yourself? This was short, but I enjoyed reading it. She hasn't noticed the Indian blankets yet, though.
Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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No, I got it from google Earth. After I posted my husband downloaded the picture for me. I now have it. I might use it next week.
Comment from Writingfundimension
What a heart-warming ending to your chapter, barbara. I don't doubt the power of love to accomplish miracles, and am so glad you developed your chapter around that. Things are really looking up! Warm regards, Bev
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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What a heart-warming ending to your chapter, barbara. I don't doubt the power of love to accomplish miracles, and am so glad you developed your chapter around that. Things are really looking up! Warm regards, Bev
Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and insight.
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Hi, Barbara. You are most welcome, my friend.
Comment from elgone
It looks like Anna is going to make it. She's had a very bad time of it and her injuries are severe but this is very hopeful for everyone involved. Well written.
Paul turned toward the door - new line before this line.
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reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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It looks like Anna is going to make it. She's had a very bad time of it and her injuries are severe but this is very hopeful for everyone involved. Well written.
Paul turned toward the door - new line before this line.
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Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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I will make the correction. Thank you for the eagle eye.
Comment from clumsyninja
You have a nice voice to your writing. Your characters feel real and your dialog is good but I felt a little detatched from the scene. Maybe I just needed a little more. I know it is a piece of a bigger whole but I can only judge the length you post. I would have liked a little bit more of their thoughts and their inner feelings for such an emotional scene.
Hope so of this helps.
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reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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You have a nice voice to your writing. Your characters feel real and your dialog is good but I felt a little detatched from the scene. Maybe I just needed a little more. I know it is a piece of a bigger whole but I can only judge the length you post. I would have liked a little bit more of their thoughts and their inner feelings for such an emotional scene.
Hope so of this helps.
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Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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If you had read the rest you would have known more. That's why I said it can not stand alone. Thank you.
Comment from adewpearl
First of all, I'm laughing myself silly over your author's notes about waiting for your husband. LOL
What a wonderfully moving chapter, Barbara. First Troy with all the flowers and then baby Michael... :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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First of all, I'm laughing myself silly over your author's notes about waiting for your husband. LOL
What a wonderfully moving chapter, Barbara. First Troy with all the flowers and then baby Michael... :-) Brooke
Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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My husband is a very normal husband, what can I say???? After I posted he came in and asked if I wanted the picture. I told him he was too late. I did download it and a few others in case I need another picture. Thank you for the kind review.
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Yeah, I think 99.999% of women end up married to normal husbands, not the one in a million Troys of the world :-)
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I think you're right. I do wish though, but we've been married for what seems like a million and one years. Besides I have too much fun picking on him. LOL
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Hey, any guy you stay married to that long and who is still fun to pick on has plenty of good features - he's just not perfect, and who the hell is? LOL
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That is very true. About a year ago, I came to the realization that my boys didn't inherit their stinker qualities from their dad.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
This is another hopeful chapter. I guess it is unusual for a comatose patient to wake up as Anna has. She has a strong will, especially where Michael is concerned. I smiled when I read Troy filled Anna's room with Indian Blankets. How sweet was that? Well done....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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Hi Barbara,
This is another hopeful chapter. I guess it is unusual for a comatose patient to wake up as Anna has. She has a strong will, especially where Michael is concerned. I smiled when I read Troy filled Anna's room with Indian Blankets. How sweet was that? Well done....blessings, chey
Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I can't picture Troy doing anything else.
Comment from rtobaygo
SHORT BUT OH SO SWEET, NOT OVER DRAMATIC, BUT WHAT A REAL LIFE SITUATION WOULD ENTAIL. YOU DIALOGUE AND CHARACTER INTERACTION WERE EXCELLENT. THE SCENE WAS WELL HANDLED, WITH EVERYONE COOPERATING TO HELP ANNA. KUDOS!
TAKE CARE,
RAY
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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SHORT BUT OH SO SWEET, NOT OVER DRAMATIC, BUT WHAT A REAL LIFE SITUATION WOULD ENTAIL. YOU DIALOGUE AND CHARACTER INTERACTION WERE EXCELLENT. THE SCENE WAS WELL HANDLED, WITH EVERYONE COOPERATING TO HELP ANNA. KUDOS!
TAKE CARE,
RAY
Comment Written 20-May-2012
reply by the author on 20-May-2012
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THANK YOU FOR THE KIND REVIEW. I DIDN'T USED TO POST SO SHORT, I JUST HAVEN'T THE TIME RIGHT NOW TO POST LONGER.