Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 71 "part two, Chapter 21"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from dbmccarter
Now that Anna has remember what happened she can get on with her life. This part seemed very real. I can't wait for more. I like the way she got her memory back. It is very realistic.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
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Now that Anna has remember what happened she can get on with her life. This part seemed very real. I can't wait for more. I like the way she got her memory back. It is very realistic.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, you did a great job writing this chapter where anna remembers what happened to her and finds out that bobby is no longer a threat to her.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
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this is very well written, barbara, you did a great job writing this chapter where anna remembers what happened to her and finds out that bobby is no longer a threat to her.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Taurean Monkey
I like how Anna is slowly piecing things together, despite everybody's efforts to withhold the information from her (e.g. the picture 'hurting her' and knowing something bad happened in her apartment). She figured most of it out on her own and needed Troy to fill in very little, merely to validate what she'd recalled. This is well written, Barbara. Regards TM
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
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I like how Anna is slowly piecing things together, despite everybody's efforts to withhold the information from her (e.g. the picture 'hurting her' and knowing something bad happened in her apartment). She figured most of it out on her own and needed Troy to fill in very little, merely to validate what she'd recalled. This is well written, Barbara. Regards TM
Comment Written 18-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Janie King
I'll lay beside you and be your dream catcher." ...I love that line and the sentiment of it...I hope there's not any other monsters hidding to make an appearance..the grandmother is in prison...but then she could get out?? Hummmm...God bless.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
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I'll lay beside you and be your dream catcher." ...I love that line and the sentiment of it...I hope there's not any other monsters hidding to make an appearance..the grandmother is in prison...but then she could get out?? Hummmm...God bless.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from guinea
This is a great story. i like the story line. Anna is a great character. as are Troy and the others. i look forward to more.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
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This is a great story. i like the story line. Anna is a great character. as are Troy and the others. i look forward to more.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from sunnilicious
part two, Chapter 21 by barbara.wilkey
Nice dreamcatcher. I haven't seen that in years. Premonition through a painting that's eerie. Dramatic turns occurring Baby Momma drama. Bobby dead is not believable. This is good, but it should of shifted the chapter completely onto Baby Daddy drama. Dialogue is interesting. Nice work.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
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part two, Chapter 21 by barbara.wilkey
Nice dreamcatcher. I haven't seen that in years. Premonition through a painting that's eerie. Dramatic turns occurring Baby Momma drama. Bobby dead is not believable. This is good, but it should of shifted the chapter completely onto Baby Daddy drama. Dialogue is interesting. Nice work.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
This and your post before it are excellent. I also love you use of Troy being her 'dream catcher.' We all need people we are safe around.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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This and your post before it are excellent. I also love you use of Troy being her 'dream catcher.' We all need people we are safe around.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
Thank you for the kind review. I am struggling typing because the kitten are helping.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Enjoyed this, Barbara. Poor Anna. Obviously, it's going to take her some time to recover and come to terms with what's happened. I like the way you brought it all back.
Just a few things to consider:
She noticed the sun glare through - the sun's glare
"I need to and figure out what's real and what isn't?" - I personally think this sentence would read better without the 'and' and using a 'Yes' in response to Troy's question. "Yes. I need to figure out what's real and what isn't." But your call, my lady!
cheek bone. - one word. cheekbone.
Hugs, Av
I'll lay beside you and be your dream catcher. - LOVE that.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
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Enjoyed this, Barbara. Poor Anna. Obviously, it's going to take her some time to recover and come to terms with what's happened. I like the way you brought it all back.
Just a few things to consider:
She noticed the sun glare through - the sun's glare
"I need to and figure out what's real and what isn't?" - I personally think this sentence would read better without the 'and' and using a 'Yes' in response to Troy's question. "Yes. I need to figure out what's real and what isn't." But your call, my lady!
cheek bone. - one word. cheekbone.
Hugs, Av
I'll lay beside you and be your dream catcher. - LOVE that.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2012
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Sorry for the late reply. I wanted to wait until I had time to make the corrections. Thank you for your assistance.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hi Barb,
finally Anna recalls what happened that put her in to a comma. ( just wondering what the after effect will be like her knowing what Bobby did to her.
Like how you are keeping your story going.
Gert
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Hi Barb,
finally Anna recalls what happened that put her in to a comma. ( just wondering what the after effect will be like her knowing what Bobby did to her.
Like how you are keeping your story going.
Gert
Comment Written 17-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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I hope to wrap that up too. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
This is very sensitively written. I like the way you show Anna's thoughts as she tries to remember. Having so many supportive and loving people around her will surely be a big help in her recovery. Good dialogue. I like Troy's comments that he and his parents were waiting to see what she remembered on her own and that he would be her dream catcher. Definitely 6 star worthy! judi
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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This is very sensitively written. I like the way you show Anna's thoughts as she tries to remember. Having so many supportive and loving people around her will surely be a big help in her recovery. Good dialogue. I like Troy's comments that he and his parents were waiting to see what she remembered on her own and that he would be her dream catcher. Definitely 6 star worthy! judi
Comment Written 17-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and support.