Comment from evilynne

Excellent

The poem is quite beautiful, flows nicely from beginning to end. The background information about crows is certainly interesting, and the accompanying picture is beautiful. I am not sure, though, if it was a dream.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014

Thanks, evilynne, and I shall leave that particular interpretation up to your own discretion. I really appreciate the thoughtful review.

Comment from victor 66

Excellent

Again Dean, you have out done yourself. You put so much into a poem, that it takes a little time to digest it all. Author's notes are also fascinating reading. Your words flew like the crow or the raven on a gentle wind, giving the feeling of flight within. As always, your presentation is perfect. Your poem was an absolute joy to read. Best wishes.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014

Thanks for the poetic review in it's own right, Victor. I am very happy that you enjoyed it!

reply by victor 66 on 01-Apr-2014

You are welcome, Dean.

Comment from Twilightspire

Exceptional

Fantastic! The theme spoke volumes. A poor tormented girl wanting to end it all and the bird that tried to save her. The imagery was powerful and easily relatable. The whole poem I was on the edge of my seat, wondering what the poor girl was going to do. Then to find out she was actually a crow! Perfection!
The rhythm was spot-on and the picture was beautiful. You, sir, have quite the knack for telling a vivid, gorgeous tale in rhymed words.
Great job!
-T.J.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014

Thanks so much, T.J., I'm really happy that you liked this one, given that it was a little off the beaten path of my usual work. Much onliged, my talented friend!

Comment from nor84

Excellent

a place she knew, where skies so blue, bequeathed >>>comma after 'blue' separates subject (skies) from verb (bequeathed).

I'm not a poet, so maybe you have a good reason for the comma. I see another one in the next stanza:

there was no better place,>>separates subject (place) from verb (bid)

I don't think arms can be unfurled because Furl means:To roll up and secure (a flag or sail, for example) to something else.

Liked the poem, Dean, and like I said, not a poet.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014

No worries, nor84, I'm very glad you took the time to read it and give me your opinions on it. I appreciate each and and every person here who takes the time to try and offer constructive critique, and yours is no exception. Thanks again.

Comment from Spitfire

Exceptional

You had me going there. Had to admit I started laughing when the crow told the girl she was not meant for flying. Love the stanza describing the fall.
New wings were sprouted, all she doubted, died with her rebirth. --what a great universal line.
in human form your wings were shorn ~ your spirit, stripped of flying. -- this is so true.

Good lesson at the end. Packed with a lot of philosophy.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014

Thanks so much, Shari, I'm really glad that you liked this one. You certainly picked up on all the hidden, subliminal meanings very well. Thanks again for everything.

Comment from lindalcreel

Excellent

I keep one of those dream catchers above my dresser. You don't think I'm being superstitious do you? Another fine story. Thanks so much for sharing.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014

Nope, not superstitious at all, just ... cautious.

Thanks for the review, Linda.

Comment from omerta16

Excellent

wow, what a great poem. i love the fact that you got in depth with the notes, and i did not know that crows were not ominous signs or harbringers of death and sickness. The pic was a great choice as well. I love how the raven was testing them the whole time. Thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014

Thanks for reading, omerta16. I really appreciate the kind comments.

Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

Hi Dean,

I think this can be interrupted in a number of ways. My reaction is that the bird and girl may be intertwined in a multitude of emotions and longings. I read it twice and although I see a bit of a pragmatic ending (just a raven's dream), I'm still thinking there is more depth than meets the reader's eye.

Hugs,
Lou

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014

You could very well be right, Louise, but I'll leave that up for you to decide, lol.

Thanks for the fine review.

Comment from Tonulak

Excellent

This was a very effective story poem. I especially liked the abundance of internal rhymes sprinkled throught this poem. Great job on this one--Ted

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2014

Thanks for reading and reviewing it for me, Ted. Much appreciated.

Comment from faragon

Exceptional

You continue to amaze me with your wit and knowledge in the poetic field. This poem to me speaks volumes of a wrong that was done in her seemingly short life and a way that was shown to her to carry on and things will be better. I too have studied the Native American culture and couldn't agree more with you. Very nicely done!

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2014

Thanks for such a wonderful compliment, faragon. From a technical aspect, I'm about as poetically literate as a Neanderthal. But, I try to write what I feel, what comes easily without sounding forced. That's the only way I truly know how to write poetry, my friend.

Thanks so much again for such a wonderful review.