King Sawyer
a story poem in rhyming couplets115 total reviews
Comment from humpwhistle
Brooke, I'm the fifth book into a series of historical novels about Alfred the Great during the 'Danish' invasions.
Your poem parallels perfectly.
I expect your 'three' answer to Father, Son, and Holy Ghost.
And so did Alfred's.
It seems too coincidental that you poem and my reading come together like this.
Have you read of Alfred?
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Brooke, I'm the fifth book into a series of historical novels about Alfred the Great during the 'Danish' invasions.
Your poem parallels perfectly.
I expect your 'three' answer to Father, Son, and Holy Ghost.
And so did Alfred's.
It seems too coincidental that you poem and my reading come together like this.
Have you read of Alfred?
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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I must confess I am five books behind you in my knowledge of Alfred, Lee. I am thrilled my poem coincides with your learning about this ruler, though :-) Thank you, my friend, for your generous sixth star :-) Brooke
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Actually, Brooke, the similarities between your poem and Alfred's defensive strategy are astounding. Even to the point where he fell asleep. Maybe I should stop reading about Alfred for a while.
but tell, me, did I get three right?
Please don't say Moe, Curly, and Larry.
L
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I had no particular three minions in mind - just thought it was funny that three more added to a million tipped the scales LOL
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that's what I get fro reading too much into things. Three is an interesting number. Because while Alfred and the Saxons were trying to invoke the power the Christian Trinity, the Danes where bound to twinings of the three weavers of fate.
Again, I'm sorry for reading beyond.
I should probably watch more TV.
L
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LOL - hey, I like being given deep thoughts :-) I'll steal them from you whenever I get the chance :-)
Comment from jaded831
He's learning early those in power usually take the credit. Your poem was a pleasure to read. You gave us a poem and story, two for the price of one. I enjoyed it from beginning to end. Once again excellent.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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He's learning early those in power usually take the credit. Your poem was a pleasure to read. You gave us a poem and story, two for the price of one. I enjoyed it from beginning to end. Once again excellent.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Jaded, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Kingsland
I really enjoyed reading this tall tale of an adventure in a small child's mind. It has some humor in it and it is told well in good flowing thoughts. I enjoyed reading this well written piece of poetic art... John
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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I really enjoyed reading this tall tale of an adventure in a small child's mind. It has some humor in it and it is told well in good flowing thoughts. I enjoyed reading this well written piece of poetic art... John
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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John, thank you so much for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
Comment from IndianaIrish
Brooke, your story poem is so much fun to read, and I think you had fun with this one, too. I love reading your poetry out loud as it always sounds so good. Best wishes in the contest, and I hope the King and his minions will help win over the committee.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Brooke, your story poem is so much fun to read, and I think you had fun with this one, too. I love reading your poetry out loud as it always sounds so good. Best wishes in the contest, and I hope the King and his minions will help win over the committee.
Smiles,
Karyn : )
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Karyn, thank you, and you're right, lots of fun :-) Brooke
Comment from Bobby Jo
My kids are into all those minions. This is super cute. Awe, the lazy days of summer by the sea. Sand Castles and imagination. Love it.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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My kids are into all those minions. This is super cute. Awe, the lazy days of summer by the sea. Sand Castles and imagination. Love it.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, Bobby Jo - Sawyer's second birthday part had a minion theme complete with cake and a guy in a minion costume LOL
Brooke :-)
Comment from ann marie mazz
good morning brooke
how adorable is this
very
how thought out is this
very
your words tell the story with clarity and ease
I very much enjoyed you sharing sawyer and the sea
both are a winning combination for certain
all is well within this tale and entry
always is your presentation marvelous
thank you for sharing
good luck with the contest
ann marie
PS
I'm certain sawyer is king sawyer in reality
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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good morning brooke
how adorable is this
very
how thought out is this
very
your words tell the story with clarity and ease
I very much enjoyed you sharing sawyer and the sea
both are a winning combination for certain
all is well within this tale and entry
always is your presentation marvelous
thank you for sharing
good luck with the contest
ann marie
PS
I'm certain sawyer is king sawyer in reality
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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ann marie, thank you so much :-) I appreciate your kind contest wishes and thoughtful comments. Brooke
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you are very welcome brooke
the credit belongs to you and your entry
enjoy the morning
ann marie
Comment from robina1978
Excellent one to promote your grandson to a king. Building his castle on the beach others do while he is sleeping. He is a smart grandson.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Excellent one to promote your grandson to a king. Building his castle on the beach others do while he is sleeping. He is a smart grandson.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Ine, thank you so much for your generous response to this Sawyer poem :-) Brooke
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well deserved Brooke.
Comment from elchupakabra
This was perhaps the saddest poem I've read from you yet, Brooke. I think this poem innocently captures everything wrong with the hierarchy that rules the modern world through the economic system. Great work on this piece, Brooke, thanks for sharing.
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This was perhaps the saddest poem I've read from you yet, Brooke. I think this poem innocently captures everything wrong with the hierarchy that rules the modern world through the economic system. Great work on this piece, Brooke, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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thank you, elchupakabra, thanks so much for your thoughtful reading of this satiric poem :-) Brooke
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Brooke,
Nice piece of Children Poetry containing the story with a moral.
Simple and matching the theme wording.
Smooth flow with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
"....If there's a moral to this tale, I guess that it must be,
it's best to be the one in charge than in the million-three."
Good Luck!
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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Hello Brooke,
Nice piece of Children Poetry containing the story with a moral.
Simple and matching the theme wording.
Smooth flow with lovely rhyming scheme and lively imagery.
"....If there's a moral to this tale, I guess that it must be,
it's best to be the one in charge than in the million-three."
Good Luck!
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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RP, thanks so much - glad you enjoyed the satiric moral :-) Brooke
Comment from Leineco
They say they pay
the guys at the top
for the ideas
that they spot.
King Sawyer seems
to understand
the power
of command.
To rule the world
have a plan -
and when it works
remind them
the difference was made
by a royal decree
to find the other
needed three.
:-)
Great story poem - impeccable meter and rhyming.
As always, your talent shines behind the story :-)
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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They say they pay
the guys at the top
for the ideas
that they spot.
King Sawyer seems
to understand
the power
of command.
To rule the world
have a plan -
and when it works
remind them
the difference was made
by a royal decree
to find the other
needed three.
:-)
Great story poem - impeccable meter and rhyming.
As always, your talent shines behind the story :-)
Comment Written 07-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2014
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what a delightful poetic response to my story poem, Leineco :-) Thanks so much for your poem and your generous sixth star. Brooke