Comment from DSMalott

Excellent

Clever and true.
Your stanza structure was good and made for great expression of language that captured the good intentions of so many in the spring to shed those pound. The Rhyme scheme was strong and consistent.
Loved it.

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 Comment Written 21-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2014

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Exceptional

Hi,

This is so cleverly crafted. You say what so many of us feel. An extra pound here and there, who notices? OOPS! That damn mirror noticed!

What's a body to do? Help, Dr. Phil! Bring me that damn lettuce leaf, and NO, put those Cheetos away!!

Six star love this! Yep, you get my first star of the week! (*?*)

Good luck in the contest

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*>*)

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2014

Thanks so much, Jax.

Love it when the very first review is a sixer!

Steve

reply by Jacqueline M Franklin on 21-Sep-2014

LOL! This just tickled my funny bone. And, the reality of it is so spot on! Great job.

Cheers