Expressing Myself
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Warmth"Writing my way out of depression / mental illness
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Comment from misscookie
I have no more stars to give.
This is a very emotional poem. I call this a food for thought poem.... meaning after you read it you go mm.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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I have no more stars to give.
This is a very emotional poem. I call this a food for thought poem.... meaning after you read it you go mm.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much misscookie, for this kind review! So glad my poem was food for thought:)
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You are very welcome, have a nice day.
I(love those poems that gives a reader food for thoughts.
Until next time.
Cookie
Comment from Dean Kuch
John 15:13 - Greater love hath no man than this, that a man lay down his life for his friends.
Ephesians 3:20 - Now unto him that is able to do exceeding abundantly above all that we ask or think, according to the power that worketh in us,
Luke 11:13 - If ye then, being evil, know how to give good gifts unto your children: how much more shall your heavenly Father give the Holy Spirit to them that ask him?
For many reasons these verses from scripture came to mind as I read your wonderfully written poem of selflessness and charity, playinaround. There were a few more, but I didn't want to keep you here all evening, LOL...
Well done, and good luck in the Faith Poetry Contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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John 15:13 - Greater love hath no man than this, that a man lay down his life for his friends.
Ephesians 3:20 - Now unto him that is able to do exceeding abundantly above all that we ask or think, according to the power that worketh in us,
Luke 11:13 - If ye then, being evil, know how to give good gifts unto your children: how much more shall your heavenly Father give the Holy Spirit to them that ask him?
For many reasons these verses from scripture came to mind as I read your wonderfully written poem of selflessness and charity, playinaround. There were a few more, but I didn't want to keep you here all evening, LOL...
Well done, and good luck in the Faith Poetry Contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Wow, Dean!!! I love the scriptures that you have shared. I feel so much joy in my heart right now. This review is just wonderful!!! and has made my night. Thank you!!!
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Well, you're very welcome, playinaround. I appreciate your enthusiastic reply. It always makes my night if I can help to make someone elses, LOL.
You are very welcome. :} Dean
Comment from flamingstar
Hmmm. Even though it's free verse this one has a rhythm all of its own and the last word/words in each stanza really make an impact on the reader.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Hmmm. Even though it's free verse this one has a rhythm all of its own and the last word/words in each stanza really make an impact on the reader.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Thank you flamingstar, for this kind and thoughtful review!
Comment from JPilcher
BAMMMMMM!!! WOW!!! Truly amazing!!! Your illustration and color choices for the background and font were HEAD ON. Overall presentation was spectacular, frankly!!
Especially loved this:
"Over me a homemade quilt
so warm and soft and safe it felt
holding me"
But then this - which I totally loved - I was totally not expecting:
"Upon her ragged body found -
the dirty, torn and weathered quilt
Warm and safe, she must have felt"
BAMMMMMM!!! ;) Jill
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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BAMMMMMM!!! WOW!!! Truly amazing!!! Your illustration and color choices for the background and font were HEAD ON. Overall presentation was spectacular, frankly!!
Especially loved this:
"Over me a homemade quilt
so warm and soft and safe it felt
holding me"
But then this - which I totally loved - I was totally not expecting:
"Upon her ragged body found -
the dirty, torn and weathered quilt
Warm and safe, she must have felt"
BAMMMMMM!!! ;) Jill
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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BAMMMMMMM!!! you've made my night with this fun and colorful review. So glad my poem made an impact on you!! Thank you a million!!!
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It was all you!! :)
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent w rite, playinaround, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the quilt that gives warmth and covering to lull someone into false dreaming. I enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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this is an excellent w rite, playinaround, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the quilt that gives warmth and covering to lull someone into false dreaming. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Thank you sweetwoodjax, for your insight, kindness and generous rating. You have made my night!
Comment from Aussie
Very nicely written piece; dreaming or foresight? Not sure that this is a Faith poem? Anyway, I liked your story/poem and the difference between you and the real person laying on the ground.
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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Very nicely written piece; dreaming or foresight? Not sure that this is a Faith poem? Anyway, I liked your story/poem and the difference between you and the real person laying on the ground.
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Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much Aussie!
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Did you read the rules for a Faith Contest entry?
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what did I miss?
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Huh?
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The contest calls for expressing faith. All I can make out is you had a dream about a quilt and then saw the old woman covered by it. Did you read the contest rules? Can you identify faith in the quilt? :-}
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Quilt = Gods love
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OK - lots of readers (like me) need to know that. Put it in your author's notes explaining what it means. :-) XX bless you.
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Sure thing. Have a wonderful night. And Bless you too:)
Comment from Liilia
What a touching poem, so gently and lovingly presented, weaving the dream, the reality and the compassion with a sad one on the street sleeping and covered with a torn and weathered quilt. It really is a beautiful insight which helps me to see the homeless ones (of which there are many in my area) as at least having dreams - that may be wonderful. What a hope, what a compassionate thing to express. Wishing you lots of luck in the contest. Also, thank you for using my drawing to illustrate this very special poem.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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What a touching poem, so gently and lovingly presented, weaving the dream, the reality and the compassion with a sad one on the street sleeping and covered with a torn and weathered quilt. It really is a beautiful insight which helps me to see the homeless ones (of which there are many in my area) as at least having dreams - that may be wonderful. What a hope, what a compassionate thing to express. Wishing you lots of luck in the contest. Also, thank you for using my drawing to illustrate this very special poem.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Liilia, your drawing is amazing! Was not supposed to write any author notes, so I couldn't thank you properly till now. I love this drawing and am so lucky to be able to display it with my poem.
You really understand my poem. Thank you for your keen insight and most generous review!!
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Thank you so much for the kind remarks. I'm also thrilled that you used my drawing for this poignant poem. Blessings & all good wishes, Liilia
Comment from Dawny53
You begin by taking your reader into your comfort zone, and end with the realization that those so unfortunate and suffering also relish in their own comfort zones.. however tattered they may be compared to our own. I also feel this poem is a huge wake up call to those of us who have forgotten to care about the homeless. Nice work, an excellent entry
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reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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You begin by taking your reader into your comfort zone, and end with the realization that those so unfortunate and suffering also relish in their own comfort zones.. however tattered they may be compared to our own. I also feel this poem is a huge wake up call to those of us who have forgotten to care about the homeless. Nice work, an excellent entry
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Comment Written 25-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much Dawny53. So glad you liked my poem and you have perfect insight as to what I was trying to say. Thank you again and have a great day!
Comment from Debra White
I love this.
I feel soothed reading it.
The format of your poem is great, I really like how you end each stanza - very effective.
Nice use of rhyme in places. Nice touches of alliteration.
The penultimate stanza I relate to - when a lovely dream stays with you and you relive its deliciousness during waking hours. Love the words revealing and coveting here.
Good luck in the contest.
Kind regards, Debra :)
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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I love this.
I feel soothed reading it.
The format of your poem is great, I really like how you end each stanza - very effective.
Nice use of rhyme in places. Nice touches of alliteration.
The penultimate stanza I relate to - when a lovely dream stays with you and you relive its deliciousness during waking hours. Love the words revealing and coveting here.
Good luck in the contest.
Kind regards, Debra :)
Comment Written 25-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Debra, you have really made my morning bright with your kind and insightful review! And thank you so much for the six stars! Hope you have a great day!!!