The Werewolf of Wall Street
Big business -- it's a dog eat dog world out there...77 total reviews
Comment from rod007
Excellent well-written story. The hair is 'coarse' not 'course,' an obvious typo. I hope this story will continue so we can savor some of the adventures of your hairy hero will get involved in. Well done, Tom.
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Excellent well-written story. The hair is 'coarse' not 'course,' an obvious typo. I hope this story will continue so we can savor some of the adventures of your hairy hero will get involved in. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2015
Comment from Drew Delaney
Sounds like it would be some people would love. I am not one, but it's not the genre I care to read. I think there is a fairly big audience out there that love this sort of thing. So go for it, if it is what you want to do. Go with your heart, Dean. Because that is your thing. Right? Drew
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Sounds like it would be some people would love. I am not one, but it's not the genre I care to read. I think there is a fairly big audience out there that love this sort of thing. So go for it, if it is what you want to do. Go with your heart, Dean. Because that is your thing. Right? Drew
Comment Written 13-Jan-2015
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Abi Word: inane/insane. I drew into myself the power of the sea and am both tornado and tsunami!" I drew into myself the power of the sea, and am both tornado and tsunami!" Two complete independent sentences. Add the coma. Nit picky stuff, I know. But I must offer criticism as well as praise. Hildebrand and her mother Hilda(,) ran to the queen and dropped to their knees near her. Hildebrand and her mother Hilda ran to the queen and dropped to their knees near her. Coma is not necessary. Wee things I realize. Abi Word shows egg shells; two words, or egg-shells. Eggshell works with singular but not plural. I'm trying to become a better reviewer. Not an attack on this masterpiece! Trying to be helpful. I make these errors. "Does anyone remember who taught you children this intricate skill? I like the word intricate, something unique in itself. Pania examined the tapestry, she traced Molach, herself() and searched for the two babies she knew should be there. Pania examined the tapestry, she traced Molach, herself and searched for the two babies she knew should be there. Simply add a comma, two independent clause that can stand alone. Other than this, not much more to speak of. A well penned script full of excitement. Attractive pictures pleasant to the eye. Good imagination exerted. Nice dialogue and structure. This is worthy on a six. Count your doubloon, Spooky! Spook-a-doo... boo!
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Abi Word: inane/insane. I drew into myself the power of the sea and am both tornado and tsunami!" I drew into myself the power of the sea, and am both tornado and tsunami!" Two complete independent sentences. Add the coma. Nit picky stuff, I know. But I must offer criticism as well as praise. Hildebrand and her mother Hilda(,) ran to the queen and dropped to their knees near her. Hildebrand and her mother Hilda ran to the queen and dropped to their knees near her. Coma is not necessary. Wee things I realize. Abi Word shows egg shells; two words, or egg-shells. Eggshell works with singular but not plural. I'm trying to become a better reviewer. Not an attack on this masterpiece! Trying to be helpful. I make these errors. "Does anyone remember who taught you children this intricate skill? I like the word intricate, something unique in itself. Pania examined the tapestry, she traced Molach, herself() and searched for the two babies she knew should be there. Pania examined the tapestry, she traced Molach, herself and searched for the two babies she knew should be there. Simply add a comma, two independent clause that can stand alone. Other than this, not much more to speak of. A well penned script full of excitement. Attractive pictures pleasant to the eye. Good imagination exerted. Nice dialogue and structure. This is worthy on a six. Count your doubloon, Spooky! Spook-a-doo... boo!
Comment Written 13-Jan-2015
Comment from lakeport
The Werewolf of Wall street, indeed many got very rich an many lost there life savings, I never like Wall street, its like going to a casino. I enjoyed reading the story, God bless you. Lakeport.
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The Werewolf of Wall street, indeed many got very rich an many lost there life savings, I never like Wall street, its like going to a casino. I enjoyed reading the story, God bless you. Lakeport.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2015
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh my goodness, Dean! That was one really horrific story! I think it would be a really good idea to write that novel, you have the talent and the knowledge, so why not? You have nothing to lose, and everything to gain. I would love to read it. (at breakfast time!) Good luck in the contest, it's brilliant! xsx Sandra
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Oh my goodness, Dean! That was one really horrific story! I think it would be a really good idea to write that novel, you have the talent and the knowledge, so why not? You have nothing to lose, and everything to gain. I would love to read it. (at breakfast time!) Good luck in the contest, it's brilliant! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 13-Jan-2015
Comment from rjpurdy
Brilliant piece of prose Dean. Technically flawless. This is so readable because of technic and style. This could be a marvelous expanded work. Intriguing and intelligent. I say go for it buddy. Rod
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Brilliant piece of prose Dean. Technically flawless. This is so readable because of technic and style. This could be a marvelous expanded work. Intriguing and intelligent. I say go for it buddy. Rod
Comment Written 13-Jan-2015
Comment from GWHARGIS
Well, I think it is a go. You have an uncanny way of scaring the hell out of me. I mean that as a true compliment. I liked how the hypnotized man repeated his instructions and the then the smirk. Can't wait for a silver bullet to seek this guy out. LOL. Greta story. Just enough of a teaser to make me want more. Gretchen
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Well, I think it is a go. You have an uncanny way of scaring the hell out of me. I mean that as a true compliment. I liked how the hypnotized man repeated his instructions and the then the smirk. Can't wait for a silver bullet to seek this guy out. LOL. Greta story. Just enough of a teaser to make me want more. Gretchen
Comment Written 13-Jan-2015
Comment from Tomes Johnston
I saw the movie all right. It was absolutely fantastic. I remember one scene in particular. It was the one where Leonardo got stoned and drive home. He thought that he drove hone safely, but thrashed the car. I remember a similar scene when I was young. I got drunk and drove through a hedge. I was pleasantly surprised the next morning though, as the car escaped unscathed. Luckily, it was just light bushes. I have learned my lesson though. Well done yet again.
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I saw the movie all right. It was absolutely fantastic. I remember one scene in particular. It was the one where Leonardo got stoned and drive home. He thought that he drove hone safely, but thrashed the car. I remember a similar scene when I was young. I got drunk and drove through a hedge. I was pleasantly surprised the next morning though, as the car escaped unscathed. Luckily, it was just light bushes. I have learned my lesson though. Well done yet again.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2015
Comment from royowen
A beautifully gruesome article Dean, you have a massive propensity to scare the living day lights out of people, and completely confuse you poor pastor! Great little concoction Dean, very imaginative, this was more in line with a " Monty Python" theme than anything, I love the nerdy guy responding to the call, and jumping out the window, well done, mate, enjoyed the browse, well done, blessings, Roy.
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A beautifully gruesome article Dean, you have a massive propensity to scare the living day lights out of people, and completely confuse you poor pastor! Great little concoction Dean, very imaginative, this was more in line with a " Monty Python" theme than anything, I love the nerdy guy responding to the call, and jumping out the window, well done, mate, enjoyed the browse, well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2015
Comment from JanetRussek
Okay, I was reading this story. The phone rang and I almost fell out of my chair. I'm gonna have to stop reading your stuff.
I saw "The Wolf of Wall Street" I thought it was great.
Warm Regards,
Janet
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Okay, I was reading this story. The phone rang and I almost fell out of my chair. I'm gonna have to stop reading your stuff.
I saw "The Wolf of Wall Street" I thought it was great.
Warm Regards,
Janet
Comment Written 13-Jan-2015